~Tweeza~Vs.~Horus (The Truth)~
 

Rules:

10-12 lines
NO DR, CREW/HATE VOTES
No feeding
No biting
No recycling either

20 mins time limit after checkin' in!

You spit first!

Ok this has the poll on it... EVERYONE VOTE ON THIS BATTLE!

You seem like a joke so Ima do this for fun//
You couldn't think of your own name,so you took that of Osiris's son//
Just sit back, relax and lemme get this off my chest//
You're not an MC, you're a fucken 'piece of shit' at its best//
You'll be lucky enough if people don't ignore you//
Why don't u just give up and I'll make a rap up for you//
You took too much time to make a rap and didn't get that far//
Obviously you're a noobie it looks like u tried too hard//
You're too new to battle me I've got experience//
Battle someone easier so try battling Dissonance//

i don't know how to copy and paste, i'll just copy it word for word, it won't take long.....

Ok guyz, as soon as Horus posts his verse... Start votin. (REMEMBER... HE WENT FIRST!) Thx!

Check it,

Tweeza, your style is more chessy than a Round Table Pizza/
that's why it's easy ta eat ya, i'll release the heat ta defeat ya/
you battled the wrong creature, tell me, what's the purpose/
coz your lyrics are very healthy, mines are sicker that Magic Irvin/
or Irvin Magic, whatever you preffer, you fag-got/
my rhyme will amaze and shock you like a surge of static/
but your an insult to rap, you need to be killed, so i'll do/
take you out, coz you lower the mode average of hip hop's value/
you know what "son", i should treat you like beef and just ground you/
man, this is the precise reason that i clown dudes/
yea, i know, i'm harsh and you might say i'm a hater/
but man, you exhale stank rhymes that fuck up our Ozone layer/
so fasho, we could see saw/
i went first, gave you a plate and now you have something to feed off/

Note: i went first in the other room with that verse

Ok Guys! Uppin' For Votes! Sorry For All The Confusion!

clarification: i didn't even mean to say mode average in line 8, i meant to say "mean" average, i don't know what i was thinking.

while reading it, just replace the word "mode" with "mean", in your head. it'll make more sense

why can't we edit this shit?

I'm gonna start this voting off it looks like...
Sorry to steal someone elses style, but I like how he put it:
Vote = Tweeza (Now you can waste your time reading why if you'd like)

You'll be lucky enough if people don't ignore you//
Why don't u just give up and I'll make a rap up for you//
(Good punch, funny stuff)
Just sit back, relax and lemme get this off my chest//
You're not an MC, you're a fucken 'piece of shit' at its best//
(Good solid hits...not super technical, but very solid)
Those were just my fav. lines from you...On the opposite side:
You took too much time to make a rap and didn't get that far//
Obviously you're a noobie it looks like u tried too hard//
(Felt like it lost a bit of flow/structure...)
You're too new to battle me I've got experience//
Battle someone easier so try battling Dissonance//
(Not against it cuz you used me as a diss, {what you were gettin at was good} but dawg...my name just does not rhyme with experience...lol)

Horus:
Tweeza, your style is more chessy than a Round Table Pizza/
that's why it's easy ta eat ya, i'll release the heat ta defeat ya/
(Good start, nothin really bad about it...but from then on it starts fallin apart)
you know what "son", i should treat you like beef and just ground you/
(Nice...first time I seen that one, I like)
but your an insult to rap, you need to be killed, so i'll do/
take you out, coz you lower the mode average of hip hop's value/
(Another good punch, but the delivery could have been stronger)
Bad:
so fasho, we could see saw/
i went first, gave you a plate and now you have something to feed off/
(??? I get the second line...but you didn't work see-saw into the first one very good at all...took me three or four times before i caught that it was a play and not just stupidity {No Offense by the way})
The only reason I voted against you was because other than the nice punches here and there, none of it was completely solid. Your structure was a bit hard to catch and the flow chopped quite a bit in spots...I do like the fact that you "played" with words more than tweeza, shows more thought into it.

So again: Vote = Tweeza

ayo Horus won that shit hands down he had better puchlines than tweezer and my vote goes to.

