-Insidious [VS] C_R_E_A_M-
 

what it is?
let's do 14-20 lines.
no crew, no hate, no d/r, no noob votes.
post when u get a chance, i'll post by the end of sunday hopefully, i gotta go get my mom something lol.

no beef, peace.

50 posts to vote

g'head and spit since ur da challenger.........

damn, my bad, i 4got...i'll post now. peace........

Lyrikal master-mind? combine a death wish with stable-rhymez,
take a verbal BEATING...just like scoliosis i leave curves in-ya-spine,
u'll never make it big, this kid will never have ice like hot freezers,
hows he gunna 'get big' and 'come hard' when he jerks off wit tweezers!!
explosions in ur advatar, what's that all about?
never shot a gun, only "clickity-click" u get is from ur mouse,
ur mouth spits from ear-to-lips so how can u claim u spit hot?
i'll shove my foot so far up C's ass and wear his large intestine for tube socks,
this MC STINKS! but of course he earned the smell,
lesson 1, before u battle me, learn how to spell,
illiterate ppl piss me off, this guy's an MC who's lyrics won't sell,
the only way u having hot underground shit is if u rappin in hell,
fuck destruction, i'm a living obstruction to justice, killin u'n'all,
kill u, blow up the hearse and make u walk to ur funeral.

just try to match mine, no feedin.

i meant "explosions in ur sig", what ever, just spit whenever u get a chance. peace

hit it up cream, let's get this goin

0k.....
i'll rap b0ut gunz juzt ta get u scared-y0_
gl0cks dat'll leave u p0p'd wit n0 brainz like a scare-cr0w_
i palm t00ls like "GoodWrench" but i aint w0rkin-0n-cars_
da t00ls i palm,i juzt squeeze and if u d0nt die ur w0rkin-wit-scars_
diz dudez gay he club-wit-guyz_
s0 if i killed him y0 his l0ve-will-cry_
im way iller and m0re advanced in rhymen_
s0 i suggest u st0p,n0 im demandin u like sim0n_[sim0n says]
leave u kut "different ways" like a diamond_
kuz all i live is drug dealin and gangstaz wh0 l0ve vi0lence_
u up in da suburbs liven in heaven_
reality check,when i blast da tech u'll really be liven in heaven_
Ha! ya b0i said u sh0uld battle me? 0k,but why u rappin f0r_
when u kn0w imma put 14 lines in ya ta leave ya ass feelin s0re_[n0 h0m0]

blah..s0rry i t00k s0 l0ng

whatever, u got in it at least, i've had battles that just never got finished.

LET'S GET THEM VOTES!

Yo first off I wanna congratulate both of you for not makin me sit through 10-20 lines of garbage...I always like seein decent textcees.....and to my breakdown.


Lyrikal master-mind? combine a death wish with stable-rhymez,
take a verbal BEATING...just like scoliosis i leave curves in-ya-spine,
Not a bad opening, dont hear scoliosis too often..
u'll never make it big, this kid will never have ice like hot freezers,
hows he gunna 'get big' and 'come hard' when he jerks off wit tweezers!!
not a super punchline but good
explosions in ur advatar, what's that all about?
never shot a gun, only "clickity-click" u get is from ur mouse,
decent wordplay punchline but I think u coulda made this nastier w/ a multi
ur mouth spits from ear-to-lips so how can u claim u spit hot?
i'll shove my foot so far up C's ass and wear his large intestine for tube socks,
This is hot except for being so stretched
this MC STINKS! but of course he earned the smell,
lesson 1, before u battle me, learn how to spell,
illiterate ppl piss me off, this guy's an MC who's lyrics won't sell,
the only way u having hot underground shit is if u rappin in hell,
fuck destruction, i'm a living obstruction to justice, killin u'n'all,
kill u, blow up the hearse and make u walk to ur funeral.
These last parts were kinda basic for you... it just kinda fell off a little bit, the learn how to spell flowed well but it was basic, hot underground and hell is an old concept- the funeral line was decent. I give you a 7 outta 10

