Maku JaiiLiin vs. Killa Bwoy
 

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no h8tr votes
no biting
no recycling
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you spit first

iigt dawg checkin in/......................................

g'head and spit then.............................................. ......

damn hurry up n spit niggaz nah mean dis soundz like a good battle lets go i'll drop a vote after da battle do me a favor n drop a vote on mine

Black haze vs eric89

i ain't got much time... i've been writing mine while this kid is...so i need you to hurry up, if you want me to post today.

jea killa lets go

You Get Murdered Quick Like A Crip walkin In A Blood Area-
You Aint Hard..Like the BoogyMan Aint No ONe scared Of Ya-
Dawg You Wack Kids Gettin Sacked Like A Bad QuarterBack-
u Ebony? Shoot errythin up sept ur legs so you only a quarter black-
I Can See Ya Ugliness Like Michael Jackson On WebCam-
Merkin You Without Breakin A Sweat Like A Kid With A Headband-
Da Roads Come To An End Like That Kat Beenie Man-
Kid Perormed at a gay club now he braggin like DID YOU SEE ME MAN-
You Aint Real Like That Fat Santa Clause Bitch-
You Gettin Devoured quick like a fat kid infront of a Sandwhich-
Like Bat Man And Robbin Im here to save the day-
From Bad Katz like you..Rhymes'll take You Away-
Aint Buffy But This "Bitin" Bitch Is Gettin Slayed-
Like A Tru PLaya.. Ya Rhymes Are All Used N' Played-
Fuck Ma-Ku..I will Make You...SucK My Dick-
After This Battle You Aint Comin Back Like A Magician with bad Magic Tricks

n when i sed its da end of the road like beenie man its cuz he fell over a cliff while drivin on da road...

It’s like Iraq, I kill bystanders if they between us in war//
Your softness is unwanted, like a limp penis in porn//
Callin me spreewell, how I’m strangiling you//
If you WERE buffy, you couldn’t slay me, cuz I’m angel to you//
It’s an enhanced brain, this lame has came faced with/
Assimilate y’all name, then cause detonation of gay statements*//
unrapeable inmate…He ain’t bustin this back//
Him winnin this one? That’s Lyrical destruction of fact//
You’re a joke so I’m laughin at you//
Rap battery Leaves this bastard as inactive as half of his crew//
You wish you was titanic, but that ship has been left//
My aim’ll make you fade away, from shots that ‘knick’ you to death**//
I make sure, that this hit you’ll detect//
I could take pictures of ya group pride, but still never “picture you repped”//

It’s like Olympics when I busted shots, how you see he ran//
Blasted the back of ya head, braggin like, “DID YOU SEE ME MAN?//

*detonation=his group sig has a explosion in it.
**referencing the knicks team logo under his name, as well as basketball

I have to give this one to Maku Jaiiliin.
Punches-Maku
Flow-Maku
Structure-Killa Bwoy
Vocab-Killa Bwoy

This was a close one, but I think the punches of Maku takes it down.

yo that shit is unexplained ^^^ its 0-0 still ...fuck outta here with that unexplained shit ^

uppin............................................. ..........

Aiight I was seein it like this
Killah I liked ya flow and ya head dem punches on lock playa. Ya structure was good.
Maku ya structure and flow were fucked but yeah punches were alright. They weren.t personal enuff, then again neither were killahs

Layout-
killah-8/10
Maku-7/10

Aiight return da favor (in ma sig)

i give it 2 killah. i like ya flow better u had nice punches and yours seemed to be aiming towards maku

return da fava
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125740

Maku JaiiLiin- just plain out weak man.
Killah Bwoy- keep it gangsta dude. word up that shit was tight. is you record like 15-0? forreal forreal
any the break down:
opener-Killah-cause other kid just went right into his shit.
Punches-killah-his were put together better and made more sence.
personnals-killah-you hit him where it hurts
flow-Maku JaiiLiin-only good thing you had sorry no hate
closer-killah-other dude just stopped

You Get Murdered Quick Like A Crip walkin In A Blood Area-
You Aint Hard..Like the BoogyMan Aint No ONe scared Of Ya-
6...aight opener, pretty basic punch tho!!
Dawg You Wack Kids Gettin Sacked Like A Bad QuarterBack-
u Ebony? Shoot errythin up sept ur legs so you only a quarter black-
8...funny shit, nice punch there killah!!
I Can See Ya Ugliness Like Michael Jackson On WebCam-
Merkin You Without Breakin A Sweat Like A Kid With A Headband-
5...bleh! that was weak man!!
Da Roads Come To An End Like That Kat Beenie Man-
Kid Perormed at a gay club now he braggin like DID YOU SEE ME MAN-
7...funny line, pretty basic vocab tho!!
You Aint Real Like That Fat Santa Clause Bitch-
You Gettin Devoured quick like a fat kid infront of a Sandwhich-
6...aight punch, losin the structure tho!!
Like Bat Man And Robbin Im here to save the day-
From Bad Katz like you..Rhymes'll take You Away-
6...basic punch!!
Aint Buffy But This "Bitin" Bitch Is Gettin Slayed-
Like A Tru PLaya.. Ya Rhymes Are All Used N' Played-
6...just like that line...played!!!
Fuck Ma-Ku..I will Make You...SucK My Dick-
After This Battle You Aint Comin Back Like A Magician with bad Magic Tricks
4...weak closer dude!! just no structure and so played!!!

