TheOne vs. -NERVEZ-
 

aight, 10 linez
due TONIGHT!!!! :cussing:
No krew or hate votez
no bitin!! :cussing:
aight? peace out man(\1/)

aight man

Aight yo look u lil noob that tryin to fuk wid TheOne
Thiz iz ur first battle, an first lesson, listen up son

U fukin wid me, ur messin wid fire an i fire burnz
U lil fuk, i feel sorry fo u, i guess ur the guy who learnz

To mess wid a nigga like thiz, 3-6 an just gettin started
An the worst part iz, I'm a machine thatz been de-hearted

He kallz himself nervez, kuz hez the man who swervez
On the road as hez goin round cornaz, an right here'z some curvez

I'm one an u just lost, ova the kliff an down the mountain, no chance of survival
Fuk i messed u up so bad, therz no chance of healin, close casket funeral, no revival

IM about to piss on the brook, aint yo momma tell you not to listen to crooks
cut off your legs and your next song be about missing a foot,torch your face,

put the fire out with forks bearing hooks.Blaring raps on contact yo fukin lungs collapse.
If u the one then why da fuk u comin in last?Shistee how NERVEZ Gets shit so hiffee,leave u at the bottom of da bay sightseeing
So u Hard?punk ass probably was raised in a barn,suckin off sheep like he Babe of da farm
Bitches like u treat the mic like a dick and try to blowit
so i get on yo fukin knees an make you smile like a donut

You fake ,and immitation so back da fuk down/ aint rappin about money boy get yo head out da clouds

i'll be back.............................................. .

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can yall cats vote on who yall think came mo sicc wid it.waitin on da vote$ :shoot: :shoot: :shoot: :shoot: :shoot: im still new 2 dis site ESO

eh yo dawgz, wuz up? hit up thiz battle an leave HONEST FEEDBAK:thumbup:

i cant vote yet but ill provide feedback. One came strong with decent punches. his structure was really good, flow was decent but it lacked mutlis. nerves used played swing-and-miss cliche punches. his structure was piss-poor, and because it was poorly layed out it ruined his flow and made it hard to read. nerves, you really got to work on personals, rather then the overused "ima kill you bitch/yo momma!" type crap

aight than xIll, i appreciate the feedbak man:thumbup:

not a good battle.......one ur elevatin ur shit alot better than when i first got at ya, big ups meng. keep doin ur thang, and try throw in some good multies.....nerves shit was too basic all been heard and said before go beyond the basics, and youll be alright, aight vote goes to theone

and can u guyz return da fav

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130063

thanx HB thanx fo the feedbak:thumbup: an i'll hit up ur battle

damn thats coo no love. i was high off that purple i thought it was coo

thaone gotz this battle, tha other man, he seemed like he just freestyled that shit, didnt care about adding good punchlines, and thaones read alot better. Seemd like i got lost in Nerves words, peace.

aight yo letz get sum votez on thiz battle i no i wun kuz every1 getz lost in his writin so letz get sum votez

need sum votes............................................. .....

nervez i cant vote till i get some more post but when i can vote i will vote for you b\c you put out his fire

can we get sum votes plse...............................

i liked nervez better cause the other cat was too simple and the punches were weak.

best line: put the fire out with forks bearing hooks.Blaring raps on contact yo fukin lungs collapse.
If u the one then why da fuk u comin in last?Shistee how NERVEZ Gets shit so hiffee,leave u at the bottom of da bay sightseeing

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cmon ppl wherez the votez on this battle? lemme rightfully win kuz no1 kan follow his ass an lets get on wit this

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132754

Vote the weak mafucka on my thread because He think I prewrite so fuck it I wanna let him have it so please vote and give him a pussy win....

Ayo I'll hit ya'll with a honest vote if you do this...=(

nuff said :laugh:

The One took this for a better verse but quit with the..

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structure its newbish you want it to flow like this..

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it all flows same for you nervez..
pz.

get rid of that vote please............................................ ..........

Hate to be a bitch but-

This battle was fucked up.... Horrible, horrible. One more time: horrible.

rhymes- both were forced, but TheOne had it
structure- TheOne, though I liked neither
multies- tie, neither of you had em
word play- neithe of yah
overall: it was every rappers nightmare

Both of y'all seriously need to work on y'all personals and punches... But my vote has to TheOne, by a hair.