DON vs. Virt (Topical Battle)
 

20 lines min
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topic:
You have to speak at the funeral of someone you have murdered....
verse due tomarow night 10:00 pacific and 1:00 Eastern

aight chekin in ill drop it tomoro too aight itll be good pc

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this took hella long....
 

..For mine, there is an inside message,
catch it if you can..

Thoughts rustle as I pull up to the cemetery get out and slam the door
Ignore my headache its weird my brains never been this bland n' sore
Its been slammed before but I continue anyway walkin near the casket
Outside funeral, beautiful day I see the people I wanna steer right past em
My fear has had it but I avoid the oppression and think about Derricks death
Gave him a one way ticket for what he did; but now I've had to inherit stress
The stares whats next? His family members all thinkin why did I do it
I walk past his mother kiss her forehead the truth lays in her bruisin'
But I'll break the confusion; I jus stare at his picture and forward step
And when I reach the platform I start to tell my story but more in depth

*Takes a sip from the water, adjusts tie*
*Breathes in*..

*I start to talk*..but in short sentences..

It aint simple havin to put my thoughts to words
You may think ya I killed em but Im still lost n' hurt
A bad kid known by cops never been caught in church
Little deviant and every time his cause got worse
Specially this time it was in one of his spots to lurk
Usually he was a sneaky dude not often burnt
He got busted for caine his mothers thoughts lost in worth
But for once his mind was else where prolly dropped in earth
This stress you'd think they'd fought the worst
I went to pay for bail but it seemed some1 had bought em first..


*I look down at the ground, rub my eyes, and continue..*

Aight so now the debt is paid and his mom n' him have no communication
And even when his neighbors had cussed 'em D made it thru the hatin
He usually abused the hatred when his mom yelled n' he took the pain
She grabbed him by his shirt slapped but he just shook his face
I jus watched, looked the same he knows what he did no remorse
A tear drops from D's eye tells me he suffers from all the blows of course
The rows are coarse the lines on his face where his mother hit
He walks to his room now prolly goin to get another fix
By now the summers hit cant stand inside D's out a lot more
Some shit has changed the fams moved same place top floor
They're not poor but not wealthy n' now his moms seein a guy
Hes a tall dude a tight job and it seems hes treatin her right
D's now leavin the spite;start investin in a new job
Gettin out the crack game now only known by a few cops
Then the news drops, D's moms havin a kid by this dude
A family bound to break and now this shit had hit feud
All this had ripped thru, Derricks soul now wasted n' bland
Drugs gone thru em now thinkin of it puts his face in his hand
Now look at the state of this man broken fam and cracked out
I wanted to help but it'd be tough knowin his last drought
Look at him past out n' when he speaks he rambles
Wanted to teach him lessons but he was too weak to handle
Its like his feet were mangled, carryin a burden walkin the ground
All he could remember was the yellin no stoppin the sound
But he decided to venture home to his ma ask for forgiveness
n' as soon as he walked in she jus continued wit more hittin
D dropped to the floor spittin, blood from his lip and nose
He turned and punched her as soon as he hit it froze
I suppose time jus stopped n' when I looked Derrick just stared
This kid was vicious I knew now why he'd inherited stares
It'd laired n' his hair the blood some how he'd bashed his forehead
He got up looked at her n' attempted to lash wit more hits
I smashed n' soreness pulled him back in his head and heart
I threw him to the wall wishin, hopin that he was dead to start
'Im goin to my bed' he barked I watched his mom weep in sorrow
I moved to his room spit in his face and said you better leave tomorrow
He said you got any sneeze to borrow I was ready to lunge with grace
*SMASH*..I stared cuz I knew Id broke his skull when I punched his face
It was grunge this place he laid there bleedin surely unconcious
All of this anger in me flooring out bein pure n was wanted
He'd lured n' taunted finally I dealt with it I jus left the room
Head was poundin the way the stress hit boom...


