Hoops Vs. SpitaFlame
 

aight
house rules (no dick ryding, non of that bs, no prewrittens (key it),voters must have 100+ posts to vote, and we drop 20 minutes after this is posted..
5 bars (10 lines).. Good Luck =)

Checking in.. im bout to key my shit up right now..

Alright im checkin in, good luck, ill spit right after u

im sayin.. we just drop at the same time, to avoid feeding of each others verse.. mine will be done in like 10 minutes... ima drop mine at 12:20 (its now 12:02)... cause its quite easy to beat sumone if you go after them, or it should be

Oh alright then i will get mine in at 12 20 just like you

aight yo check it...

spitaflame? na you not gassed, i'll take the F outcha name/
follow instructions and you'll see me beating this Spitting-Lame/
like one-eyed-pilots,purblind-pirots, no visions of "raps" in his sight/
when hes flyin-blindly-through clouds, only way percipitations left iced/
this kids a pigeon, no real material, extensivly bittin-bars/
"hawkin" back lugies the only sounds iv heard-of-you spittin hard/
im way-then-better, verses me he like hellen-keller dropped-in-pools/
like pit-stoppin to toilet seats, his ass is just floppin-in-stools/
punchline this massive "shawty" so hard, he takes flight into the air/
the funny thing is, his bodies elevating while his arms and legs are still there!..

explanations if needed...
*first bar means to take the F outa his name, and it spells "SpitaLame"..
**second bar, means he freezes percipitation in the clouds cause basically sucks, opposite his name...
***hellen keller is blind.. so shed most likly die if dropped in a big enuff pool.. again refering so me drowning him in my spits..
****the last bar lol.. just think of a mr potato head... got him?.. now kick him across the room.. his arms and legs most likley come off when his body flys lol... just for kicks i guess

Your piss poor, now thats what i call whack rappin..
You get no votes like a match that never happen...//

To get on my level you gotta take an extra flight of stairs,
God let it be known you still lose despite of prayers//

I spit mo fire then that dragon in shrek
You cant spit back like i was gaggin ya neck//

Your like weed cause all i do is smoke you,
Your like a knock knock rhyme cause your a joke du//

After i drop my verse yo chit chat Seise,
Take it from your sig, your done peace//

fuck.. stool is another word for shit, or excrament... so yea.. hate that you cant edit...

Nice verse, and its all good yea not editing sucks lets get some votes

Hoops
get rid of the - - and "" between and around ur words...thats newbish...structure was ok...most of ur lines were stretched though...flow fell off a lil due the stretchness...u had some tight metas...wordplay was also pretty tight...some of ur punches connected...no personals...

SpitaFlame
stop spacing ur bars man...structure was pretty good...flow was also pretty nice...no metas...attempted wordplay, but most of it was pretty weak...maybe a few of ur punches connected at most....no personals...

Overall
neither had personals...spitaflame had the better structure...as well as the better flow...hoops had more, and better metas...as well as better wordplay...his punches also connected more...so basing off of that...hoops gets my vote...

VOTE - HOOPS

Please return the favor on one of the links in my sig

uppin for more votes ya'll........................





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hoops was hittin hard but it the flow lost me couple of times but vocag and metas was real good......

spita flame came wit it too...with waht he lacked in meats he made up for in flow...but it was real general....

both didnt make it personal so the battles wasn't inetense...


i vote for....................spita flame

This was a close battle cuz both of ya'll was lame. I read Hoop's verse first then while i was readin Spitz verse i was thinkin to myself that hoops had won this. Cuz hoops had a little bit of a better verse. But that last line Spitz dropped took tha cake for him.
Keep elevatin. Vote - Spitaflame

Return tha favor. Link in my sig.

This battle wasnt that intense..i am a nigga that look for personals..and hoops had more..overall breakdown: Hoops you had a better flo and ur wordplay was preety good but a little long..good multis..Spitaflame..you lacked flo and personals..i'll tell you ..that you need some elevatin but you kept ur rhymes right to the point which i liked..

Hoops my vote goes to you but dont explain ya punchlines..it shows weakness

Hmmm...
Both Verses Were Aiight, But I Couldnt Really Feel Em...
But With SpitaFlame I Feel He Lacked Creativity And Wordplay...
Two Things That Are,What I Feel,VEEERRY Important In Supporting The Punch...
And Hoops, Ya Structure Was Off, I Agree On That...
It Made It Hard To Have Ya Verse Flow Properly In My Head...
Hmmmmm...
Kinda Even Cuz What Spitaflame Has Hoops Doesnt And What Hoops Has Spita Doesnt...
Gota Do It Like This...

Creativity-Hoops
Wordplay-Hoops
Punches-(Hmmm Daym, Spita Was More CONSISTANT So He Gets This)SpitaFlame
Flow-SpitaFlame(Hoops Structure Was To Distracting)
Opener-Hoops
Closer-Easily Hoops (Sayin You Knocked Out BUT YA PEN HAS YET TO ELEVATE! Daym That Was Some Shit)
Overall Enjoyment-SpitaFlame Due To The Flow
Hoops-5
SpitaFlame-3
Vote Goes To Hoops...
~One~

Alright thanx for the advice..yeah its my first battle im still learning but still uppin

Yo come on keep votin, we just needa couple more

hoops won this battle was it was pretty close it could of went to either of them some of his lyrics were stronger though repay the favor though by voting here if u would please

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=131479

^^^ Yo that shouldnt couldnt dude didnt even explain his vote

both ya'lls shit seemed average

hoops came with the metas but his flow was sketchy
i would usually say he won cuz he started off pretty tite.

n spitas was decent through it, but the rip at the end for spita got him, no his flow was on.

vote. spita

but i dont have 20 posts n it wont let me vote so i dunno if that will count, if it does my vote is spita

aight UPPIN yall.. avoid posting your vote if you have really low posts.. from this point on i mean.. 4-3.. UPPIN for the win

yo, Hoops starte doff bangin wit that......
spitaflame? na you not gassed, i'll take the F outcha name/
follow instructions and you'll see me beating this Spitting-Lame/
I was feelin it, but the rest of the ryhme fell off, and wouldn't have made since if he ain't explain. his flow fell off and it should have been easier to understand..... Spita Flame had a couple of good hits, but the rest was aight and since he was more consistant I guess he took it

winner..... SpitaFlame

At the beginning, I wasnt feeling Hoops verse, but as continued to read on, his lines became better and better. He did'nt word most of his lines right and I guess thats why he had to explain shit but it was still good. I dont look for structure cuz thats the stupidest shit ever so fuck it. I looked at his punches and they made me laugh a lil. him dumb ass explanation for his last bar was funny ass hell to though. his word play was ok aswell. His punchlines were good at the middle.
SpitFlame did'nt come hard enough in this battle. It was still ok, but just not enough to get my vote. He lacked personals and good punchlines. the prayer shit was ok, it just needed better word play.
V/Hoops