Unforunate Vs. datruth29
 

OK 10-15 lines..
I go first, but no feeding offf my verse..
no crew votes..

ok check in, i'm about to go...

checked in you go first

It's like i'm a son of a God and you're a son of a "Bitch"/
I've read yo rhymes, you're like drymouth pot heads....
you really have nothin ta spit/.......
comin wit hits, my punches, lyrically bustin ya lips/
choppin you up in ta bits, hit you hard, like tumbling bricks/
why don't you just admit it man, you like my style/
but I'll knock out your teeth if you try and bite my style/
You switched your name coz your last record was whack/
and you want me to go first so you can feed of my back/....
you try to see saw attack?, well lets spit flame/
metaphorically, i'll melt your face at a quick pace/
treating you with disdain, u couldn't be sharp if u was a switch blade/
I'll be in papers, name in the souce, bet you'll see me later/
but You couldn't even sell a CD if it came with a damn CD player/

peace.......

yo i smoked your week raps like im puffin a blunt
i work with two deadly weopons a mic and a gun
check the stats and then think about who u are facing
like puffy and masin dont know homey you just replacing
bitch i want to know who told you that u can flow
if u was on making the band you be the first to go
let datruth be told im rapping a hermafadite bent over dick in that ass
pussy aint yo game, shit just look at your name, my bitches come in the mass
i peeped at yo profile its interesting hes 19 and still sucks on his mom nipples
ill throw you in the hood and took you out, fake ass nigger w/many pimples
kamakazi is happening fuck battling im going straight to demolishing
grab a gat, fuck ill kill this new cat, he bowing to me like im a king
i can still shoot dymes,beat red while you beating you dick like it owe u money
relinquishd by this you only fuck fish,u practice suckn dick by suckn on honey

yo uppin for votes this was a good battle go tryout for lethal database
vote and well repay the favor

uppin for votes......

lmfao

unfortunate: i wasnt feelin your shit it was wayy to expected and basic
your punches were aiight werent hititn to hard 6/10
your personals were there...jus not good wons 6/10
you had bad structure and flow 5/10
didnt see any multi's 0/10
saw some meta's but theyw erent good 5/10

datruth: good srtucture i was feelin it 7/10
your personals were hittin him hard 8/10
so were your punches.........8/10
i was feelin ur meta's........ 7/10

vote: datruth29

but i aint goin to poll vote this until u drop an honest explained vote in this battle http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132816

i gotta say this battle goes to unfortunate but i need more posts so ill vote later

Well explain why if you come back....

ok datruth29 look first of all i didnt like your opener at all, you had an extended line, and that didnt make sence at all really, you kept talking about the same shite to like lip teath and shit like that i jsut wasnt feellin it


ok unfortuante look your opener was their on the spot i like it alot,then the next couple lines were good but the one with puffy and masin i didnt get so i got to let you know your closer was good, it understand it and everything(lol my sister use to do that to) ok well you got my vote

vote=unfortunate

you don't know what you r talking about.. my opener wasn't extended at all.... either Unfortunate and lightweight are the same person, or this is a dickriding vote...

Aight I'm here for crits for the moment cos I don't have enough posts, so here goes:

DaTruth: I liked you style, you had potential to spit out some decent punches to make unfortunate look, unfortunate. But the punches you brought were mediocre at best, although I liked the pot head line. You basically need improvement in your rhyming structure, I mean you rhymed "my style" with "my stle" which doesn't win any points, you jus sound like Cormega (u wish). The switch blade line was nice also, bascially i see potential and room to elevate.

Unfortunate: You came harder in attitude, but attitude in verses are way over played - two weapons a mic and a gun?? It just sounds like you're compensating for being a skinny white kid (although u may not be) cos a real "Gangsta" shouldn't preach about it on the internet. Anyways, loadsa net mc's do it so it's ok i guess if you combine it with decent punches and personals but i don't think you had any - learn some metaphors and punches and you'll be a decent contender in no time.

Peeze.

yo uppin for votes lets get some votes

upping again

uppin............................................. ....

yo this wasnt even close in my eyes unfortunate had it from top to bottom even though that line was messed up he still won overall ddatruth keep elavating and i might battle you my self

vote=unfortunate

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ok datruth29 look first of all i didnt like your opener at all, you had an extended line, and that didnt make sence at all really, you kept talking about the same shite to like lip teath and shit like that i jsut wasnt feellin it


ok unfortuante look your opener was their on the spot i like it alot,then the next couple lines were good but the one with puffy and masin i didnt get so i got to let you know your closer was good, it understand it and everything(lol my sister use to do that to) ok well you got my vote

vote=unfortunate

VOTE

YOU SAID THE EXACT SAME THING AS DJ LIGHTWEIGHT IN HIS VOTE... WORD FOR WORD.. WHAT'S GOING ON HERE? SOMEONE IS CHEATING...

lmfao i think he was laughing at what that kid said well at least that what i hope

that wasnt my vote kid

datruth-your verse was okay.....wasnt really feeling your verse that much.....punches was played and you concepts was weak.....punches didt hit that hard and kinda fell off.....structure was okay aswell as your flow.....elevate a little bit and shit should be good

Un-your verse was okay.......your structurew was working for you aswell as your flow that was on point........punches hit hard and stuck allthought you could reword them so that they hit harder but other then that your shit was good

keep it up

v/unforunate

unfortunate came harder..better punches and flow, datruth nice spit i jus feel he came harder and had betta punches..nice battle tho
v/unfortunate

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IIght here it goes..now this might hurt y'all but this battle was wack..haha..first off..None y'all had personals..thats a big no no..you need punches and personals to win ..we all know you can rhyme..now thetruth you had a wack beginning one part didnt rhyme maybe i read it wrong tho..very choppy too..same with unfortunate except he had more multis and it was funnier..but keep eleavtin and work your flow cuz you guys didnt really have any..but my vote goes to...


























Unfortunate...(for his metas and multis.)

uppin for mature votes please