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$MOKESKREEN Vs. Undestrucable
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10 lines max no d/r no c/v no h/v 3-0 is ko blind spit spit due 20 min afta check in check asap check now |
chigidy check.......................................
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u checkin in or what???????????????????????????????
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U didn't check in but...fuck it
I’m slicin’ through ya body nigga rippin ya cartilage Ya verse is like a sewer hole it’s flowin wit garbage You lyrically farted I’m killin ya and just getting started Couldn’t spit a special verse if ya yas fuckin’ retarted Destruct the “Undestructible” my verse is physically untouchable Dr ya ass like Huxtable from the Cosby’s turn u into a Lunchable A comic exhibit ya style reached its limit this nigga is timid Ban and prohibit ya wack ass life cuz aint no use to live-it Battle me kid u gonna regret it and don’t u neglect it You gonna take a “L” dogg remember I said it |
Damn nigga, your shyt iz a bore, u rap az slow as my grandma drives//
a chance of u beatin me is like a chance for da sun don't rise// You won 3 times straight, so its time for you ta start loosin// Battlin me?Are you mental, jst go back to ur home da ill mental institution// Hearin you rhyme? Is like eatin ur moms home made cinninman roll// It sucks cuz it has no taste, so get a rap book n practice a lil mo// Definition of $mokeScreen: White boy, 4 feet tall n has color-blindness// If he waz eva to be rated, he'd be a 10, Oops i forgot da minus// Your three n O, im bout to add a loss to ur record if u didn't know// Cuz why should i even try wen dis kid raps weaker den a 3 year old// Shyt...if you good i dunno..but i ain't even tryin |
fuck nigga...i think i went to easy on you..o wellz..and why should i check in wen im da one dat created dis shyt..plus it sed check now..which means i checked..DUH!!!!how stupid can you get???ironicly this stupid
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Bitch it took you about 40min's to post that bullshit...tha rules was 20min's after check in u gotta spit ya verse. If you checked in when you created the thread...then your shit was 20min's late RETARD!!!
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I’m slicin’ through ya body nigga rippin ya cartilage
Ya verse is like a sewer hole it’s flowin wit garbage You lyrically farted I’m killin ya and just getting started Couldn’t spit a special verse if ya yas fuckin’ retarted Destruct the “Undestructible” my verse is physically untouchable Dr ya ass like Huxtable from the Cosby’s turn u into a Lunchable A comic exhibit ya style reached its limit this nigga is timid Ban and prohibit ya wack ass life cuz aint no use to live-it Battle me kid u gonna regret it and don’t u neglect it You gonna take a “L” dogg remember I said it The Dr You like Huxtable line was tight... The whole verse had a good flow but not many punchlines in it... I think the Dr line was the nices it had some good wordplay in it, and the lines before it weren't too bad, but after words it seemed like you relaxed on it. Damn nigga, your shyt iz a bore, u rap az slow as my grandma drives// a chance of u beatin me is like a chance for da sun don't rise// This was kinda weak... very basic and the punch wasn't terrific You won 3 times straight, so its time for you ta start loosin// Battlin me?Are you mental, jst go back to ur home da ill mental institution// I think you coulda gotten a sick line outta this but its too basic the way it is and your structure stretches. Hearin you rhyme? Is like eatin ur moms home made cinninman roll// It sucks cuz it has no taste, so get a rap book n practice a lil mo// Definition of $mokeScreen: White boy, 4 feet tall n has color-blindness// If he waz eva to be rated, he'd be a 10, Oops i forgot da minus// This was funny- Good punch decent setup Your three n O, im bout to add a loss to ur record if u didn't know// Cuz why should i even try wen dis kid raps weaker den a 3 year old// This was a good closer.... Funny nice punch I think this verse was stronger in a couple ways- It had more punchlines that stuck... Not much wordplay but it flowed just as well as the first verse, and had a much better closer. Vote--Undestructable... Good battle yall please return the favor.. http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125461 |
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hahaha..thanx....uppin 4 more votes
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uppin............................................. ..........
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UnDeStRuCaBlE good spit you murked him but he sory of does have a point on the check part but owell you murked him and that is all that matters
$mokescreen elevate you may be 3-0 but UnDeStRuCaBlE must be better then you cause you lost Vote: UnDeStRuCaBlE |
sorry UnDeStRuCaBlE it says i need 120 post to vote ill be back latter to vote man.
if you can return the favor link in sig |
Aight...
Smokescreen: Your flow was aight! Structure ok. You had some nice punches. I especially liked your opener...your closer was kinda weak. That line with the Huxtable was really original. I also liked that verse on the "special rime". UndestrucT: You should have came harder...you know you didn't drop a nice rime. Your structure was ok. Your opener was weaker than your close. That's were you set your precedent. I wasn't feeling ya after the opener. You had a couple of nice punches though. That minus 10 spit was the best in your verses. The rest was simple...nothing complex at all. Close battle, but my vote goes to... Vote: Smoke |
waablo
both were good..but Smokey takez that 1...
