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checkin in.....lets get it goin...but fukk 3 how bout rite now

I’ll Blast-Soul-Killer, cuz this Cat’s-No-Iller, than a Wack-Flow-Spitter
Your ass can’t drop “dope shit,” like a constipated Crack-Smoke-Dealer
Think before you Start-Threads, cuz I’ll squash you with my feet like you was my Toe-Jam
He's constantly masturbating cuz that’s the only way he could take matters into his Own-Hands
Don’t fuck with a me, I’ll shut you up if you don’t Lay-Low-in-ya-Songs
Cuz spitting my rhymes will leave you more “assed out,” than u in a Thong
Smoke this Gay-Hoe-like-a-Blunt, and rob you for every Dollar-Owned
Then pop my collar as soon as I’m finished popping your Collar-Bone
Crack your Hollow-Dome, cuz despite your name you couldn’t Doom-my-Spirit
They say "knowledge is contagious," then your stupid ass must be Immune-to-It
Leave this Bitch-Scared, and I don’t let the Wack-Recite so I’m gonna close your Casket-Tight
Coming at me with your weak rhymes is like trying to shank Superman with a Plastic-Knife
I’ll make you Pass-the-Mic, you should have just Resigned-from-the-Start
You aint a criminal, even if you served alcohol, you wouldn’t be Behind-any-Bars
You don’t Rhyme-with-any-Heart, you must be in Need-of-a-Donor dawg
Plus you think you can “rock” the mic, by trying to Speak-like-a-“Stoner”
I make you Take-Shots as I Spray-Glocks, but you aint got no Guns-to-Blow
I got Tons-of-Flows, so stop acting gangsta and trying to Shit-Talk-like-a-Thug-Wit-Flow
Cuz stepping to me is just about as dumb as trying to Crip-Walk-in-a-Blood-Hood

aint my best just tryna be quick wit it

dat waz sum g'hood shit y0...n0w lets wait 0n da utha kidz verse

JEa!!

mah i hope u got 4 nines on u,but ima just put some new york guy's on u-
since u like "pac" ima shoot & put ya friends face on ya body so u could have "all eyes on u"-

u scary ass bitch stick da lie's,talk tuff and dem clipps a fly-
& take half ya frame off they have da put u in a "box" smaller than 1 on da "quick reply's"-

u 2-5 mah and u is a vet??,nah but u about da loose 2 da best-
and when ppl say nae go "lay down a track" they mean give ya "music a rest-

u not fukkin with marvjay im da best damm trend setter-
nae u couldn't "throw punches at rapper's" playin "def jam vendetta"-

but u really think ya rappin's dope??,nope ya lines nobody eva ask 2 quote-
neva gon get a deal u like "most guns in da hood" cuzz u "black & broke"-

fukk da talkin nae just grab ya toaster and get me-
mah u suck u should be a "talk show host" cuzz like "opreah" u "win-free"-
(lol get it...win free)

i aint da wun mami dont make me greet u with u heater's-
u'z a snitch & "run with 50" even when u not wearin ya "g unit sneaker's"-


its 2:30 out here u gota half

aight let get some vote dat was good man

jea 4 sho mah ya verse was hott....i dont know how da fukk u 2-5 but upppin

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structure-marv
vocab-lil
complexity-lil
punch lines-marv
lil-6/10
marv-8/10
Return the favor marv....http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...606#post1260606

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

aight... both of y'all brought similiar verses, good wordplay, some personals, lines that were too stretched (both gotta work on that). fav line from the battle:

"They say "knowledge is contagious," then your stupid ass must be Immune-to-It"

just made me laugh, but so did the "win-free" line, that was sick. it would have been better if she didn't have any wins though. anyway, nice drops by both of you, but i give it to lil nae... she just had more nice wordplay and kept bringing it consisntently, very nice drops by both of you though.

aight thx fo da vote shawdow and ill can we get somemore

this was a sick battle

both y'all had sum tight ass flow goin on but nae took it cuz i felt her verse from start to end where as with marv's it sorta fell off in the middle and then picked back up again.
structure was gud from both and i think both y'all kept ure shit together with both havin a few lines goin off track but its aight, i call that a tie.
punches was a hard one to call cuz both y'all came wit sick hard punches. i thought nae hit a little harder with hers and she used sum gud personals but so did marv. that oprah win free line was sick but ure shit fell off in the middle whilst nae kept hers up throughout her spit.
both y'all showed creativity but nae showed a little more cuz she had betta wordplay in her spit and used multis more and better.

gud battle, both y'all did gud but i'm a give this one to nae!!

return the fav wit sum honest votes!!

thx king fo da vote lets get somemore yall

uppin on votes

DAT WUZ SOME SICK SHIT ON DA REAL FOR REAL...

lil nae and marvelous had some good rhymes but i liked lil nae wordplay more, and ya'll had some nice punches n all of dat, but lil nae took wit dat "knowledge is contagious" line. wooooooo dat wuz sick. don't get me wrong marvelous, your win-free line wuz funny too, but my vote goes to lil nae.

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cant vote right now jus tryin2 get post need um bad

uppin on votes stop lookin and vote

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uppin fo votes tryna get it close so stop lookin and votin

nae won no doubt! betta flow and shorter lines which is good, dont have to take foreva to get the point across!!

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Punches, all I'm looking for and Ill. took em all. Return the vote, and have a nice day. The battle was obvious.