Maku Jaiiliin vs. DisasterPiece420
 

here's the rules, must post by 1pm central standard time, tomorrow

8 line minimum
16 line max
no crew votes,
no dickriding votes,
no recycling,
no biting,
no plagurism, etc

check in DisasterPiece

Checcccccccccccccckin In' ....

Heres My Verse...

Yo, It's Like I Serve Minds, Kinda Like Brains In "Lunch-Lines",/
This Kidd Is So Whack, He Spits Then Has To Explain His "Punch-Lines",/
I'm Slittin' With Precision, It's Like I'm Deadly And Smitin' Surgeons,'/
Call JaiiLiin Madonna, Cuz Im Rippin Him Like A "Virgin",/
Rhymes Is Hurtin, I Leave Emcees Cold And Hard Like FlintStones,/
Spits Owned, He Always On His Knees Giving A New Meaning To "Down-Syndrome",/
This Bitch Couldn't Cum Hot, Even If His Dick Spits Lava,/
Owning Him So Bad, You'd Think I Was This Kiids Father,/
I Could Waste My Breath Instead I Wont Stress,/
I Couldn't Give A Fuck-Less You Wont "Taste-Success",/
Unless You Come To Battle I Tell You It Don't Matter,/
Holla Back Homie Then Ill Leave Ya "Shattered",/

Post Your Shit Playa................. When Ever.. Either Today Or Tomorrow.........

If you Get The Chance... Post Today Playa If OtherWise Its Cool.

^^^This is a much better verse than the one you spit against Gambino............It's what I'm used to from you:)

Lol Enygma' Why Thank You !!!! Appriciate It' ...!! :)

here we go
 

nice pre-writ, your ctrl button works excellently.
I AM WHAT YOU CAN'T BE

I hold nothing but weaponry, you don't want mics//
This rap's the nastiest act for a small snack, like anallingus for a klondike//
I'll let my snake LoOse 4rm It$ BAsKe+,//
fuck your Sister and mom to death, then pull R kelly MaNEUverS IN CAsKets//
I'll Compose Disaster pieces, New T0 tHiS mALe//
Leave him surprised I got him on lock, like he's Martha Stewart In Jail//
Science can't catch up with with me, So Correctly, i Could NEveR bE cLoNeD//
I'm like DisasterPiece's Cd when it drops, I could never be owned//
I'll Take a beautiful shit on YOuR tUrf//
Go back in time, and get brain from Your mom till she forgets the planning stages of YoUr BIrtH
Stop rappin, We don't Want you//
My Super Sperm will leave me and his girl with more kids, than DisasterPiece's Tonsils//


My weakest verse just ate you, you'll flip when you see me//
I didn't cum Hot enough, So I'll have yo' bitch slip me the v.d.//


aight first to five as usual lets go

Uppin 4 votes y'all Damn! Would Appreciate it very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

KNOW FIRST OFF THIS SHIT WAS ILL TO THE BOTH IT A HARD CHOICE BUT ILL TRY maku that shit was hot i like the punches tht you drop but ur verse was hard to read

masterpiece may i say that you lived up to your name cause that shit was it was hot and easy to read and let not start on your punches

so my vote go to masterpiece

yeah i like both mcees on this battle cuz they both came wit some type punch lines and that's wut i judge battles on so here it is:

DisasterPeice:U had some lines that caught my eyes and my favorite one wuz "Spits Owned, He Always On His Knees Giving A New Meaning To "Down-Syndrome", i felt that one fa sho

Maku JaiiLiin:Yo lines wuz on point like two lines intersecting and my favorite two wuz "fuck your Sister and mom to death, then pull R kelly MaNEUverS IN CAsKets", it wuz personal but it got tha job done,and my other favorite becuz how u flipped his line sayin that he owned u wuz "I'm like DisasterPiece's Cd when it drops, I could never be owned"

so that bein said and how i judge my battles i give this vote to Maku

vote on this battle http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117079

not a bad battle...sum aight lines on both parts....disaster..u would have won this easy if kept your puches consistant..u had a nice start but should have built on it from there...
my vote goes 2 maku... his punches were consistant
peace

My vote goes to disaster just cuz she rocked dis dude honestly you can either tell maku jaillin verse is a pre write or a bite cuz its all directed toward a male and you can clearly tell that d p is a girl so basically he had no personals vote DP

Lmfao' ... Thanx For The Vote!!!! ...

Still

Uppppppin 4 Votes Ya'll.....................

Drop 'Em Here!!!!!!!!!!! Appriciate 'Em

Tight Battle In Two Ways.On One Part I Saw A Lot Of Comlexity & Punches.On The Other Part,Only One Person Used Them Both Correctly And To Their Advangtage.The Punches Were Stronger And The Metas Were Tight Too.Came Strong And Ended About The Same.Some Lines Could Have Been Tightened Up A Bit But Still Disaster Takes It.Maku Had Some Good Concepts For Punches & Metas But Had Trouble With The Delivery.Maybe A Few Of His Punches Were Weak But Not All.Id Say You Need To Work On Your Delivery A Bit.

Vote-DisasterPiece420

Dapz Cell Appriciate The Vote!! :) .....

and Still Uppppppppppppin 4 Votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

my verse obviously is not a prewrit or a bite, because it is specific to her verse, and if you'd have read both verses, you know it's not a prewrit.(Calling her a Male was an Ongoing ugly dissin itself, i should've known people wouldn't pick up on that.)

but rap the verse a little faster and think of JadaKiss's form of rapping, and it fits. The stop and go style.

Uppin btw

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Ya'll Drop Some Votes On This Battle' ...!! There Highly Appriciated!!!


-Thanks-

Drop Some Votes In This Shit!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DAMN People

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aight check it

DisasterPiece420
flow-7/10
WordUsage-6/10
Punchlines-6/10
Creativity-6/10
overall-25/40

Maku Jaiiliin
Flow-6/10
WordUsage-6/10
punchlines-5/10
Creativity-7/10
overall-24/40

close playa...btw vote on this fo an old friend PM mee if you want/...and Maku...this wasnt a fave or hate vote aight...you got potential

vote DP

plz vote on this shit

sorry dp, but i gotta go with that other dude with the funny name. I mean, he had more shit maken me laugh than you did, and it wasnt just funny, but a funny punch, his wordplay was better, and he could have used your flow cause his was kinda wack but, i give this one to that guy with the funny name im not going to try to sppell (get it, i can't even spell, spell)

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=118285

forgot this lil thing above ma head again :huh: <=me

Alright And Uppppppppppppppppppppppin 4 Votes On This Shit!!!!

C'Mon Ya'll DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!! Whats It Take To Get Some Votes On This Shit

dp one again had sick punchz and personalz and structure some of the hottest shit i seen u drop but u needed 2

other dude dont even wanna try an spell yo name eitha u went hard 2 i like that style had tite punchz and personalz lil off on structure an a few barz didnt rhyme but it waz nice

vote/dp
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daaaaaaaamn good battle good battle. Both of you guys were even except the fact that Maku didn't ANY good personals or sound structure. i was scared that maybe Disasterpiece had fell off but now i know she's tight still so my vote goes to her.

O BTW MJ DP is a female (a fire one at that)