0k.....
i'll rap b0ut gunz juzt ta get u scared-y0_
gl0cks dat'll leave u p0p'd wit n0 brainz like a scare-cr0w_
decent opener i actually like this probly more than I should.
i palm t00ls like "GoodWrench" but i aint w0rkin-0n-cars_
da t00ls i palm,i juzt squeeze and if u d0nt die ur w0rkin-wit-scars_
Nice wordplay metaphors and punchline...good example of a battle bar right here
diz dudez gay he club-wit-guyz_
s0 if i killed him y0 his l0ve-will-cry_
im way iller and m0re advanced in rhymen_
s0 i suggest u st0p,n0 im demandin u like sim0n_[sim0n says]
this was kinda basic but it flowed nicely-
leave u kut "different ways" like a diamond_
kuz all i live is drug dealin and gangstaz wh0 l0ve vi0lence_
u up in da suburbs liven in heaven_
reality check,when i blast da tech u'll really be liven in heaven_
This made me laugh- good couple of bars
Ha! ya b0i said u sh0uld battle me? 0k,but why u rappin f0r_
when u kn0w imma put 14 lines in ya ta leave ya ass feelin s0re_[n0 h0m0]
weak closer- I think u coulda come harder here..... I give you a 7.2 outta 10 cuz you had 2 really funny punches here but mixed in good wordplay throughout w/ a couple multies... Vote goes to Cream..... Please guys return the favor w/ some honest votes'
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124935

insidious BETTER VERSE PERIOD. nice punches and structure. nice multi's-could have been better but all in all you ripped this kid. cream maybe next time don't rap about guns just go hard at him with personals like he did. cream u need to step up lyrically and step your punches up a little too. insidious nice punches/ and great multi right here:

"this MC STINKS! but of course he earned the smell,
lesson 1, before u battle me, learn how to spell,
illiterate ppl piss me off, this guy's an MC who's lyrics won't sell,
the only way u having hot underground shit is if u rappin in hell,

vote=insidious

chea chea i feel what u sayin........im juzt waitN f0r a h0nestly h0t battler

upin s0 dis kan get kl0sed

Uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppppppppppppppp

Indsidious = 31/40
Flow 6/10
Rhymes 6/10
Structure 6/10
Punches 7/10
Humor 6/10

C_R_E_A_M = 29/40
Flow 7/10
Rhymes 6/10
Structure 5/10
Punches 6/10
Humor 5/10

Insid...had this one...had some "ok" punches & structure..same wit cream...but not as hard...tho...it was a close battle...but Insidious slip'd this one..

yo sorry for freeposting but insidious is you from old rb as sidious????

Inside
Struc- 6/10
word- 6/10
personal-2/10
punches-7/10
Humor-5/10

Cream
Struc-7/10
punches-6/10
word-5/10
personal5/10
humor-6/10

Cream 28/50
insid 26/50

Cream-vote

Idisous

Flow 6/10
Punches 5/10
Vocab 7/10
Rhymes 7/10
Wordplay 8/10
31/50
C_R_E_A_M

Flow 7/10
Punches 6/10
Rhymes 7/10
Wordplay 8/10
Vocab 8/10
36/50

V/C_R_E_A_M

THIS SHITZ SLEPT ON!!!!

okay here is the break down

punches: insidious
flow: insidious
personals:insidious
wordplay:cream
overall: insidious

cream you got skill but here the only thing that killed you was the personals but you put up a good battle

indsidious takes everything except da flow for me so im up 4 indsidious

YO NICE SPIT FROM BOTH OF U//

0k.....
i'll rap b0ut gunz juzt ta get u scared-y0_
gl0cks dat'll leave u p0p'd wit n0 brainz like a scare-cr0w_
i palm t00ls like "GoodWrench" but i aint w0rkin-0n-cars_
da t00ls i palm,i juzt squeeze and if u d0nt die ur w0rkin-wit-scars_
diz dudez gay he club-wit-guyz_
s0 if i killed him y0 his l0ve-will-cry_
im way iller and m0re advanced in rhymen_ NICE OPNER I KINDA LIKE WHEN U WENT AT HIM ABOUT DA GAY THING//

