Orijinal -VS- Mag...
 

iight..this is how we break it down...
10-15 lines...
no d/r
no crew votes
no bitin
u know da deall.. lets get this shit poppin.....mag spits first....

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ch-ch-ch-check it out......o yeah BTW...u need 75 posts to poll in dis...cuz i hate dem newbies...hate um hate um hate um!!....o yea no prewritten shyt....thank u

there a reall quick key... cuz im about to leave iight

so good luck..and peace....

MAG is battlin newbies so he can get his record up/
Ya game is ass, is like Charlotte Bobcats startin' lineup/
You think you MAGnificent just because you got 10 wins/
Ya rhymes ain't authentic, is like a flower logo on timbs/
Let me put the MAGnum toward ya forehead and cock it back/
U gonna get zero listeners, like William Hung's soundtrack/
U say "the champ is here!", but U meant "the chump is here!"/
Right now, U Toni Braxton N I'm Bobby, I tore Ur whole fuckin career/
Let me knock U out like Tarver did 2 Jones, start da action/
I'll beat U down, U'll have mo' surgeries than Micahel Jackson/
Right now, I'm MAGnificent and gonna take ya whole spot/
My M16s will make covered in spots, than a hoe thru cumshots/
So from now on, dont be cocky thinkin U all bomb/
Cuz son, you nuttin' but a joke like 'Chappelle's Show' sitcom/

Holla back at chea boy..vote people.....ill return the favor....... like MAG...says......"i took it easy on u"...hah...1

umm...this line:

"Right now, I'm MAGnificent and gonna take ya whole spot/
My M16s will make covered in spots, than a hoe thru cumshots/"

i forgot the you between 'will' and 'make' and if you dont get it...it means...u know how m16s have a red laser dot to target the victim..thats wut im talkin about.. a whole lotta spots on his body to kill him..

Damn!! THat was a pimp ass Battle for real, i liked mag;s shit because his structure is just off the chain and his Vocab is open, but this rap was hard to understand, Mag u usually merk fools, ORiganl just fuckn took this one , his punch lines and everything were off the chain VOTE=ORIGINAL

Yo Look at some of my battles , SCroll down the Battle list < the names SICCWITIT, holla at ya boy

upppppppppppinnnnnnnnnnnn this battle...please vote....ill return fvaor...hollla

aihgt nice flow form both
nice structure frm both
better punches from mag
better verse from mag
overall i lked mag'z verse better i thnk he diserves tha win aight mayne e.z wun

v/Mag

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uppin this battle......ill return the favor...iight 1

ori hands down

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Too close too call really imma put ya names in a hat and whoever i pull out wins.........................its Orijinal, damn i hate votin like dis but both came hard UPs to both of ya mag usually just tears at niggaz chests he did today also but orij came wit it so i had draw from a hat

well i dont have e nuff posts yet so i cant vote i will if this is still up when i get 75 posts

i say Origini get this cause his punches came juss a little harder and i liked his closer 2 so it did it for me..

V// Origini

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4real this was some good shit MAg was looke reall good at the beggining but at the end he lost me and lost some point, although Orginals shit never jumped up it never went down either he stayed consistent

VOTE=Original

uppin this battle once more...dont sleepp...this is a good battle...ill return the favor..1

these are som hot dickride... votes

i think mag got dis..nice vocab and punches..nice battle both of u's, orijinal nice drop but mag had betta punches

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Orijinal the only thing you got hot is your bitch nah just play you had a nice flow but punches were kinda weak
mag.. shit was good flow and style punches and personals you no it was all good

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I gotta go wit orijinal here....

he had better flo an punches.....it was clear he ripped the shit wit the multi's.
both were good. but i felt ori's alot more.
nice battle....

my favorite lines.
U say "the champ is here!", but U meant "the chump is here!"/
Right now, U Toni Braxton N I'm Bobby, I tore Ur whole fuckin career/

mag...u had a lil to much self hype.

Yo drop an honest vote here. thanks
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132403

Mag - Lyrics could of been better. Great vocab. and nice structure. I saw a couple of good punches. Not bad.

Orijinal - Good lyrics. I thought you had this battle, but then i kept readin. Tha michael jackson shit is played out. So is tha Dave chapelle shit. Bothe keep elevatin.
Vote - Mag. Return tha favor. Link in my sig.