Peace. IG14Life |
IG14Life
holla at me if u wan battle bruv..
set me the fuck up! Peace. |
i'm starting to get alittle tight about voting cuz i vote for people but they don't return tha fava so before i vote on this battle one of you please vote on tha battle on my sig and i'll return tha fava
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i promise
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Uppin.....u gotta have 120 votes or more ppl!!!!!!!!!
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A'ight...this was a close battle, but I weak one...Smokescreen, I thought some of ya shit was tite...structure was good, flow was good...multies was a'ight...you just need to throw in some personals. Undestructable, I thought you came a'ight for a new guy...you just need to werk on everythin to get even better.
Vote- Smokescreen No Hate. Hit these up. http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130043 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130054 |
uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!
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Uppin for honest votes so we can get this closed ppl. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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damn this was a tight battle but damn arrest got merked
smoke was an iight verse... multies were iight but nothing was spetacular... punchlines were iight but not very good but they were enought to merk undestrucable.... personals were iight but ive seen alot better....structure was alot better then arrest and that is why you won...flow was pretty nice and it had it ups and downs but overall you won this battle undestrucable you had an iight verse but it was pretty weak at times... structure was iight but you really need to stop with // and shyt to end your lines that really getting played...mutlies were iight but pretty lame at times ... personals well i think werent any....punchlines were str8 but smokesckreen had alot more.. and that is the reason why you lost Vote=smokeskreen please return the favor in my sig thank you |
Uppin!!!!!!!!! CAN WE GET SOME VOTES SO THIS CAN GET CLOSED!!!!!!!!!!!!! IT'S ALMOST A MONTH OLD
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Kid bit....gay...good thing he's banned....
smoke u won this one ne'ways if he didnt get banned. hit this up wit an honest vote please. thanks http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132403 |
iight man..ill vote on this hott battle if u vote for mines first..i swear ill return the favor heres the link
http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...54&page=2&pp=15 |
ayo..keep it the voting honest though yo...iight good looks
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uppin this shit!!! u need 120 post to vote!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I’m slicin’ through ya body nigga rippin ya cartilage
Ya verse is like a sewer hole it’s flowin wit garbage Nice punch, good opener 7/10 You lyrically farted I’m killin ya and just getting started Couldn’t spit a special verse if ya yas fuckin’ retarted the lyrically farted wasnt good, but the next line was good "special verse" good. 7/10 Destruct the “Undestructible” my verse is physically untouchable Dr ya ass like Huxtable from the Cosby’s turn u into a Lunchable weak punch..weak weak 4/10 A comic exhibit ya style reached its limit this nigga is timid Ban and prohibit ya wack ass life cuz aint no use to live-it good..nuttin special though..aight 6/10 Battle me kid u gonna regret it and don’t u neglect it You gonna take a “L” dogg remember I said it weak weak closer..boring 3/10 averaged: 5.4 Damn nigga, your shyt iz a bore, u rap az slow as my grandma drives// a chance of u beatin me is like a chance for da sun don't rise// the first line was ass, real ass, then u came up so i have 2 give u half 5/10 You won 3 times straight, so its time for you ta start loosin// Battlin me?Are you mental, jst go back to ur home da ill mental institution// weak..heard dat shit a million times..wack 2.5/10 Hearin you rhyme? Is like eatin ur moms home made cinninman roll// It sucks cuz it has no taste, so get a rap book n practice a lil mo// wack..wack..wack..1 more time..WACK. nuttin 'WOW'. 3/10 Definition of $mokeScreen: White boy, 4 feet tall n has color-blindness// If he waz eva to be rated, he'd be a 10, Oops i forgot da minus// aight..no more punches?...im waitin for them..4/10 Your three n O, im bout to add a loss to ur record if u didn't know// Cuz why should i even try wen dis kid raps weaker den a 3 year old// weak closer..man..that was a simplistic punchline...weak 3/10 averaged: 3.5 vote: $moke ------------------------------------ both of yall can yall please honestly and professionaly on my current battle..judge it right cuz mad people gettin DQ'd for it...iight 1..please vote because i took a while to think about dis battle.1 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132100 |
both were good....i liked this battle...best i've seen in a while an good an close too....but smoke wuz a lil betta so ma vote goes to him
vote=smoke |
Uppin For Votes....u Need 120 Post To Vote.... I Will Return The Favor!!!
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screen was your verse was hot. You had some tight punches and good lines. Your flow was also aight. Structure was good to read also.
Undestructable, not a bad verse but not as good as smoke. You had some ok punches but not as good as him. Vote Smookescreen |
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