Afterword VS Atticus
 

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yo yo
just checkin in
the mic is in ya hand playa

I'll let u know
that I'm especially different
when I leave you dead for show head cracked
legs crippled in an instant
'encodin' my 'flows' so 'encrypted'
couldn't be 'broke' by 'imhotep' the 'egyptian'
Who could it be afterword?
I spit wit 'golden style'
Im semi new to this tryin nigga's
knowin that it aint worth while
pop with my new 'type 1'
anew my 'rhythm' of how I orchestrate guns
remember I got my glock 'on shoot'
like 'afterwards' 'on run'
cock waste U son and loot
nigga 'afterwards' U done

shit can't think...

wut up
u takin a long time playa
must be brewin some hot shit
ima bout to quik key and post
u folow my lead

wut up
u takin a long time playa
must be brewin some hot shit
ima bout to quik key and post
u folow my lead

=my bad
didnt c that

i was orderin some 1986 jordans over the net...nah nigga i wasn't brewin it takes me 25 minutes to write cuz i aint used 2 my writin yet... but take ya time...

I have a bad habbit of flowing spuratic, and it may get hazordous/
but no need for that shit, i can get some old lines out of the attic,
to beat Atticus//

look at us both, lame with no wins at all
so ima slap yo ass around like we playin pin-ball///

Afterword is callin out shots, like a movie director
this cat thinks he got skillz////
but i will, reveal, the real like a truth detector/////

so go ahead and assume ya better than me
b/c i believe im the best on this post//////
but i soon found its not "tru skillz", that earns votes
they like the comedian rapper, who can roast the most///////

thats all i got out of all of their fuckin comments////////
so now im spewing lyrical vomit,
b/c they favor punchlines, over content/////////

m poking yur eyes out
with my pen and pencil/10
b/c my lyrics are suspenseful
and precise like a stencil/

so if they give u this shit
then ima be a biologist//
move into ya nucleus, scruple-less
open every cell in(inside) Atticus, just to get back at ya!///

peace

nah i won't win i haven't even formed my style yet... i got alot of sentance structure type shit to analyze my rhymes so i can magnify my skill 2 the fullest. but i aint got the patience for that... u won i admit, much props

i like yur honesty
and honestly who cares who wins
u c my record(0-7)
wins dont=skillz
just keep doin ya thang, u got potential

yo but with all that said
lets get some comments up in dis bizzzatch
uppin

oh 4 sho nigga, imma rap wit my mind in the dark, its more complicated that way. its a good thing for alot of people that im gonna stay this way....keep doin ya thing 2 nigga.

I'm votin for afterword...you both did your thing...but i was feelin afterwords verse more..anyways....since i voted for you..it'd be nice if you could vote on my first and latest battle...go here http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=118449

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

okay i saw about the afterword saying he had a (0-7) record how the fuck that happened i dont know.... but with that all aside...
AFTERWORD ripped atticus a new asshole... thing is atticus was uncoordinated he seems too new.. for example... this was atticus best line...
"encodin' my 'flows' so 'encrypted'
couldn't be 'broke' by 'imhotep' the 'egyptian'"

but afterword ahd many to choose from he chose complex and organized rhyme structures for example this line by afterword..

"I have a bad habbit of flowing spuratic, and it may get hazordous/
but no need for that shit, i can get some old lines out of the attic,
to beat Atticus//"

he showed structure and what i lveo the best about any rappers style is the major usage of internal rhyme and slant rhymes shows the person is thinking and has a verbose vocab similar to mines...habit,spuratic,hazourdous,attic,atticus all are part of the internal or slant rhyme..
Therefore i give this vote to afterword...apologize for the long explanation but trying to so it all by the books.

blah.. this was an one sided battle... atticus.. ELEVATE BADLY... you need to battle more often against some top competition N' shit.. get ya rhymes n complexitiy up along with your creativeness... you honestly.. were garbage.. did ya thing.. but just ehhh... nothin' thatg i would like to hear offline.. afterwordz... not too bad, yet not all that great.. u had maybe one nice line outta ya whole verse.. wasn't feelin' it too much but you took the win fam lay... both y'all keep doin' ya thing...



Vote: Afterwordz



SoLo Whun...

no doubt nigga afterword takes this battle off rip... uppin...

nah archetype, i'd b the worst in the elevated lines

yo i aint jus sayin this b/c he voted in my favor
but VC droped some ill comments
most lames on here cant recognize the complexities of a lyricist
with different literary elements inscribed within the rhymes
gud shyt folk

upppin

have a bad habbit of flowing spuratic, and it may get hazordous/
but no need for that shit, i can get some old lines out of the attic,
to beat Atticus//

i think the opener killed it. after word im suprised u havent won b4. That was a good job and u improving. Mice flow and metas

atticus ya flow was iight. need more metas and punches

u both need to make it a lil more personal

good battle tho

vote afterword



hit this battle pls
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=118374

yo we got more comments than votes
i appreciate yur concern
but can we end this please
peace
uppin

yo we got more comments than votes
i appreciate yur concern
but can we end this please
peace
uppin

this was a decent battle, atticus if you keep practing you could be a good emcee, its all good though cuz everybody has to start somewhere, so biggups son keep doin' u.
Yo afterword that was a tight verse son, I liked your word usage and how you described this forum you was on point. I also liked how u used your multies, fire son.
Flow: After
Structure: After
Word usage: After
Punches: even
Wordplay: After
Multies: After
Yo, y'all holla back peep it out son
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=118131

oh shit my fault I forgot to post my vote
Vote: After

seems like the guy above isnt the only one to forget to poll
lets get sum votes
uppin

yo leave a poll vote
and ill be sure to check out ya battle
peace
uppin

yo drop a few lines and a vote,
and ill be sure to hit ur battle up.
gud lookkin out

peace

come on yall help us close this shyt and move on
i will check yall shyt fo sho
peace
uppin

yo wauts krakin yall
please help a brah out
help us close this old battle so we can move on
and we will hit yurs
uppin

3-0
this is a k.o.
shouldnt it be closed
if not
help me close it(vote)

Afterword

Open 8/10
CLose 9/10
Rhymes 8/10
Flow 7/10
Punches 8/10
40/50

Acctuis

Open 7/10
Close 7/10
Rhymes 6/10
Flow 8/10
Punches 6/10
34/50

jea...dis battle was wun sided...att dunn u gota learn da battle rap not sayin it 2 be funny but u do

opener-after...att ya shit didn't ryhme and da structure was fukked up
structure-after..
punchlines-after..hands down other dude aint have nun
creativity-after of course
personals-umm i didn't really see nun from both of u
enjoyed-after...cuzz he came hard pause nahmean punches was landin could of came with some personals but he aint really need..

my vote-after
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120799

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120132
^^^^RETURN DA FAVOR YA'LL