CounTREE Jay Vs. DeLeon
 

aight check it
you spit first
10-12 lines
no hate
D/R or crew votes

your verse is due around 5:00-5:30
20 mins after that I'll drop mine

aight just check in

Check, and don't feed of my verse. Fresh lines too.

~CJ~

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/
I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./

~CJ~

note: for the personals in the opener and the closer, just check his profile.

alright checkin in................................

Chippendales the only place he's gettin booked for a show//
thats what line 6 should say

DAMN Thought you the man....after droppin that Beat//

thought thats what this line should say

guess i type to fuckin fast lol

YO DIS AN HOT BATTLE

DELEON

PUNCHES 7/10
FLOWZ 8/10
PERSONALS 7/10
VOCAB 6/10
=28

COUNTREE JAY

PUNCHES 9/10
FLOWZ 8/10
PERSONALS 8/10
VOCAB (NONE)
=25
CLOSE BATTLE DELEON U HAD SOME GOOD FLOWZ AND GOOD PERSONALS// LIKED YO STRUTURE TOO//

DA BEST LINE=how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//

WORST LINE=if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//

BUT HAD SOME GOOD PUNCHES

COUNTREE JAY

BEST LINE=To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct

DATS GOOD NICE PUNCHES BUT DIDNT HIT HARD DAN DELEON


WORST LINE=Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./

BUT OVERALL

VOTE=DELEON

damn hot battle.

COUNTRY:real hot verse.good flow,you need to work on structure a tad but it wasnt a major issue.good wordplay,um real hot.
best line:To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
good line,simple wordplay,but real good.
worst line:Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./
weak ender.nothing to say.
work on:you need to work on some stronger more effective wordplay but apart from that everything was real hot.
overall:7/10.hot.
DELEON:real hot shit as well,verse not as hot as countree but a couple weak lines on his part might give you the upper hand.flow was good,structure:nothing to say,um wordplay was real good too.
best line:how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//
good shit,funny and straight to the point.lol
worst line:none.i couldnt find one.
work on: hmmmm nothing really just punches this battle was missing some good punches.
overall:7.5/10.hot

FINAL VOTE: DELEON.he won by a half point.both those verses were hot shit.nothing else to say.countree keep up your good work youre real hot at battlin.deleon you good like always.

FUCK!!!!!! i just realized i cant vote on dis shit.musteve been blacklisted by countree.but w/e keep it real alla yall

I don't got no one blacklisted, you just don't got enough posts or wins to vote in elevated prolly. And both of you didn't read that I said check his profile to understand the opener and the closer, the parts that are highlighted. And Toxic, how can someone get no points for vocabulary you faggot?

~CJ~

my vote
 

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
the link added an effect but it wasnt a really good punch....6/10
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
Better....7/10
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/
No really hard punch!....7/10
I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
Still waiting for a hard one....6/10
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./
haha nice closer....8/10

Verse Score - 34/50 = 68%

Okay CJ...you didnt have direct hard hitting punches!!....need to work on ur meta's....they will add the eeffect u need.....flow was good...wordplay was good....decent verse....just werk on ur meta's and usin personals more...

CJ your not "Wack"....your just lyrically challenged//
sayin ya off tha "scale".....but your gettin kicked with my "New Balance"//
Good meta...nice punch...8/10
Screamin....DeLeon!!! ya runnin and duckin for cover//
tha only "Lethal Weapon" you got is the DVD with "Danny Glover"//
Nice punch....8/10
if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//
Not feelin the punch...coulda gone places wit the first line....5/10
how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//
Okay...7/10
Though you the man....after droppin that Beat//
On tha street...I'd leave ya face lookin like it was crab meat//
Bad...very bad....3/10
Yo Jay.....heard when ya not on tha net...your softer than a hostess//
Next time put more thought in your rhymes and snap the fuck outta hypnosis//
Decent closer....7/10

Verse Score - 38/60 = 63%

Aight...with your first couple bars i thought you were gonna take this...u started off with good meta's and punches....but than u fell off.....that crab meat line was horrible...it killed your verse....u woulda beeen betta off with out it....flow was off b/c of stretched lines.....wordplay was good....jus werk on sustaining the tempo and keeping good punches in ur verse...

Vote - CJ...more consistent verse....

Please return the favor.....with an honest vote.........
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123660
Thanks.......

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~CJ~

uppin for some votes and if you explain your shit poll tha vote....

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UPPIN for some honest votes ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

DAMN!!! where are the damn votes..............

Erm This battle Was Average/Wealk You both could have hit harder but i dind not like what court was rapping about espically the no show line that was weak dawg and a poor openere and you look like you were trying to foce coab in and word of advice never use lyrically it`s wack and anyway i think deleon dint do that good either but he came harder with vocab and punches plus he flowed better

V/Deleon

Lets get some more votes up in this battle.........

