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hey give me feedback tell me if is good or how i could make it better ok here it goes
When i spit my Lyricks ya'll bitches be tripping/
ya'll think what i be saying is only hating/
you assume you're the best when you still havent passed the test/
i'm telling you this shit cuz i've been through that shit/
yeah i'm new in this shit but i'm not new in the game/
so don't be hatin when you're reading my shit just remember you aint got shit/
like 2pac said "every step would be death until you're the last nigga left/
peace and keep it G

for one dawg TRIPPING dosnt rhyem wit HATING

TEST and SHIT dont rhy;mes
GAME and SHIT dont rhyme i dont get what your doing dawg are you drunk or somptin

I Need To JoiN a GrOup/Crew oR Summin lol

hey so what should i put

wow you really suck bitch ass cant rhym sorry to be honest

its garbage nigga!!!!!!!!!!!!!

check this one out
I come swiftly and easy bitches are amazed when they see me/
i leave bitches and hoes pleasing and asking for more/
while you only got one bitch that is fucking with another nigga, and its not you bitch!/
you probably do'nt understand this bitches well i do/
i understand this bitches like if they were the ABC"s yo/
thug you need to reflex do'nt get too into a bitch/
all they do is leave you for another nigga that is wearing a ecko shirt and some nike's/
it aint worth that shit/
i'm telling you one thing though fuck bitches and leave bitches forget all them bitches they're just mothefucking hoes/
all i'm saying is advise thugs take it for granted.

Look i do'nt know but what do you think its not done yet, but i need some more ideas, tell me some :huh:

sorry man but im burtaly honset..both were wack..itjust to simple...plus you bite the 2pac rhyme...u cant use some elses line in ur rhyme man u will get no respect 4 it....so evaluate....no beef...just being honest..na wot i mean :D

garbage........................................... ..................

get more complex, cuz it sounds like an elementry school rap.

it doesnt even sound like rap...........

sound like your talking to someone.......

ya'll just hating because i talked bull about you guys first

gambino, elementry school kids cant rap.

hmmm where to begin your wack as fuck and need to elevate be more creative and dont listen to the hate for real just step up look at some of the tutorials on here and then keep at it

"doint get mad or hate me its not my fault your mom tried to rape me"
Krackmiitens

let me say this and this may da ja voo but u suck and i didnt hear you talkin bull. go to the open mic and insulteded in there this is not the place

you got a problem with rhymin or something....and u curse to much

dude dont you have any dr. susse books in ya house damn

Man both of them dont even rhyme, they didnt have no flow. Is this a joke or what?

u fukin suck none of ur shit flowed or rhymed i suggest u work on ur skillz alot more

Gunit wana battle

yeah

Put this in the Open Mic thread.

http://community.rapbattles.com/forumdisplay.php?f=5