s0 if i killed him y0 his l0ve-will-cry_
im way iller and m0re advanced in rhymen_
s0 i suggest u st0p,n0 im demandin u like sim0n_[sim0n says]
leave u kut "different ways" like a diamond_
kuz all i live is drug dealin and gangstaz wh0 l0ve vi0lence_
u up in da suburbs liven in heaven_ NICE MULTI'S AND PUNCHES NICE BODY// U CAME HARD STOP WIT DA Oo DATS DESTROYING DA EYEZ OF DA READER//

reality check,when i blast da tech u'll really be liven in heaven_
Ha! ya b0i said u sh0uld battle me? 0k,but why u rappin f0r_
when u kn0w imma put 14 lines in ya ta leave ya ass feelin s0re_[n0 h0m0] NICE CLOSA IT FEELS LIKE U PUT DA BOMB ON HIM NICE MAN

OVERALL= 36/40 WORDPLAY// FLOW// PUNCHES// PERSONALZ



Lyrikal master-mind? combine a death wish with stable-rhymez,
take a verbal BEATING...just like scoliosis i leave curves in-ya-spine,
u'll never make it big, this kid will never have ice like hot freezers,
hows he gunna 'get big' and 'come hard' when he jerks off wit tweezers!!
explosions in ur advatar, what's that all about? NICE OPNER U GOT CREACTIVE WIT DA TWEEZERZ//

never shot a gun, only "clickity-click" u get is from ur mouse,
ur mouth spits from ear-to-lips so how can u claim u spit hot?
i'll shove my foot so far up C's ass and wear his large intestine for tube socks,
this MC STINKS! but of course he earned the smell,
lesson 1, before u battle me, learn how to spell,
illiterate ppl piss me off, this guy's an MC who's lyrics won't sell// NICE BODY// BUT U NEED TO GET MO CREACTIVE LIKE DA 1ST ONE (DA OPENER)

the only way u having hot underground shit is if u rappin in hell,
fuck destruction, i'm a living obstruction to justice, killin u'n'all,
kill u, blow up the hearse and make u walk to ur funeral// NICE BUT U DIDNT COME HARD NICE PUNCHES BUT DIDNT DO ANY EFFECT// I WILL GIVE U CREDITS FO NICE FLOWZ AND WORDPLAY BUT PUT PERSONALZ AND HIT HARD WID DA PUNCHES NEXT TIME AND DEN U BE UNTOUCH//

OVERALL=33/40

CREAM WIN IT BY AN EDGE

DIS A GOOD BATTLE// BATTLE AGAIN DEN MAYBE INSIDIOUS MIGHT COME HARD//

INSIDIOUS

Flow/Structure
Your flow was good I was feeling your verse all the way through. The structure needs improvements because it was pretty weak in places. Some of your lines were short whilst others were stretched mad. OVERALL 6/10

Personals/Punches
Alright, this was your best part, there was not many personals in your drop but the couple that were there were pretty funny. Your punches were good, some were played but mostly they were hitting hard. OVERALL 7/10

Creativity/Originality
You sort of did average in this department because whilst you had a tight rhyme scheme and you used some good wordplay you did not have anything all too special and some of it was pretty played. You had some nice multis in your verse but your best part was your metas because they were dope. OVERALL 7/10

CREAM

Flow/Structure
You lacked in this seriously, your flow was choppy all through your verse. This was probably down to the fact that your structure was weak, lines stretched and lines squashed when really it should all be kept together relatively the same length. You need to work on this area a lot. OVERALL 5/10
Personals/Punches
I can't really say that you had any personals in your drop at all which was a downer. You had some average punches, but none of them were really hitting. You were mainly rapping about guns and shit, you need to hit him with the personals and beef up your punches because you were lacking. OVERALL 5/10

Creativity/Originality
This part was really weak because you had some pretty basic wordplay, got nice in some sections. The fact that you were texting with some small letters and some capital and what not made it hard to read. You had like no multis and I couldn't see any metas in your drop. You used a gay line which is sooooo played out and you need to drop that and come with more original punches. OVERALL 5/10

V/ - insidious