ILL Tempa vs. Poetic_Prophet87
 

RULEZ:
10 line minimum 20 line max.
No Crew, Hate, or D/R.
Check in sometime today (June 20th.)
Verses due 1 hour after check in (Dealine is Midnight)
No show = dq.

Where you at cuz. You got till midnight.

Man, I just caught this shit...I've been working, I'll post a verse asap, sorry if it's kinda shitty, but it's gonna be spur of the moment...Checkin in now too, by the way...Goodluck fam!

I'll show you ill-tempa as I rip ya limbs from their member
You need to feed ya verses some Miracle Gro, they lookin slender

I'll lyrically slice ya, like Jason vs. Freddy
I'd beat ya three times in a row, even if ya name was Ed, Edd and Eddy

Against me, you don't deserve to drop a verse of text lyrical
I'll play God, cut you off at the knees and really have you prayin for a miracle

You might be in a "foul-MOOD", but for you that spells "DOOM"
I'll use everything you got against you, like a straight jacket and padded room

You could be "Llyod" "Banks" but I aint "charity", you still spit "dumb-like-Christmas" (think about it, funniest movie of all time)
You tryin to get sneak-peaks at my verses, but they tricky, so sorry ya missed us

You should save ya verse for when you actually stand a chance
Cause my lyrics sneak by ya and leave ya blind at first glance!!

Goodluck man...Sorry bout not seeing this in time, had to work though, like I said...!

Yo you past tha deadline but i'll let it slide since you been workin n shit. I'll post my verse sometime today.

I'm ready to battle at all times, it's 4:56 in tha mornin//
There's a ship goin to "Garbage MC's Island"....
......You're tha first one boardin//

Poetic's face is bruised, it's obvious I'm beatin him//
I'll leave this kat so ugly........
.......He'll have to pay his pillows to sleep wit em//

Your "diets" lookin bad cuz ya chances are "slim", so yo boyz gave to tha needy//
They "fed" you lines to help you win, but you still won't beat me//

If you a prophit make a miracle, end world hunger & quench tha worlds thirst//
Nevermind you already showed me a miracle.......
[color=green].........You came up with a verse//

No matter what i'm gunna win this battle, like it or not//
You suck so bad that if you went to hell you still wouldn't be hot//

It took you so long to write yo verse that you didn't make that deadline//
I read "Whack Magazine" yesterday.......
...............Good news! you made tha headline//

But ya flowz are smooth..........Bout as smooth as gravel//
Nigga you needed GOOD LUCK just to LOSE this battle.

ILL Tempa your punches were harder than Poetic's and that they landed...your structure..u need to fix that shit up...cuz all they damn period's aint workin'..

vote = ILL

uppin for votes.....

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I'm ready to battle at all times, it's 4:56 in tha mornin//
There's a ship goin to "Garbage MC's Island"....
......You're tha first one boardin//
-complete filler line, horrible opener
Poetic's face is bruised, it's obvious I'm beatin him//
I'll leave this kat so ugly........
.......He'll have to pay his pillows to sleep wit em//
-alright comedy line, but not a LOL
Your "diets" lookin bad cuz ya chances are "slim", so yo boyz gave to tha needy//
They "fed" you lines to help you win, but you still won't beat me//
-punch didnt hit at aLL
If you a prophit make a miracle, end world hunger & quench tha worlds thirst//
Nevermind you already showed me a miracle.......
.........You came up with a verse//
[COLOR=royalblue]-real good Line, i had a Little LaFF on this ONe
No matter what i'm gunna win this battle, like it or not//
You suck so bad that if you went to hell you still wouldn't be hot//
-this line was good, but it lacked vocab, dont be so blunt
It took you so long to write yo verse that you didn't make that deadline//
I read "Whack Magazine" yesterday.......
...............Good news! you made tha headline//
-corny
But ya flowz are smooth..........Bout as smooth as gravel//
Nigga you needed GOOD LUCK just to LOSE this battle.
-good line, i wud give it a 6/10 as a closure

//i chose this verse to critque b/c the other one was garbage\\
vote: iLL TemPa

return the favor, the battle is in my sig...

Okay, my verse was garbage!? WTF is up with this site...You can't just break down one verse and give that person the vote...Why was my verse garbage, cause you didn't understand the punches I threw?! Cause maybe I'm too elevated for you to understand them!? Anywho...2-0 ILL...Uppin ya'll!

uppin for votes......

to elevated 4 me?. lmao, im not one to chat, so lets battle.....lmao at his record

ill tempa had good punches, flow, an structure, overall it very nice.
poetic ya verse was ight to but not as good as ill tempas. ya punches wasnt hitten as hard, an its all about tha punches, an metas to me, an you was slippn in that area so.....................

mah vote goes to ill tempa.

uppin for votes........

I'll vote on your when you vote on mines

lol ill tempa took this, he had better everythin, dude than 1st line bout garbage island had me pissin myslef lol. nice, both keep it up man u doin ite.

drop a vote on dis plz http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130988

break down

opener:ill
punches:both
flow:both
structure:ill
wordplay:none
personals:both
closer:ill
overall:ill

good battle tho.......