STriniBonafide vs fine mind
 

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your a lyrical shamble im just waiting for your shit to emerge and ramble/
you get stampled till the point of painful cramp parolysing/
think you can out run me cmon bitch stunn me/
you get ran over like a train on tracks smashing/
im shining bright and if you piss me off you get a fright and need to save ur life/
when it comes to me u get stampled! you get engraved deep into the ground./
i'll paint my name on your face, have it written in blood stateing me/
i'll put you down in a cemortary you get burried!/
i finally got 2 finish this verse off now don't want to rush this/
i'll leave you murked and let my words stalk n haunt you for countless days/

There's a fine line between hot shit, and pure shitty spittin/
but it takes a 'fine mind' and ten lines, to prove da second in what he'd written/
where do you find time to craft shitty lines, btween driding and gettin beaten/
my words vital like air, don't ignore just hear as I invade yo ears you concede defeat and listen/
Sittin down, metallica sound in yo ears spurtin lyrics eaten and flow unsteady/
could wack both your lines and you over da head but yo lines got 'wacked' already/
were you sober when you wrote this SHIT, or did u hit up E and quite heady/
I shake my dreads to remove images, yo lines frightening like Freddy/
yo metaphors are'nt bright or tight just 'murky' and with that your punk ass still can murk me//
leh me move on to a opponent who's entertaining or worthy, punk you lost this contest...don't even get a jersey//

should be "can't murk me"
My lines were kinda long...hope that's okay

Hit up this y'all

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Pretty good battle guys, both dropped tight stuff
Here's brekdown: Fine
Punches: 7/10
Personals: 5/10
Opener: 6/10
Closer: 6/10
Overall: 24/40
Strin:
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 6/10
Opener: 6/10
Closer: 5/10
Overall: 23/30
Good battle both of you, strin you lost cuz your structure was messed up, you didn't flow good either cuz ya lines were strecthed out so much
Vote: Fine mind

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Nice shit..
Flow-sTrini
punches-STrini
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metas-fine
wordplay-mind
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Strini gets my vote because he had a nice flow and good punches.. if u would of have punches that hit hard i would have voted for ya fine.. ight holla

STriniBonafide you took this battle hands down. nice flow in the begining. could have been better. try to incorporate some multiples in your rhymes. you get my vote b/c of your lyrics and punches.return the favor:LyricalMethod s. taken over

Hit up this wit some votes y'all
I need some honest votes to close this

v/bonafide

he just came harder and more creative.....fine your rhyme scheme was whack as hell u need to work on that it is very simple and some times it dont even rhyme
v/bonafide

fine mind got this i think he won because his shit flow
well and he had some decent punches and strin u need
to make ur lines shorterbecause them long as lies fucked up
your structure foreal foreal.

Vote: fine

yo bof u cats seem to be aight i dont know on this one. wait. ya i do

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Both of you came correct, i'm a break it down like this
Here's brekdown: Fine
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 6/10
Opener: 6/10
Closer: 6/10
Overall: 24/40
Strin:
Punches: 6/10
Personals: 5/10
Opener: 5/10
Closer: 5/10
Overall: 21/40
Strin you need to go to a bar format it will help make yoru punches hit harder other than that you both had a pretty close battle Strin just work on your punches and wordplay

I think ST got this...fine u gotta rhyme its a vital part of keystylin its a weird style but it jus aint workin for ya...weak battle overall but fine wouldve had it if he rhymed simples as

v/strinibonafide