Drama n Stress
 

Drama n Stress
seems like that is all that is left
in this relationship wit us
I made a mistake in the past
but this is the present
I pray everyday but I just can’t seem 2 fa get it
you took a risk on me n I appreciate it
you helped me straitin up my life
an now I have everything orchestrated
girl you’re the one I want n now I got you
never eva wanna lose you
you keep me 2getha n wit out you I’d fall apart
I hope that I always stay in your heart
I hope we last and that we never fail
I’ll support you no matta what you do
baby this i promise you

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yo im feelin it that was pretty tight playa keep it up ight ~1~

thanx man...uppin

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hope she forgave you after that shit...

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ya she did but we broke up bout a month or so afta

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damn...don't jus read it...hit me up n tell me what da hell u think bout it...feed back plz...

DAMN...Quit sleepin on dis...hit me up wit some feedback...

yo, this was noble of u man, you showed your emotions and feelings, and that your not afraid to display them for public viewing, thats a good quality, anyways, i liked it,
some raw shit

that was pretty dope had lots of emotion's and alot of feeling going toward the piece ..and i really found it good.. really impressed me...

Damn...thanx fa da feedback...uppin dis still...feed back plz

still uppin...hit me up wit feedback and i'll get back at some of ya stuff....

im feelin that homie nice drop.. reminds me of a past relationship.. she took a risk on you? was she over 18 and your under 18? just a guess.. haha aite 1

na kidd...da risk part was that i got a rep fa cheatin on females...n she took a risk by gettin wit me n trustin me...dat is all da risk shyt was...

yo thx fa da feedback...still uppin dis

like i said you are a good writer and this poems proves it it's hot

thx flip...really feelin ur poems 2 kidd...still uppin dis

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feedback...leave a link n i'll get back at u

.................................................. ...was aight

ay thanx fa da feedback...uppin

good poem

ty...still uppin

nice poem keep up the good job

thanx still uppin

i was really feeling that poem

thanx fa da feed...uppin

uppin dis

uppin leave a link an i'll get back at you

uppin...feedback plz

alright. It was alright, the only line i didnt like was, you keep me together and without you i fall apart. It could have been said without the fall apart section. But besides that, this was pure straight human emotion with no thought put into it. I am not saying it as a bad thing, you just shared all of your emotions without coating it with big words or some crazy metaphors. 6.5/10

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ay thanks fa the feedback...uppin

leave a link an i'll get back at ya...iight...uppin

I really liked this part:

I pray everyday but I just can’t seem 2 fa get it
you took a risk on me n I appreciate it
you helped me straitin up my life
an now I have everything orchestrated

Good work. Short but sweet.