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Sire(0-0) vs. Deleon (0-0)
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battles go up sunday night around 10:00 pm western check in on Tuesday verses due on JULY 7 wedsday votes due by the next saturday rules: no dick riding no crew votes no freeposting more then three times your dq'd no feeding off of other guys verse up your battle more than three times in a row your dq'd bar limits: 4 line min. 16 line max. |
checkin....
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check, sorry didn't see this... don't DQ me
10 lines cool with you Deleon? |
how bout we go 12?
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12 it is......
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look kid, I'ma beat your ugly head open
you're better off.... than online, so just log out instead of postin I'm launchin the end.... of you're RB career DeLeon's got the Blueprint .................of my fuckin fist on his ear kids got the brains of a chimp, catch my drift? got the jump off poppin... when he landed at the bottom of the cliff no surprise he comes dope, when it's me he's facin DeLeon's on my dick so when I get hard, he'll rise to the occasion call me the laugh doctor, shit almost comical I have no patients.... & I need some, so I'ma put him in the hospital beatin me's impossible... let it go, it's over son like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one |
^I know Deleon aint dropped but this had good wordplay^. But the last line. . .
beatin me's impossible... let it go, it's over son like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one ^he owes u a 69er? Sorry if times have changed but that sounds gay 2 me. :( |
it means 0 & 1 as in his record..... idiot.
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Kids an alias from Original...ha ha
Sire=Herb Mods…U really want me to square wit him…Aight…here I come I’ll feed your tank top w/ pellets like fer fish in an aquarium Call this an obstacle?...please who said this kid's a threat? im sending him back to square one like rookie smokers on their 1st cigarette This is how a Hard-Wood Class-sick suppose to go your rep is getting torn hes an alias…but your verses need extension cords….. to get restored Murkin this herb wont land me any kind of respect…. Cuz hes known to talk out his ass like Eddie Murphy in Shrek What I write kills….play your role and follow Capitols drills cuz Even If You Put Aleve In A Rope you couldn’t tie-pill (type ill).... So I’m gonna finish this herb and put an end to his text.. History Repeats itself watch another Sire get sentenced to the death.... |
LOL.... let's gets some votes in this...
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deleon you had nice flow... iffy wordplay and pretty solid punches
you threw in multies and that made your verse flow much better bestline:So I’m gonna finish this herb and put an end to his text.. History Repeats itself watch another Sire get sentenced to the death.... worstline:Murkin this herb wont land me any kind of respect…. Cuz hes known to talk out his ass like Eddie Murphy in Shrek... overall 8/10 room for work... sire you had really good wordplay... but that last line did seem like it was pretty danm gay ya feel?u need harder punches and way better flow..ur strucutre sucked big balls bestline:no surprise he comes dope, when it's me he's facin DeLeon's on my dick so when I get hard, he'll rise to the occasion worstline:beatin me's impossible... let it go, it's over son like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one just plain gay and that and ur strucutru ruined you verse along with that last line my vote deleon |
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DeLeon took this with EASSSSSSSSSE. |
check your sig, and remember it.... bitch
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apotheosis doesn't know a good verse if it kicked him in the face...
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look kid, I'ma beat your ugly head open
you're better off.... than online, so just log out instead of postin - not really feelin this punch- its a creative rhyme scheme though - 6/10 I'm launchin the end.... of you're RB career DeLeon's got the Blueprint .................of my fuckin fist on his ear lol- this was pretty funny, nice setup decent punch -- 7.5/10 kids got the brains of a chimp, catch my drift? got the jump off poppin... when he landed at the bottom of the cliff I liked your setup- but I wasn't feelin the punch too much- 7/10 no surprise he comes dope, when it's me he's facin DeLeon's on my dick so when I get hard, he'll rise to the occasion This shit is kinda funny, Not a brand new concept but effective punch- 7/10 call me the laugh doctor, shit almost comical I have no patients.... & I need some, so I'ma put him in the hospital I liked this- good flow, decent punch--- 7.5/10 beatin me's impossible... let it go, it's over son like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one I thought that punch was pretty dope- "O and 1"- Good wordplay, The setup isn't that great, cuz its kinda fruity, you coulda said "like Buyin a Dime with Nine"- Instead of "You 68'd Me"- yamean?--- 7/10 tho cuz the punch was outta nowhere. Mods…U really want me to square wit him…Aight…here I come I’ll feed your tank top w/ pellets like fer fish in an aquarium I know what you were sayin here, but It don't work for me- the punch was decent just not somethin I woulda used for an opener - 6-10 Call this an obstacle?...please who said this kid's a threat? im sending him back to square one like rookie smokers on their 1st cigarette Line stretched here a little bit- kinda weak punch- 6.5/10 This is how a Hard-Wood Class-sick suppose to go your rep is getting torn hes an alias…but your verses need extension cords….. to get restored The first line was pretty decent, and the whole bar flowed nicely, but no solid punches here- pretty weak... 6/10 Murkin this herb wont land me any kind of respect…. Cuz hes known to talk out his ass like Eddie Murphy in Shrek this was kinda funny- decent punch i guess nothing spectacular- 7/10 What I write kills….play your role and follow Capitols drills cuz Even If You Put Aleve In A Rope you couldn’t tie-pill (type ill).... This was probly your best bar here, couple of decent punches, nice setup with the link. 8/10 So I’m gonna finish this herb and put an end to his text.. History Repeats itself watch another Sire get sentenced to the death.... This was a weak closer-- very basic, text and death... uh uh... 6/10 structure/rhyme scheme- Sire Opener- Neither Closer- Sire Wordplay- Tie- Punches- Deleon because I think you had the strongest punch in the battle Vote - Sire... I just felt his verse more in this.... Return the votes. |
shdow your an idiot...go to everyone in original rb and say that structure sucks balls and see what happens...you'll get RAPED
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NiCe Battle 2 Diffrent Styles But This Is My Break Down...
