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Limited Edition (I.I) Vs. Poetic Justice (D2R) Topical
[COLOR=DarkSlateGray]A'ight... ]House Rules Check in. 20 Lines Minimum. 100+ Posts to Vote. Drop Due by Sunday 11:59PM. Good Luck to Both. Topic: You Are One Lord of the Rings Character[/COLOR |
erm.the topic sucks..arnt we supposed to both agree b4 we set up????.........
i aint seen that shit b4....change the topic to sumthin more accsesable 4 both of us... murder,suicide,love,hate,deppression,guilt,paintin a picture.ANYTHIN but a film....uve prob seen it 25 times......n seen as the rules wernt agreed b4 u set it up...i want it changing......... |
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actually.........fuck it leave it as it is....i was under the impression u woz a vet....but hvin peeped a couple of ur topicals...i cud beat them freestyle.....
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^^^Are you serious? Or are you talking shit? I will actually try in this topical then.
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serious.n i wnt try............................................... .....................................
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Frodo Baggins The Council I have completed the task given to me...my job is done A few days seemed like years...was constantly on the run I look over...see Sam hiding by a bush......what a friend Merry and Pippin behind the pillars...up to no good again Gandalf sits next to me...he's the grandfather I never had Why wasn't Bilbo here..? The closest perosn I have to a Dad... On the table of stone...sitting in the very center of the room The small object...evil, created by Sauron...forged in Mt. Doom The One Ring.........its evil pull brought us all here together... Elrond is talking...deciding...what to do with it...its taking forever Boromir stands...he requests the Ring...a weapon for Gondor But the last time it was in a man's hands...how long was it gone for? Strider...across the room...explains no man can wield it... Argument...Legolas tells the name Aragorn...Boromir can't beleive it Elrond says...it was obvious...the Ring must be destroyed But the periless journey...is one most would want to avoid Gimli the Dwarf...stands up...and insults Legolas the elf... It was funny...he couldn't be taller if he stood on a shelf... But things heat up...the whole room is in a raging debate There is a voice inside my head...how much more can I take? My head begans to hurt...I clench my fists and close my eyes... The vision becomes clear...I must do it...and to everyone's surprise... I glanced at the Ring...Sauron's voice rings again...I hate it... I Stand up...Walk forward............................"I Will Take it...." |
Uppin' for Poetic to see...hopefully he'll drop early.
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nice spit...........ima drop sumtime in tha nxt couple hours.....hvnt started yet......
i aint seen this film b4 so.....im gona chk it out first.... |
^^^Shit, you havent seen the movie? A'ight but if you watch it should give you an idea...
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smegal...two towers
ok...i am writing about..THE TWO TOWERS...i am Smegal/Gollum
alone at night, starlight, cursing i search...two little thieves
somethin trips in my head...a transition between good and evil...mystically drawn, not caring about the rustling of the leaves the ring is my goal,blinded by envy and uncompromising greed like a cat drawn to feed...i must cause these thieves to bleed as i strike..unknowingly...hobbits sleep easy and i them awoke quickly i am captured,i feel guilt as a sword is held to my throat strangely now calm and peacefull...why is this happening to smegal? i feel unjustifiable sadness as the rope twists and burns..... i just want to be set free..they are my friends..on them i wont turn.. i want them to trust me...yet i know im unrelliable..schitzofrenic i long to be freed..from my alta ego..panic..and crazy psycho-manic please..i know the way to moldor..i can lead you to the black gate i want to help..avoiding treachury...i hope this journey isnt my fate... alone trembling..hiding from the voice in my head.... get out of there i said..i want to be friend not foe instead.. drawn to the ring as they sleep..overcome with greed i rise to my feet but fight i must...i can conquer this lust..and im not about to be defeat painfull scornfull fight,...but mentally this pain is deep in my head.. i long to get rid of...this time i only just manage to overcome the dread.. what do i want...who is stronger..am i gollumn?..or smegal???... well that debate could go on foreva..like EM or Royce?..bad or evil? |
uppin for poetics crazy topical given the circumstance that was
real hot poetic real nice .......damn that was hot!!!!! |
hmm.. both were good..
limited:it was good, but your flow was off alil bit in some places.. but it was good overall..good job poetic:i would have never thought to do smeagel on this topic hehe..this is what won this to you,,in my opinion.. the creativity shown..it was more the creativity of the write who made smeagel, but it was creative to choose him..good job.. no hate vote Limited. I just felt the topic he was rhyming about a lil more.. smeagel is my fav character lol.... v/poetic |
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yo this topical yall both did yall thang for real big up to both yall...
limited had me caught up for a minute with the names he described the whole shit...mad crazy yo.......yo was watchin the flick serious i can tell justice just tapped into the mind of ol boi and just released all the emotion i felt that.......good shit my vote is/poetic though hers just had more intensity and feeling and she just devoured the topic yo... |
cumon uppin.......................................
