lman_1528 vs. accomplishment
 

deadlines:
battles go up monday
check in by wedsday
verses due by thrusday
votes due by sunday
rules:
no dick riding
no crew votes
no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd
no feeding off of other guys verse
bar limits:
4 bar min.
16 bar max.

aight check in dis shit

aight checking in.............................

Uh oh shits boutta get reckless

yea this should be a pretty good battle................. aight this shits goin 2 be hot.........

aight just about 2 drop my shit i think hes not goin 2 show........ so i am dropping only a couple of lines of weak shit.......

Give the boy a chance at winning this battle//
At least give him a line minimum he can handle//
Unlike my skills, something that you will never defeat//
You might as well try to defeat Mohammad Ali//
Before you battle me, cuz I ain’t no wanna be//
I am ones of the realist MC’s, one of the best//
Your like “Good Will” the way your giving things away for free, like this battle//
You could atleast show up next time you decide to rap battle//

YO yo what up faggot....can't hanld me....hahhaha


...yo I'can't be handled...respected world wide...i dont know who dis hoe is...
yo we could both disapeer...come back and see who remain to be noticed.../

underestimating what you hardly saw...cuz i'm showin up like tits at mardi-gras...
kid just learnin to walk...but my punches can make you hardly crawl.../

accomp known to hit'em...commin at ya xp style not dis ms dos prompt system...
dissmiss em'...elevatin like david blaine...sky high i'm known to lift em.../

ya rhymes is "soar" that don't mean ya elevatin....
airplanes couldn't lift ya level higher than mine...i'm everest slangin..../

me an you compared is like pizza wit out sauce...just half da flavor...
even if ya ass owned mead notebook company...you couldn't have half my paper.../

ya feel my rhymes...beakya from cannibus to those plastic nines....
spit a 4 minute keystyle...but i could killya in half da time.../


new style yo....old rb reminicint no more stretched

that was some good shit but u spit late....................

8 minutes... i dont see why thats gonna be a problem....

w.e. we'll let dirtboy decide.....................

i got on at twelve o clock and wrote some shit as soon as i could... i think dirta boi is gnna allow it cuz its thursday in cali still

w.e. yo we will see 2 morrow when eva dirtboy goes online next............. but w.e. i am out of here peace..........

acomplishment took this easy
im not even comenting on imans verse its plain to see he had good structure good flow
better vocab and much better punches than iman

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vs 2bad
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=120828

Easily goes to accomplishment, and here's why.

Iman-

Structure: I saw maybe 1 bar that rhymed in the whole shit, the rest of them didn't, and you tryed to close it wit rhymin' the same exact word. Come on man, U gotta do betta than that. Punches: None. Personals: None. Opener: Weak. Closer: Sucked Ass. Multis: None

Fav Line:
None

Accomplishment-

Structure: Solid. Punches: Very Solid Personals: Aight. One about Cannibus and Plastic Nines was good. Multis: Saw a few, only one need to win the category anyway. Opener: I liked that shit, very original. Closer: Very last line was kinda EEhhhhh, but the first line of the bar, like I said, was a pretty good personal.

Fav Line:

...yo I'can't be handled...respected world wide...i dont know who dis hoe is...
yo we could both disapeer...come back and see who remain to be noticed

Iman, just work on the shit I said. Accomplishment, everything was aight, A lil' too much filler I think, but It was still pretty good.

Vote: Accomplishment takes this shit easy.

Iman u came a lil weak, you didnt make use of the line limit
you shoulda dropeda lil more.

plus you used the same word twice...thas weak

Your like “Good Will” the way your giving things away for free, like this battle//
You could atleast show up next time you decide to rap battle//

accomp didnt come hard at all but easily enought ot take the win

ya feel my rhymes...beakya from cannibus to those plastic nines....
spit a 4 minute keystyle...but i could killya in half da time.../

vote acc

Iman you performance came good but it seemed you didn't care about winning this battle...Your punches were week and i dont think is good to rhyme the same word twice.

Comp had a C- verse, but still took the win.
"Mardi gras" line was good and the "plastic nine" was also good.

vote~comp

u never use the same word twice that kinda destroys he flow only eprson i know that can use the same word twice are sean paul beenie man wayne wonder...connection reggae music always rhymes twice not regualr rap artist.... the onyl regular rap artist that can get away wit it is twista. cuz u dont understand anythign he says anyway...

but you came a lil weak unconcerned liek u knew u had accomp beat already but thast not the turn of event..

accomplish came out on top and won this battle... even thought he coudla done bette tooo but this vote goes too
accomplishment

My Vote
 

Give the boy a chance at winning this battle//
At least give him a line minimum he can handle//
Didn't really rhyme...wack punch...
Unlike my skills, something that you will never defeat//
You might as well try to defeat Mohammad Ali//
Blah...no rhyme again...
Before you battle me, cuz I ain’t no wanna be//
I am ones of the realist MC’s, one of the best//
Hmm....tried sum multi's...but they dont mean nething if they done help a punch...and they didnt help a punch...
Your like “Good Will” the way your giving things away for free, like this battle//
You could atleast show up next time you decide to rap battle//
finally its over...

Okay...You need to work on punches mainly....get punches first before working on anyhting else...work on using personals....just go to tutorials cause you need help in everything....especially rhyme scheme....simple as that....On a scale of 1 to 10 i'd give your verse a 1....cause nothing rhymed....no punches...just elevate man...

...yo I'can't be handled...respected world wide...i dont know who dis hoe is...
yo we could both disapeer...come back and see who remain to be noticed.../
Ok opener...not that great of a punch...
underestimating what you hardly saw...cuz i'm showin up like tits at mardi-gras...
kid just learnin to walk...but my punches can make you hardly crawl.../
Nice punch...good multi's...good bar...
accomp known to hit'em...commin at ya xp style not dis ms dos prompt system...
dissmiss em'...elevatin like david blaine...sky high i'm known to lift em.../
Not any real punch but ok multi's....ok metaphor too..
ya rhymes is "soar" that don't mean ya elevatin....
airplanes couldn't lift ya level higher than mine...i'm everest slangin..../
Nice nice nice...
me an you compared is like pizza wit out sauce...just half da flavor...
even if ya ass owned mead notebook company...you couldn't have half my paper.../
lol funny...
ya feel my rhymes...beakya from cannibus to those plastic nines....
spit a 4 minute keystyle...but i could killya in half da time.../
Niiice closer...

Now this is a decent verse....i know you didnt come hard cause u woulda straight up murdered him if u went at ur fullest potential....but u did whut u had to do....got an easy win....good punches...lman u can learn ish from that verse....also u had good multi's accomp....nice spit for not tryin....on a cale of 1 to 10 id give it a 7....

Vote - accomplishment

haha i win.... KO dirta boi close dis shit.

i don't care bout being a few minutes late as long as your verse or check in is in the thread the next morning when i close them your fine anyway back to the vote:

breakdown for lman_1528:

flow:best part of your verse good job here no problems with it 7/10

volcab:basic use nothing special like you weren't trying or somehting 5/10

punches:same here as the volcab you didn't really seem to try too much nothing real direct and hittin i thought try harder next week 4/10

overall:16/30 i've seen better from you

breakdown for accomplishment:

flow: good job not the best i've seen from you but you've rebounded from last week's loss well 7/10

volcab:pretty good could of been stronger your not seeming to have put too much effort into this 6/10

punches:best line wasn't even really a punch at him,"underestimating what you hardly saw...cuz i'm showin up like tits at mardi-gras..." i just liked it some alright actually punches too 6/10

overall:19/30

vote--accomplishment good to see you in the winning column again

7-0 accomplishment wins this