look kid, I'ma beat your ugly head open you're better off.... than online, so just log out instead of postin Pretty Nice 8/10 I'm launchin the end.... of you're RB career DeLeon's got the Blueprint .................of my fuckin fist on his ear ^^ Didnt Get That 6/10 kids got the brains of a chimp, catch my drift? got the jump off poppin... when he landed at the bottom of the cliff NiCe-8/10 no surprise he comes dope, when it's me he's facin DeLeon's on my dick so when I get hard, he'll rise to the occasion DeScent-7/10 call me the laugh doctor, shit almost comical I have no patients.... & I need some, so I'ma put him in the hospital No PUnch Or Personal Didnt Feel It 7/10 like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one Alright--8/10 overall verse-8.2/10 Deleon Mods…U really want me to square wit him…Aight…here I come I’ll feed your tank top w/ pellets like fer fish in an aquarium Pretty descent 7.5/10 Call this an obstacle?...please who said this kid's a threat? im sending him back to square one like rookie smokers on their 1st cigarette Alright 7.6/10 This is how a Hard-Wood Class-sick suppose to go your rep is getting torn hes an alias…but your verses need extension cords….. to get restored MNice 8.7/10 Murkin this herb wont land me any kind of respect…. Cuz hes known to talk out his ass like Eddie Murphy in Shrek LOL 9/10 What I write kills….play your role and follow Capitols drills cuz Even If You Put Aleve In A Rope you couldn’t tie-pill (type ill).... Nice 8.6/10 So I’m gonna finish this herb and put an end to his text.. History Repeats itself watch another Sire get sentenced to the death.... Alright 8/10 Overall verse 8.6/10 Winner Deleon |
sire had good wordplay.punches and flow,his structure was okay but coulda been better...
deleon u had good punches also,including flow and structure.. but with better wordplay,and flow,and also harder hittin punches my vote goes to...... v/sire |
Sire
look kid, I'ma beat your ugly head open you're better off.... than online, so just log out instead of postin 6/10....wordplay was there but the punch was weak I'm launchin the end.... of you're RB career DeLeon's got the Blueprint .................of my fuckin fist on his ear 7.5/10....i like the concept..good play on his crew name kids got the brains of a chimp, catch my drift? got the jump off poppin... when he landed at the bottom of the cliff 7/10...decent no surprise he comes dope, when it's me he's facin DeLeon's on my dick so when I get hard, he'll rise to the occasion 7/10..liked the punch but the phrase is played call me the laugh doctor, shit almost comical I have no patients.... & I need some, so I'ma put him in the hospital 7/10...it was ight beatin me's impossible... let it go, it's over son like you 68'd me ..................I leave you owe 'n one 8/10...i see where u were goin with this...i like the wordplay...by far ur best bar Overall-42.5/60....good flow and wordplay...punches could of come harder..personals and name plays were ight...pretty good verse Deleon: Mods…U really want me to square wit him…Aight…here I come I’ll feed your tank top w/ pellets like fer fish in an aquarium 8/10...dope punch...good wordplay Call this an obstacle?...please who said this kid's a threat? im sending him back to square one like rookie smokers on their 1st cigarette 8/10...1st line decent..2nd dope (this line aint stretched whoever said that?) This is how a Hard-Wood Class-sick suppose to go your rep is getting torn hes an alias…but your verses need extension cords….. to get restored 7/10...pretty decent Murkin this herb wont land me any kind of respect…. Cuz hes known to talk out his ass like Eddie Murphy in Shrek 8/10...haha funny and creative..solid punch What I write kills….play your role and follow Capitols drills cuz Even If You Put Aleve In A Rope you couldn’t tie-pill (type ill).... 8.5/10...dope ish right there...i used an aleve line kinda similar once haha good shit D So I’m gonna finish this herb and put an end to his text.. History Repeats itself watch another Sire get sentenced to the death.... 7/10...ight...it was good but the punch was lacking for a closer Overall-46.5/60...better then sire's verse...i was feelin ur punches more i liked ur wordplay better..it flowed just fine...dope shit homie Vote-Deleon...he came harder |
Deleon-Took this easy with nothing to say, You had
harder punches and you had what a battles needs to win like similies and metaphores Sire-Nice spit but the structure made it hard for me to read but I thought you did aight but Not good enough to beat him but its all good v/deleon |
5-2....mods is this battle over?
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It's over son..... good job.
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no doubt...same here...look foward to our next battle playa
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