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damn this sucks....no poll vote................
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Uppin For Votes..
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Blah! Uppin' on this slept on shit........................
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decent topical battle
L.E: i would have to say the thing that stood out the most in your verse was the imagery it started off about the characters and their surroundings and the happenings around them i enjoyed that...and then it escalated to a vision of the ring and you ran with the topic and i liked your approach a couple things could have been better : vocab and wordplay everything else was pretty solid and a very well written piece for a topic like this poetic justice: i felt your verse also i dont think the imagery was as good but the multies and wordplay were definaetly better...vocab was a lil better you came more complex but i didnt feel you stayed on topic as well as L.E did....you came from a different angle and point of view for this topic so it was hard to judge...i think your imagery could have been better and your structure...solid piece though breakdown: Consistency : limited edition Flow : limited edition Structure : limited edition Wordplay : poetic justice Multies: poetic justice Imagery : limited edition Vocabulary : poetic justice Which topic i enjoyed more : poetic justice Who staye on topic better : limited edition vote: limited edition Good topical battle tough decision but i think Limited Edition edged this one out because his imagery was slightly better ~!1!~ |
aight 1-1 upin this slept on shit!!................
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ill up dis shit too... hot topical yall... very nice job poetic very nice.
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PLEASE RETURN THA FAVOR.
Me vs. SevenThird Limited Edition - Good verse. Stayed on topic all tha way through. Had some vocab. in there it was overall good story telling. The ending was strong it helped you alot in my eyes. Nice verse..........7.5/10 Poetic Justice - You had a decent ending but Limited's was better. However you had an edge over him cuz although he had vocab. you had more. You both had good lyrics as far as tha topic goes. So it was close. Overall good verse.....8/10 Vote: Poetic Justice. |
Whoa...this is still open...uppin'....................
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aw damn this is an old battle
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Uppin'.
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ok~ima vote in this cus i like to read topicals and i love lord of the rings..lol
L.E.~your verse was good, nice flow and vocab, i loved your opening lines and your closer, you set this up nice....tight verse poetic~you had very good imagery in your vocab, you said a lot in every line, and your flow was great, you really new your character, which make sit that much better,and the words made it that much more powerful as well, i could picture this verse as i was reading it.........nice job fellas.... Vote:poetic |
this was personally a weak battle, the only good one was poetics...
L.E., i thought you could do better? well maybe now cuz dis battle is like 1 month old lol.. umm, Score: flow: 9/10, anyone can have a good flow really. imagery:6/10 you really didn't have as much as good imagery, thats something you should really work on.. structure:9/10, anyone can have good structure.lol emotion: 6/10, i really didn't feel any emotion in your verse, try putting more next time. Vocab: 6/10now you must work on your vocab, you had alrite words, but just do better next time... Total: 36/50 Poetic: damn man, alot of props to you, i've never seen your shyt before, but this was pretty damn good... And you used smeagal??haha, nyce move, i would of used that big guy sarran or w/e his name is lol, pretend im watching the ring the whole time :)..but yea, damn ur shyt was good... score: Flow: 9/10 it flowed very nice man, good job.. Imgery: 8/10 Very nice imagery, haha, i could still see that moment in the movie theather as if i was there..:) structure: 9/10 very nice structure..but neoen could have good structure> Emotion: 6/10 It had okay emotion..not really alot.. but ur imagery made it like it didn't matter. Vocab: 7/10, it had okay vocab..but still came up acoule times..so yea..pretty good.. Total: 39/50 vote: poetic |
ok limited dope shit good flow and vocab but the imagery got you this dope story straight on topic here told the story how its suppose to be told and had it so i could see what you were talking about.
poetic good also nice vocab as well both had good structure but you failed to provide the image limited did and that made your topical not as good. |
nice drops.......... limited: i was thinking it was decent at best.... vocabulary could of been better and it wasn't that great emotion wise it was basic......................................... depth was okay........originality was clearly not working because I didn't really feel the storyline much either... poetic: nice drop I liked it..... vocabulary was nice you used a good amount of big words and also emotion was nice........................................... depth was same as limited I also like the originality and storyline of it sooooo i think you won... vote: poetic nice battle...:) |
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