Afterword vs. Puertoricanelly
 

15 min and countin

Ill make you love me like X's and O's/
im tha king and ill fuck yur bitch just to let you know/

how can you win a battle win you rock Abercrombie and fitch and american Eagle/
trying to beat me nigga is illegal/

Ill rip up ur body and expose your skeleton/
blend up ur remains wit ma rimes and sell you as gellatin (Jello)/

and no i dont mean bill cosby, cuz ur rimes sound worse then dat niggaz voice/
its a blessin youve survived through half dis battle, you should be in a state of rejoice/

Afterword go ahead & give me all the excuses how ur bitten rimes are really written by U/
Fuck 15 min ill give you a whole extra week to post and yur shit still wont go thru!!/

Cuz ur own computer knows when stupid shit is being posted/
you could be da blackest brotha in the world & ill still leave ya roasted/

im done spittin just waitin for u Afta..... G/L

well hot damn it looks like u stuck in a jam, like jelly
u must be a lunatic thinkin u can compare-wit-me, u wanna be nelly

wen i challenged u i knew u were defeated already, u get no respect
u must have gotten threatend wit a tec, and fled east from da west

well that a -test, that destiny manifests, itself
you were soft so u left, now da west will be responsilble for snatchin yo last breath

its break time here at work so ima bout to smoke dat kali kill
u came thinkin in hollywood u would get a deal, but now u glad we let u live

that shit iz short but i gotta smash out
hopefully we get some votes, even if not in my favor

afterword disperse divert blirts to quench ya thirst

u sorry asss helll man LOL Easy win for PRnelly UPPIN VOTESS! 1

Puertoricanelly BreakDown

ll make you love me like X's and O's/
im tha king and ill fuck yur bitch just to let you know/
Okay Flow. No Punchline. Worst Bar In History

how can you win a battle win you rock Abercrombie and fitch and american Eagle/
trying to beat me nigga is illegal/
You Fuckin Suck

rip up ur body and expose your skeleton/
blend up ur remains wit ma rimes and sell you as gellatin (Jello)/
Okay I Guess

and no i dont mean bill cosby, cuz ur rimes sound worse then dat niggaz voice/
its a blessin youve survived through half dis battle, you should be in a state of rejoice/
Please, Please Get A PunchLine!!!!!

IM STOPPIN THERE... WORST BATTLE EVER...IM NOT HATING ON YA'LL SHIT BUT LEARN PUNCHLINES... READ SOME OF MY SHIT..4 REAL.. STUDY IT... I VOTE Afterword ...BETTER PUNCHES, AND FLOW..OVER

Vote:Puert he came stronger in his verse he had better punchlines and better vocabulary

philly just "regulated" on his punches
now this harmless venom says he had better punches lol

this battle is pretty weak i must say myself, its a quikie

however i dont agree that only puches win battles
beacuse my flow spuratic, I will punch, slam, and cut ya

Very True But U Need Some Punches In A Battle. Thats Wat Makes It A Battle...

man yall are sum dumb mark ass niggaz how u gona compare me wit someone who uses East and west like 4 tiems in the same 2 bars. thats some bull Sh*t.

a puertoricanelly look at ur pm's and hit me up with an response

i like them both, their style is...out therr but i think if Afterword had a lil mo time, hen he might of actually took this

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

man i really dont no, yall need sum practice, but ima give this one to my man nelly, nuthin personal, just need sum work

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

yo just drop a vote
we know this shit is lame, and quik
if u wanna dispute da skillz den holla at me in front lines
uppin
peace

yo just drop a vote
we know this shit is lame, and quik
if u wanna dispute da skillz den holla at me in front lines
uppin
peace

^^^tru
so afterword took it cuz hiz flowed betta...like they mentioned ya'll
need to work on ya'll punchlines but it wuz quick so i can c how that
wuz jus kinda ran ova
good vocab on both parts i liked that
Vote-AFTERWORD...but barely