Vote=Orijinal

Nice battle.He got this because of his flow and punches.Mag also had some nice punches,but Orijinal had better punches.Hit my battles

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first bar your hung out to dry,like jesus bitch i crucify...
place you in the public eye with raps like that they'd turn a blind eye...
Not a great opener, but decent- shows potential
i'm shining bright with lyrics thats fluorescent,bitch is dull hire a cosmetic...
touch up them lyrics shits pathetic you aint a battler just more poetic...
this flows pretty good, not a great punch though
my shits leaving Orijional parasympathetic 'n' dont think i'll be sympathetic...
i'll diss 'n' rip ya like a surfer rips tides then up 'n' leave fuck being apologetic..
lol good vocab.. i really like the first line, decent punch.
it's the way my brain ticks that says unload these clips fill em with lead..
so much i could flip this inbred 'n' write my next track with his head...
lmao- very good punchline, it flows well into it... above par bar here.
with lyrics so sick i'll leave u malcontent as i beat you with circumvent...
thats my intent i torment mc's so much they need there parents consent...
beat you with circumvent- doesn't work really well, forced vocab- decent following line but not great.
like parental guidance as i carry a warning cas i spill blood and guts...
so get off my nuts,bitch could'nt be a smash if you was a dish washer klutz...
lol- nice punch.
as i upset 'n' leave you like a epeleptic so once u read this you'll throw a fit...
cas i straight up beat you "orginal" so write that in your life's diary bitch....
kinda weak closer... I think your opener and closer were the weakest part of your verse... but the body of the verse had some good punches... decent verse all in all.


MAG is battlin newbies so he can get his record up/
Ya game is ass, is like Charlotte Bobcats startin' lineup/
decent opener-
You think you MAGnificent just because you got 10 wins/
Ya rhymes ain't authentic, is like a flower logo on timbs/
kinda played punch with the timbs line- decent though
Let me put the MAGnum toward ya forehead and cock it back/
U gonna get zero listeners, like William Hung's soundtrack/
decent- not spectacular but o.k
U say "the champ is here!", but U meant "the chump is here!"/
Right now, U Toni Braxton N I'm Bobby, I tore Ur whole fuckin career/
egh, not really feelin this punch too much- first line was good though
Let me knock U out like Tarver did 2 Jones, start da action/
I'll beat U down, U'll have mo' surgeries than Micahel Jackson/
i say it everytime I read an MJ line--- its played... Everyone mentions Michael Jackson its getting old, theres only so many ways it can be flipped- the Tarver and Jones line was good... I used somethin similar to that the day after the fight, its old to me but decent.
Right now, I'm MAGnificent and gonna take ya whole spot/
My M16s will make covered in spots, than a hoe thru cumshots/
you didn't word this right at all... it doesn't flow and your missin a noun, and an adjective or two.
So from now on, dont be cocky thinkin U all bomb/
Cuz son, you nuttin' but a joke like 'Chappelle's Show' sitcom/
this didn't flow great, kinda weak closer.... I think all in all your verse was decent but nothing really stuck out and you did have a couple weak parts... I think that Mag had better punches and just a better verse in general... Good luck in the future both of you... ez.. Vote Mag

coo battle....
mag

first bar your hung out to dry,like jesus bitch i crucify...
place you in the public eye with raps like that they'd turn a blind eye...
6/10...coo opener...
i'm shining bright with lyrics thats fluorescent,bitch is dull hire a cosmetic...
touch up them lyrics shits pathetic you aint a battler just more poetic...
3/10...weak line...filler
my shits leaving Orijional parasympathetic 'n' dont think i'll be sympathetic...
i'll diss 'n' rip ya like a surfer rips tides then up 'n' leave fuck being apologetic..
5/10.....wheres the punch
it's the way my brain ticks that says unload these clips fill em with lead..
so much i could flip this inbred 'n' write my next track with his head...
5/10..these are jus words wheres the punch...
with lyrics so sick i'll leave u malcontent as i beat you with circumvent...
thats my intent i torment mc's so much they need there parents consent...
4/10...im half assin these till i see a punch...
like parental guidance as i carry a warning cas i spill blood and guts...
so get off my nuts,bitch could'nt be a smash if you was a dish washer klutz...
7/10....there we go
as i upset 'n' leave you like a epeleptic so once u read this you'll throw a fit...
cas i straight up beat you "orginal" so write that in your life's diary bitch....
5/10...again....where is ur punches
overall - 5....need punches...and personals...

Close battle here......

Orijinal- Your verse was nice....but your punches were decent but some didnt hit hard enough...ur structure was decent but could be fixed up a little...and you had an okay flow...but overall you did well in dis battle..keep on elevatein.....