Horus(thetruth)=Vote

This is why sometimes, i don't like Votes.
my shit is too complex for some peeps, actually, see-saw means to feed off of in a battle, not to play.
it means that he needed me to lift him up, so he would have something. it is a complex punchline and involves street slang, you guys are gonna have to stop judging me like a cyber MC, i am a real spitter man.
judge this right ya'll..

this wasent really a battle.. horus came weak and still bea this dude... if you dont get his punches, its cause u not on his level period.. cause it wasent to hard to get....

flow: horus
Punches: easily horus (actually had good punches)
metas:were none :P
structure:tied
delivery:horus

not that much explanation needed if you read both verses.

v/horus

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well there was no competiton
Tweeza won this battle easily
Structure was good and his whole rap rhymed
vote=Tweeza

I guess so, i think that i need ya'll to elaborate more because i don't get what ya'll say sometimes. he says every thing in Tweeza's verse rhymed, even though he rhymed Experience with Dissonance..

but does punchlines and word play mean anything anymore?
i might need to switch styles....

What are you smoking when you say no cometition? the truth dissed him. and actually Horus rhymed his verse better in most parts.
like "tweeza, your style is cheesy like pizza, that's why it's easy to eat ya"
did you even get the punch line?
and it rhymed well also. he didn't demolish Tweeza, but he definiteley won.
if both of them wrote 100 bars, i would feel like reading the truth's more for entertainment. that's what this is, entertainment, his punches were more clever, showing more wit in his words.
V=Horus

Yea, i agree somewhat. Horus did rhyme, if they were verbalized in a song it was sound great, and the stucture was a little off, but it wasn't kaos, enough to get his point across.

It really came down to his punches like cookie said, Horus had better lines.

i vote for him

Dang, take it easy.. Shesh, you guys are all serious, it's about fun! Uppin for votes still! Please be honest!

Return the favor!

Tweeza Vs. Dissonance
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130763

Tweeza Vs. Double Cross
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130254

lol, I know I already told you that I liked your complexity by your "play" with words. So obviously it wasn't "too complex", just want to point out though, that there were only two complex bars in that whole spit:

you battled the wrong creature, tell me, what's the purpose/
coz your lyrics are very healthy, mines are sicker that Magic Irvin/
or Irvin Magic, whatever you preffer, you fag-got/
(I just don't get it...given I don't know who the hell Magic Irvin is, so maybe flipping his name meant something and it all tied in with "wrong creature" hell if i know...very complicated...possibly another level I won't ever achieve...ah well)

and


so fasho, we could see saw/
i went first, gave you a plate and now you have something to feed off/
(I definately got it...but it actually was complicated. I understood the "see saw" and "feed off" didn't catch the "see saw" and 'lifting him up' though...but technically the lifting him up part wasn't at all part of the play, since you never said anything about elevating him...the see-saw/feed off was good though.)

Other than those two punches...everything was extremely basic. Good rhymes, not too bad of a flow, but here:

or Irvin Magic, whatever you preffer, you fag-got/
my rhyme will amaze and shock you like a surge of static/
(shock you like a surge of static huh? no hate...just not a good punch)

man, this is the precise reason that i clown dudes/
yea, i know, i'm harsh and you might say i'm a hater/
but man, you exhale stank rhymes that fuck up our Ozone layer/
(nothing in there was a play and "exhale...fuck up our Ozone layer" was just aight)

just thought I'd elaborate on your "Too complex for ya'll" comments...I'm pretty sure most of these monkeys can get your spit...two bars out of a whole verse shouldn't be enough to lose you a battle

HORUS got his one...his punches were harder than his & they connected...tha flow was good also tha structure was a little bit betta than Tweeza's...Tweeza....man...yo punches was good but not as hard as HORUS's....keep elevatin'...my vote goes to HORUS becuz his punches were just plain harder man.....peace...

yea, i'm trying to work on my punches and my flow.

but as far as me saying i'm sicker than Irvin Magic, you don't know Who Irvin Magic Johnson is?
he's a famous Basketball Player who caught HIV like a decade ago....

bump

lol..yeah I figured on the whole basketball player thing (I don't got a tv to watch sports and i'm usually playin em instead so I don't even try to keep up...all I care is that the Lakers didn't win...)

...i still don't understand the "like magic Irvin/ or Irvin Magic, whichever you prefer you fag-got/"

Was that a play/punch or just flippin the words for flow...i can see doin it for flow, but i'm so lost if that was a play.
Good luck on tha battle both of ya...(i'll up this for you) VOTE PEOPLE!

It was obviously for Flow, i noticed that when I first read it, it flowed nice.

bumpin up fa votes..

Vote.. The truth he ripped this up with punches.. flow was decent aswell.. othere dude was aight but not as good pz.