It’s like Iraq, I kill bystanders if they between us in war//
Your softness is unwanted, like a limp penis in porn//
6...aight opener, cud of been better tho!!
Callin me spreewell, how I’m strangiling you//
If you WERE buffy, you couldn’t slay me, cuz I’m angel to you//
5...weak punch!! plus she killed angel in one series so that fucks ure line up!!
It’s an enhanced brain, this lame has came faced with/
Assimilate y’all name, then cause detonation of gay statements*//
6...basic punch man!!
unrapeable inmate…He ain’t bustin this back//
Him winnin this one? That’s Lyrical destruction of fact//
5..BLEH!!
You’re a joke so I’m laughin at you//
Rap battery Leaves this bastard as inactive as half of his crew//
7...funny line, like the crew diss!!
You wish you was titanic, but that ship has been left//
My aim’ll make you fade away, from shots that ‘knick’ you to death**//
6...gud punch!!
I make sure, that this hit you’ll detect//
I could take pictures of ya group pride, but still never “picture you repped”//
3...weak closer to! no structure and just plain wack shit!!


POINTS TOTALS

Killah Bwoy - 48/80 60%
Maku-Jailin - 38/70 54%


V/ - Killah Bwoy!!

Yo Dat Last Line Maku Got Me Laughin Ha Ha Ha Ha I Aint Votin Puttin Feed Back

im goin wit killah. ya shit was dope. u had good lines in there. especially the one wit leavin him a quarter black. the otha dude, im not even gonna take time to look at ya name, memorize and type it, but yeah, it was good to, but killah had better flow and better hits. my vote=killah. but since i dropped a vote. think ya'll can return the favor?
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125828

You Get Murdered Quick Like A Crip walkin In A Blood Area-
You Aint Hard..Like the BoogyMan Aint No ONe scared Of Ya-
Decent Opener, flowed well had a punch couple of similies
Dawg You Wack Kids Gettin Sacked Like A Bad QuarterBack-
u Ebony? Shoot errythin up sept ur legs so you only a quarter black-
Good wordplay, I think maybe a little punctuation woulda made this easier to read
I Can See Ya Ugliness Like Michael Jackson On WebCam-
Merkin You Without Breakin A Sweat Like A Kid With A Headband-
egh, o.k
Da Roads Come To An End Like That Kat Beenie Man-
Kid Perormed at a gay club now he braggin like DID YOU SEE ME MAN-
lol, this was funny- Good punchline, good similie in the first line
You Aint Real Like That Fat Santa Clause Bitch-
You Gettin Devoured quick like a fat kid infront of a Sandwhich-
lol, two solid bars in a row- very good use of similies and wordplay
Like Bat Man And Robbin Im here to save the day-
From Bad Katz like you..Rhymes'll take You Away-
Aint Buffy But This "Bitin" Bitch Is Gettin Slayed-
Like A Tru PLaya.. Ya Rhymes Are All Used N' Played-
Fuck Ma-Ku..I will Make You...SucK My Dick-
After This Battle You Aint Comin Back Like A Magician with bad Magic Tricks
These lines were more basic than the first few, but all in all it was a good verse, I really liked a few bars.

Maku
It’s like Iraq, I kill bystanders if they between us in war//
Your softness is unwanted, like a limp penis in porn//
This I think was a better punchline... It hit harder- flowed just as well
Callin me spreewell, how I’m strangiling you//
If you WERE buffy, you couldn’t slay me, cuz I’m angel to you//
stranglin and angel dont rhyme when I speak- This was a decent attempt at playing off his verse but I think you coulda came a little harder.
It’s an enhanced brain, this lame has came faced with/
Assimilate y’all name, then cause detonation of gay statements*//
This displays the more intense vocab you used in the verse, decent wordplay I like the way you set this punchline up.
unrapeable inmate…He ain’t bustin this back//
Him winnin this one? That’s Lyrical destruction of fact//
Yeah- This verse isn't as witty, but It definately pops - Your punchlines take a little more thought to appreciate which makes it seem more elevated to me, I like it.
You’re a joke so I’m laughin at you//
Rap battery Leaves this bastard as inactive as half of his crew//
Good use of Personal, The setup could've used some work but good nonetheless.
You wish you was titanic, but that ship has been left//
My aim’ll make you fade away, from shots that ‘knick’ you to death**//
I make sure, that this hit you’ll detect//
I could take pictures of ya group pride, but still never “picture you repped”/
The knick you to death was decent, kinda basic but good... I liked the punchlines in these last two bars... I think you just came with a little more vocab, a little deeper punches, and just a little harder... I give this Battle to Maku

Killah-Nice spit........You came hard and weak with it which means you took this
really by a lil though......you had everything uncluding similies and
metaphores..Balacance was ok.....Nice good murkin

Maju-Came kind of weak....Work on something structure was ok
but work on some thing.....Multies Definitly need more
work.So does similies and metas....But keep elevatin and work on alot
of things
v.KIllah