Mag...- Your verse was also nice...but your punches i thought hit much harder...ur structure was good...you had some nice wordplay and had some nice vocab....and you had a good flow wit your verse...so overall you get my vote for better punches and better vocab & wordplay...close battle tho.....

v/Mag...

uppin this battle....it aint ova til is ova kids...vote honestly and vote professional..1

structure: Tie
Flow: Tie
Punches: mag
Personals: Orijinal
Enjoyed: Mag
Vote mag

good shit

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upppin this battle once more...it aint ova til is ova..vote honestly and professionally

Mag - Lyrics could of been better. Great vocab. and nice structure. I saw a couple of good punches. Not bad.

Orijinal - Good lyrics. I thought you had this battle, but then i kept readin. Tha michael jackson shit is played out. So is tha Dave chapelle shit. Bothe keep elevatin.

uppin for some more votes becuase orijional had to be a bitch and tell an admin to take away my votes becuae they werent explained

Lethal a.k.a. Mag...'s Drop:

first bar your hung out to dry,like jesus bitch i crucify...
place you in the public eye with raps like that they'd turn a blind eye...
it was a nice opener! 7/10
i'm shining bright with lyrics thats fluorescent,bitch is dull hire a cosmetic...
touch up them lyrics shits pathetic you aint a battler just more poetic...
I think you should of switched the position of both lines I would of been better in my opinion! 7.5/10
my shits leaving Orijional parasympathetic 'n' dont think i'll be sympathetic...
i'll diss 'n' rip ya like a surfer rips tides then up 'n' leave fuck being apologetic..
nice punch really feeling it 7.5/10
it's the way my brain ticks that says unload these clips fill em with lead..
so much i could flip this inbred 'n' write my next track with his head...
hahah that was some ill wordplay with the "lead" and shit haha best punch in the drop yet 9/10
with lyrics so sick i'll leave u malcontent as i beat you with circumvent...
thats my intent i torment mc's so much they need there parents consent...
nice punch not your best in the drop but aight 6.5/10
like parental guidance as i carry a warning cas i spill blood and guts...
so get off my nuts,bitch could'nt be a smash if you was a dish washer klutz...
pretty nice punch here lol 7/10
as i upset 'n' leave you like a epeleptic so once u read this you'll throw a fit...
cas i straight up beat you "orginal" so write that in your life's diary bitch....
aight good closer....7/10

overall: 8/10 (gave extra cuz your flow was neva off)


Orijinal' Drop:

MAG is battlin newbies so he can get his record up/
Ya game is ass, is like Charlotte Bobcats startin' lineup/
pretty good opener feelin it! 7/10
You think you MAGnificent just because you got 10 wins/
Ya rhymes ain't authentic, is like a flower logo on timbs/
haha pretty good 7/10
Let me put the MAGnum toward ya forehead and cock it back/
U gonna get zero listeners, like William Hung's soundtrack/
ya hung is ass!!!!!!!!!!! 7/10
U say "the champ is here!", but U meant "the chump is here!"/
Right now, U Toni Braxton N I'm Bobby, I tore Ur whole fuckin career/
nope not liking but it decent 6/10
Let me knock U out like Tarver did 2 Jones, start da action/
I'll beat U down, U'll have mo' surgeries than Micahel Jackson/
haha but I have to say this is unoriginal michael lines
are used more times than his plastic surgeons scalpel lol 6.5/10
Right now, I'm MAGnificent and gonna take ya whole spot/
My M16s will make covered in spots, than a hoe thru cumshots/
haha nice one orijinal 7.5/10
So from now on, dont be cocky thinkin U all bomb/
Cuz son, you nuttin' but a joke like 'Chappelle's Show' sitcom/
pretty good 7/10

overall: 7.3/10 (gave extra for good flow)

vote: Lethal

Damn this battle was pretty tight.

The flow and structure I couldnt even vote on...it was too close, I was feelin both of them so much. I think Mag... gets extra points for vocab though...that adds to the originality.

Punches I think Orijinal had better punches...cause he was tying metas in with them. Wasnt really easy to determine that either, it was very marginal.

Orijinal had tight punches, but he seemed to fall off towards the end of the verse like he got in a hurry, rhyming with cumshots and stuff. I thought that Mag was consistent with what he was doin thru his entire verse.

Metas and Multis, I couldnt really judge I would give this to Orijinal though...he was usin all kinda of shit in there.

I thought that Mag... was more creative with the way he was writin his verse though, that was mainly done with the outstanding vocab...it was all makin sense too.

Orijinal came pretty hard, but I think Mag...was more consistent and maintained his level the entire verse.

A VERY MARGINAL VICTORY TO: Mag...