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VisioN Vs DeLeon
10 lines quicky
blindspit due in 20 Goodluck. |
.........Time is tickin............am almost done.
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he logged off............................... |
sorry man logged off had to throw a munch.....aight ill drop mine like in 20
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gotchu..........^^is ok.......................
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You must've known ya flow is garbage, b/c your takin my opinion too serious/
HOLLAtha whole time you losin so stop whining and bitching, bitch get off ya fuckin period// bitch ima hustla, i keep bricks like Shaq Freethrows// and i dont know why u on this site cuz this kat is weak yo// Swallow dick like R kelly's bitch..you layin in mix// I'll shoot n get a lil "nutty" since u like playin with dicks// Carefull now cuz D know how to Rob Em on the Tek,// And like a "Shaq 3 Point Shot" i'll take "Vision's" "OFF the NET"// Put My Handz In- down yo Throat Til I Rearrange Yo Chest'// Twist His gutz in "KNOTS" til he look like da Opposite SEX // |
No personals and punches............easy target.
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^^Ld? Onions make yall cry, But i won't show u Tears of Sympathy.. U couldn't Drop a Descent' Bar, Having Soap Fall in a Penitentiary!!... Rookie Of The Month??you dope? c'mon you couldn't Toss bricks carrying cender.. U inlove with luda!!leon switch his name to Hybrid, Cuz he can't choose Between genders!!... I've got the crowd Hype,leon got them fallin asleep like being addicted to ginsue.. Rookie I Ripp out ur Insides and put them on ur corpse,Cuz i've got everything against u!!.. Kid I X markz da spot lookz like u from Sa-Towm bitch you my TARGET… You as my opponent ur like Trial size toiletz when I shit on you im bound to CLOG IT.. kid I slit slash n chop up ur text…This battle ur first and last like ya momz welfare checkz.. Domestic Abuse cuz im assaultin this opposite sex,Like non fertile bitchez u producing again there wont be a next.. Done. |
nice spit by both...i cant vote...but i am going to leave feedback....
Deleon - good spit...u had better wordplay....punches were good....no personals...sum multis....good flow....just work on using personals....u had a couple good meta's....elevate on those too....like it says ur only a rookie and u got potential....so keep elevatin....give ur verse a 7.3 out of 10.... Deadly - nice spit also....flow was good but shoppy in places....but u had punches and personals in this battle....even in the multi's.....good battle by woth....deadly....i suggest u work on wordplay.....so elevate in that spot....and elevate in the meta's.....but u got this one just because of the personal/punch category.... very even matched battle though....good spits... Vote - Deadly I cant poll it though cause me and deadly are in the same crew....but i wanted to leave feedback.... Return the favor.... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124600 |
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DeL...Prolly worst ive seen from u...U was real bad at beggining but got better at end..u had a decent Punch or 2.I wasnt feelin u here much. DV....Decent but u were consistly strong through out ur verse.U had more punches and overall wording was better. So my vote goes to DV but sdont use that structure it's pretty dumb no offense |
ok break down
ok deleon decent verse had a few good punchs not any personals a couple of nice metas and useful multies just work on using personals alot more an staying consitent with hard punchs an try stayin away from the gay joke punchs dv good punchs and personals not really much wordplay and your text style is different but i aint feali nthe way the structure is set up but shti dotn realyl matter anyways basically got my vote from havin personals and better punchs work on usin wordplay alot more shit be pretty sick with them punchs vote dv |
Deadly v. took this man......even though he had some lack
of balance and complexity hee took this becuz of his flows...... Nice spit from both....both elevate....Work on similies multies mataphore eveything thats really good v/deadly |
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ok deleon
ok why the stretched bar first then shorten it up... but good verse you kinda whernt dissen him like what does briks have to do with him and kinda use punches but dont play them like the subject of shaq... it dosnt have to be used twice... deadly vision ok nice verse. i didnt like the structure but that was my only problem punches came hard as usual and there where more multies than have normally seen in your battle... hot verse Deleon 8/10 DV 9/10 vote DEADLY VISION |
Yup..............1more. and rookie of the month..................good battle.
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Deleon u had some hot shit i liked that ur flow was good u rhymes aiight some bars streched so i chouldint read um right but all for that i give u a
8/10 DeadlyVisions wtf is wronge wit u ur shit was FIYA nigga u be battles RoOKIES lol VET lol this nigga had a Decent flow n structure some lines streched but u get a 9/10 break DOWN DEADLY VISIONS Flow 8/10 RHymes 8/10 Structure 9/10 Punches 10/10 35/40 Deleon Flow 8/10 Rhymes 7/10 Structure 8/10 Punches 8/10 31/40 V/Deadly |
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