*Tear drops down*

Me and D's mom bounced left the crib and brought her to hotel
Tears from her eyes poured I watched as the flow fell
I stared at the wall then went back to D's place check if was breathin' yet
Walked in his room chest wasnt movin grabbed his wrist started feelin it
He wasnt breathin I looked at the floor his 'E' case was empty
Shit changed so fast I jus grabbed the phone my breathin was heavy
His bleedin was plenty and the cops were bound to come soon
"D Im sorry you were actin up, defended myself shit I learned from u"
I wish you'd come to...

*The Priest starts walkin to the podium*

..I've been hurtin a while knowin that we never made a life for ourselves
We shoulda been huntin, learnin from the shit put strife on the shelf..
And in self I been noticin' with out Derrick here I've disappeared
n' Im keep carryin this burden cuz I know all this shit is fear..

*The priest stands on the platform and addresses the people with a nod*..

Derrick forgive me; we were one and to know I was never charged
I took the weak way out knowin u'd kill me if we ever sparred
It was hard knowing that the stuff u did to ur ma u'd want to hurt her
They said you OD'd man but I jus knew it was murder..



*The priest talks.."Hello everyone we're here in remembrance
of a young man whos died; taking his life, Derrick Sampson"
"Derrick took his life on Saturday nite, no marks of struggle or anything
No blood, no bruises...just an obvious sign of suicide, the police
and Derricks mother found him and his bag of drugs on Saturday"..

"Derrick will be deeply missed,"*

It saddens me D I ponder on the lies that have filled you
n' even more, OUR soul burns knowing that I killed you..

*And now, to tell us about Derrick, Mrs. Sampson*


....thanks for reading....

Strollin to the podium...recolections reflection of time...
Should I start off with he was great?...should I start off wit he was mine?
Questions engluf my mind...and guilt raids my thought...
A quick glance up at my wife...the tears simmer from disdraught...
"He lived and died by the morals he was taught"...

And I brace to deliver...inside my mind the idea came to spark...
"He was a good kid"...should i reveal it or keep it sustained in the dark...
"A lota respect he had"...Yet i knew this wasnt true...
"Never scared to follow the ways he knew"...suspensful sounds seein me through...
"Neva thought of himself"...a voice inside my head:nah he was thinkin of you...

"People ask me who he was...and i tell them the kid was the purest"...
I shoulda said man...critizin my words like diamonds by jewelist...
"Well truth is"...my voice chokes;come on jus get through this...
"Well what i shoulda said was"...no time to recover...
How could i end a life...and still make love wit his mother...
"Vince wasnt bad he jus some immoral decisions were chosen"...
My devilish shadow cast before the ground stands frozen...
"Most of you know...youve all been accustomed to the life"...

A closed casket sits before me...face accidently devastated by knifes...

"Well um he broke our code...and we all know the result"...

The glances turned to hate...mob man viewin his own accult...

He now sleeps wit tree roots...overlookin a valley...
Never witness his last image...cause he was retorn in an alley...

"Its sad really cause Vince was my only one"...

I couldn't finish...no justification for killin my son...

aight these were both nice..DOn u had it good for yur first topical and don u elevatin alot from wen i first saw u but ye..i think V got this bcuz he had a better verse in my opinion but DON u had a good verse to but i think V tooke this

my vote/Virt

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uppin dont sleep on it this is our first topical battle

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damn nice battle..virt had iight flow, a little choppy at times but solid verse..don took dis, his verse had nice flow and it was easy to follow..hell of a verse fo yo first topical.. tight battle tho

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aight don go drop a vote on this one http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=131341

and my other two one is me vs economics and me vs some byomics guy go vote i'll try to vote here peace

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Uppin We Need Some Votes On Here..................

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uppin vote on this u bitches u sleep on this too much

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yo i dropped on this so holla at tha battle in my sig return niggas aight wun..

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This was a pretty good Battle.... Don, your verse was shorter, it had crazy flow to it, and you did a pretty good job of staying on topic- Virt, I think your verse was pretty dope, It was long as fuck- (one of the reasons I hate voting on topicals) - But you told a pretty dope story, you stayed on topic through out, and I was really feelin your verse... Vote Virt.... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132453

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uppin lets get some more votes to close off this battle aight pc

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