Deleon took this battle by a hair

punches Screamin....DeLeon!!! ya runnin and duckin for cover//
tha only "Lethal Weapon" you got is the DVD with "Danny Glover"//

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/

metas You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/

Yo Jay.....heard when ya not on tha net...your softer than a hostess//
Next time put more thought in your rhymes and snap the fuck outta hypnosis//

personals Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./

close battle but deleon took it by a lil

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Uppin Damn This Is Gettin Slept On Hard!!!!!!!!!!!!

Aight Check It..

DeLeon: 6/10
Sum Nice Punches, The Metaphors Were Decent, Not Too Many Mulits, IF ANY, But Your Flow Was Decent. Structure Was Alright, Nice Drop Man.

CounTREE Jay: 5.8/10
Yo Man, If You Woulda Threw A LiL Harder Punches You Coulda Took This Kid, But Your Punches Weren't Solid All The Way Threw. Metaphors Were ALright and Flow Was Decent. Almost Man.

Vote - DeLeon

Props To Both, Stay Dope

~R~

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UPpin this shit for some damn votes.....this battle's been going for a while DAMN!

Uppin' 4 Votes ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Uppin for some votes....yall drop some votes and stop sleepin on this

Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
6...like L.I. said it wasn't really a good punch but the link added the affect gettin u sum points for it.
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./
7...had me laughin but pretty basic vocab there.
You might as well bend ova, 'cause you about to be fucked,
Musta hit your red button, you about to Lyrically Self-Destruct/
6...an aight punch, but the homo shit is so played out.
I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
8...best punch, liked the Good Will Hunting shit, funny!!
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./
6...pretty weak closer, ure capable of doin a lot better!!


CJ your not "Wack"....your just lyrically challenged//
sayin ya off tha "scale".....but your gettin kicked with my "New Balance"//
6...weak opener, first line was gud but the second just dropped it!!
Screamin....DeLeon!!! ya runnin and duckin for cover//
tha only "Lethal Weapon" you got is the DVD with "Danny Glover"//
8...funny shit! U be qoutin a movie just like CJ did, u did it well.
if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//
6...first line good, second line bad, had nuthin to do wit each other really.
how you gonna beat me?...Bitch state your reason//
the only time Jay "Iller" than me....is during flu season//
7...funny line, the 2nd part was pretty killa!!
Though you the man....after droppin that Beat//
On tha street...I'd leave ya face lookin like it was crab meat//
5...dude, that was weak plain and simple!!
Yo Jay.....heard when ya not on tha net...your softer than a hostess//
Next time put more thought in your rhymes and snap the fuck outta hypnosis//
5...a weak closer dude!! U really let ureself down in this battle cuz i've seen u do a whole lot better! No beef, just bein honest dawg!!

POINTS TOTALS
CJ - 33/50 [66%]
DeLeon - 37/60 [61%]

V/ - CJ

CJ your not "Wack"....your just lyrically challenged//
sayin ya off tha "scale".....but your gettin kicked with my "New Balance"//


^^^ good opener...good wordplay


if wack rhymes was a crime.....Countree Jay would be on Death Row//
Chippendales the place he's gettin booked for a show//


^^^ lol...funny...im imaginin dat...good visual..uuuugh


Yo Jay.....heard when ya not on tha net...your softer than a hostess//
Next time put more thought in your rhymes and snap the fuck outta hypnosis//

^^ decent closer...

Deleon...wordplay seems to be something u hold down...wuz good here...this coulda been better with more multies and vocab...otherwise, 32/40 spit




Occupation: Killin' dis katz? Must be a form of Spanglish,
Nigga I was just playin' about you not speakin' da language/
To battle me you'll have to pull out every word you know,
But after shit, bitch, and fuck, you got a blank line to show./

^^ pretty good...it hits hard..but lacks wordplay

I always make Good on my M.C. hunting, so you can call me Will,
Wait till you choke on your bars, then you can claim Lyrically Ill./
Let me try my hand at Spanglish, Tu leave la musica alone hoy?
'Cause we know you ain't no True Thug- Enough said Homeboy./


^^^ Not bad...though, the mangled spanish you could have left out

um...good verse...wordplay doesn't seem to be your strength..but str8 hard hittin disses...good though...however, i place a premium on metas/wordplay...so I'm going with

Vote: Deleon

aight lets get some more votes up in here

come on now lets get this shit over with...........

DAMN!!! this shit is gettin slept on madd...drop your damn votes

Uppin' 4 votes^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

~CJ~

Uppin' 4 Votes ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Deleon-NIce Spit did come decent..Pretty nice..Structure
was good..Nothing about dat..Similies amd metaphores
was decent..Just work on similies more..aight
7/10


CJ-Came aight..Not well though..SImilies
was lil off..Metas was aight..So was balance..
STructre was decent kept everything clean pretty
nice..Came off wit the flows a lil do
5/10

v/Deleon