HEY YA"LL GO VOTE
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117602
YoungStar* vs. J-Mob

puertoricanelly- won- hard shit that was better than afterword- not really any punchline lines but nice flow- nice line about jello.
Afterword- lost- keep trying i like the nelly line- don't say you going to win unless you beat that person already.

yo yo yo
uppin
end this please
rock da vote!

yo my vote afterword.................

this was a weak ass battle but puertoricanelly had weak ass fuckin punches.........and wack ass metas.........well both did but afterwords wus betta...........puert that x and o line was wack man n u know it...............n afterword ur last line was wack too....but all around if u read them both carefully u can see afterword cam harder....no harsh feelings though puert just prolly wasnt ur day.........

my vote=Afterword

yo check the date on this battle
i dont even remember writin this wak shit
help us close this
i will return da favor
peace
uppin

verse breakdown


Ill make you love me like X's and O's/
im tha king and ill fuck yur bitch just to let you know/
2/10 WAS THIS SUPPOSE TO BE A PUNCH.

how can you win a battle win you rock Abercrombie and fitch and american Eagle/
trying to beat me nigga is illegal/
3/10 IT WAS HARD BUT HOW DO YOU KNOW HE WEARS THAT
IT RHYMES BUT DONT MAKE SINCE

Ill rip up ur body and expose your skeleton/
blend up ur remains wit ma rimes and sell you as gellatin (Jello)/
5/10 PROBABLY THE BEST LINE.
and no i dont mean bill cosby, cuz ur rimes sound worse then dat niggaz voice/
its a blessin youve survived through half dis battle, you should be in a state of rejoice/
2/10 AND NO I DONT MEAN BILL COSBY , OFCOURSE YOU SAID GELLATIN HELLO!
Afterword go ahead & give me all the excuses how ur bitten rimes are really written by U/
Fuck 15 min ill give you a whole extra week to post and yur shit still wont go thru!!/
2/10 PLEASE EXPLAIN THIS ,...I DONT GET IT
Cuz ur own computer knows when stupid shit is being posted/
you could be da blackest brotha in the world & ill still leave ya roasted/
4/10 OKAY YOU TRYING TO HARD TO COME WITH A PERSONAL. HOW YOU KNOW IF HE IS BLACK DID YOU ASK HIM?

therer were no multies. the flow was a little off here and there. and you need to work on your structure. and lyrical content. and your punches were so weak. elevate seriously. take my advice

after word

well hot damn it looks like u stuck in a jam, like jelly
u must be a lunatic thinkin u can compare-wit-me, u wanna be nelly
6/10 OKAY YOU CAME WITH A PERSONAL
wen i challenged u i knew u were defeated already, u get no respect
u must have gotten threatend wit a tec, and fled east from da west
4/10 THIS WAS NOT ALL THAT GREAT. BUT PROBABLY BETTER THEN EVERY LINE PNELLY WRITTEN
well that a -test, that destiny manifests, itself
you were soft so u left, now da west will be responsilble for snatchin yo last breath
5/10 I DONT GET IT.
its break time here at work so ima bout to smoke dat kali kill
u came thinkin in hollywood u would get a deal, but now u glad we let u live
4/10 WEAK...WAS THAT A PUNCH

no multies, one personal, vocab was okay. structure similar to nelly, punches werent that strong but good enough to beat nelly

v/afterword

yo thanks 4 da feedback yall
this is madd old like a month
one more vote will close it out
and ill hit ur battle if u poll
peace
uppin

aiight im gonna have to say nelly took this i wasnt feelin either verse that much but neither came hard a bad battle in my opinion nelly has a couple goos punches and wordplay and as did afterword but i know afterword is better than that and nelly edged u out by just a lil......

my vote: nelly

afterword gets my vote.i didnt lik nellys at all.bad punchlines,flow,opening and ending.i didnt like afterwords much either but this can go down as one of the worst battles ever.

Oh my GOD puertorican man, you said that I need complexity? You can't even SPELL man. This was an embarassment, you're rhymes are so basic and there are NO punches, you might as well be rhyming about a cat that wears a hat.

Better luck next time wangster, my vote goes to the other spitter