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olkingkole 06-24-04 02:26 PM

olkingkole vs. pictureperfect2
 
Ten lines
No time limit
I go first

olkingkole 06-24-04 02:40 PM

Why is it motherfuckers want me to go first?
Cuz they know if they do I'll slaughter their verse.
I jot down a curse when I do these battles.
My rhymes are unbridled like a horse w/ no saddle.
If you think you can hang then think again
You're about to cry Rivers like its Pinkerton.
If this ends w/ me on top like it should,
Then it proves your under par like Tiger Woods
Now make your next verse and don't make it tardy,
Or I'll eat your ass up like the Donner party.

M&rk 06-24-04 03:35 PM

ite check i'll have mine up soon. jus got back in i'll start keyin now

M&rk 06-24-04 04:14 PM

old king cole is spelled with a "c" and i put a insert from the nersery rhyme he figured he'd be cool and take his name from.


u first to drop first to get dropped bitches go first, heard me right?
and whats a softer bitch then someone named after a nursery rhyme
“Old King *C*ole was a merry old soul,
And a merry old soul was he;”
Till he noticed he would never have his vote poll full
Cuz u can’t know rap I if u don’t even know your own spelling
Olkingkole told me “I only got into this to get lil boys to love me,”
“That’s the deal wit the nursery name, I want all up in their huggies”
but now u left wit people hatin your spits and feelin my diss
cuz you and voters go together like love between bill o’reilly and ludacris

M&rk 06-25-04 03:53 PM

upppin..................

bcdynamic 06-25-04 04:35 PM

pictha un perfect
 
yu aint good yu iz bad but this aint a hate jus keep practicin due yull get it but come see me if yu want a real challenge

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M&rk 06-25-04 05:17 PM

yo bcdynamic go set that battle up, u hatin bitch.

bcdynamic 06-25-04 05:23 PM

naw
 
if yu really want it yull set it up yu fake one or should i say wack one

M&rk 06-26-04 06:20 PM

yo i won all thats left is the votes, get at this, uppin

Magic5 06-26-04 06:37 PM

olkingkole
structure was good...flow was on target...no metas...wordplay was decent...none of ur punches connected...no personals...

pictureperfect2
structure was ok...some of ur lines were stretched though...flow fell off a little due the some of the stretchness...a few metas...wordplay was pretty good...some of ur punches connected...no personals..

Overall
olkingkole had the better structure...as well as the better flow...neither had personals...pictureperfect had better wordplay...as well as more connecting punches...and knowing punches and wordplay r more important to have then structure and flow...pictureperfect gets my vote...

VOTE - PICTUREPERFECT2

roop 06-26-04 06:44 PM

picture i think diz is my first battle i read of urs but ur thing only rhymed like twice and your best line was ur closer

Flow-No Rhymes=no flow, picture get it. King didnt have great flow well atleast he rhymed.

Punches-There was like 2 punches in your verse, picture c' mon dawg, is this ur first battle. So ofcourse king took diz tooo

Structure-Picture krap.King a little bit better then picture

Complexity-Noob Level, no hate

Overall-I am saying diz alot but it was a weak battle because picture came weak

Vote King Cole


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M&rk 06-27-04 01:16 AM

yo lines 3,4,5,and6 are AB rhyme skemed, so they rhyme back and fourth. to clear up dat cat u thought my shit didn't rhyme. i took that in da qoute from the nersery rhyme he took his name from and thats how they rhymed it so i made up my next two lines in the same skeme to make fun of it. any uppin

olkingkole 06-27-04 02:18 PM

Ha your shit didnt rhyme at all. We need more votes.

Decree Wun 06-27-04 02:24 PM

picture: wtffffffff heyll naww that shit didnt even rhyme...good personals...bad structure ok flow...bad punches...wtf mayn lol...ok vocab..no multi's

ol king : good creativitie good punches good personals....didnt see any multi's....ur flow was good and ur structure was aiight...but at the end of each line put .... try it...u'll get good structure....good battle

vote: OLKING

i aint gon poll vote this until yall vote on this battle http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=131972

Decree Wun 06-27-04 02:30 PM

aiight poll vote my shit now mayn....................

M&rk 06-28-04 12:00 AM

good personals from him? name one, do u newbs even know what a personal is? and u even put "aiight poll vote my shit now mayn...................." can u make dick riding anymore obvious, thats some bowl shit right there.

Judge. 06-28-04 12:05 AM

Opener: tie
Structure: tie
Flow: Tie
Personals
Olking
Punches: picture
Closer: Picture
Vot: Picture

Yours was betta please return the favor in http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132007

FlowIntelligent. 06-28-04 12:12 AM

olkingcole:

Why is it motherfuckers want me to go first?
Cuz they know if they do I'll slaughter their verse.
^^in the first post you should you'll go first so fake personal good punch 5/10
I jot down a curse when I do these battles.
My rhymes are unbridled like a horse w/ no saddle.
^^seen alot of lines similar to this 5/10
If you think you can hang then think again
You're about to cry Rivers like its Pinkerton.
^^decent punch and meta 7/10
If this ends w/ me on top like it should,
Then it proves your under par like Tiger Woods
^^mostly filler 4/10
Now make your next verse and don't make it tardy,
Or I'll eat your ass up like the Donner party.
^^played line...eat ya ass up...donner...still good tho 5/10

overall : 26/50

pictureperfect2:

u first to drop first to get dropped bitches go first, heard me right?
and whats a softer bitch then someone named after a nursery rhyme
^^hottest bar in the battle strong personal nice diss 9/10
“Old King *C*ole was a merry old soul,
And a merry old soul was he;”
Till he noticed he would never have his vote poll full
Cuz u can’t know rap I if u don’t even know your own spelling
^^decnt didnt like the structure or rhyme scheme tho 5/10
Olkingkole told me “I only got into this to get lil boys to love me,”
“That’s the deal wit the nursery name, I want all up in their huggies”
^^lmao@ all up in their huggies funny shyt nice bar 7/10
but now u left wit people hatin your spits and feelin my diss
cuz you and voters go together like love between bill o’reilly and ludacris
^^lol good meta and strong closer nice verse 7/10

overall : 28/40

vote: picture perfect2

return the favor links in sig

i think pictureperfect took this battle with his opener and closer...olkingkole elevate stop being so basic make your rhymes more complex and harder punches ya verse was decent but not good enough to win

~!1!~

PoTeNtIaL 06-28-04 12:28 AM

picture took it...this battle was REALLY weak....his didnt rhyme but he hit harder...


http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125456

^^return the favor

Lil' Q 06-28-04 12:09 PM

yall must be smokin way to much crack cuz picture had some tight ass rhymes and i know yall think it dont matter from but u can suck my dick cuz pictures was fresh as hell v/ picture


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