GEE vs. JaeBurnz354
 

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ok 12-15 lines
No biting
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First to 5 votes.

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Jae Burnz huh, you couldnt be "fire" if you tried/
after this battle..you'll be extinguished, theyll be askin who "died"? *(Another word for puttin out a fire)
You must be jokin...you can neva get in the ranks kid/
this guy is the "ashes"...of the Lloyd Bank$ hit. *(On Fire)
You said "bullets rain", well yea...that be true/
"Bulletproof ponchos" are needed, cuz I'm dousin out you.
Like a fire in rain, you don't last that long/
thats why it's time to "burn" you like Usher's song.
You from Jersey?...then youre just a "kidd" huh?/
you can never hurt me, I'm like "Jason*"..I came ta kill ya. *(The hockey masked horror movie legend)
I leave you all black, with a broken back/
and smoke you...like I'm tokin crack.
This doo is weak...he's already old, look he's limpin/
thats cuz he's Mr. " Burns' " twin brother from the Simpsons.

How this nigga G wait he spelled it wrong.
You illterate nigga, what the hell is wrong/
I'm that kidd who can catch five fish in my nets.
Rip em to the bones and that's as good as it gets/
Metaphorically I'm on fire like 2 million copies of usher's burn.
I'm hip hop's teacher, I done held you back twice, nigga when will you learn/
You never made, the game fucked you, so you owe her nigga?
She played you for a dope like homer nigga(homer's favorite sayin is dope)/
You heard me say I'm finna bust slugs at ya.
You was lookin around like I was gonna throw bugs at ya/
You really wanna know how roses smell.
I'm leave you with them after I hit you with bird shells(Desert Eagle Bullets)/
Ashey ass knuckles was you tryin to hit bricks.
Ya hair was black now it's brown.
What you been scratchin ya ass, then rubbin ya head with shit, Thinkin of what to spit/

Good Battle...
-Alright then...Uppin for Votes...

Yea........That was a good battle......Let the best mc win

This battle was aiight..

Punchlines: Jburn
Personals: neither
structure: Jburn
flow: Jburn

Vote JeaBurn

Yeah that was a pretty close battle.Both were kinda equal in flow and those other things.But I think Gee had some better punches,by a hair.I wasn't feelin Jae ending,it was weak.Need a strong ending.But my vote goes to GEE for better punches.

I won't poll til somebody votes on my battle,Holla

Yo Gee yu uppin?????
uppin.......................

Shit both of yall came hard, it was a good battle. I didnt see much structure from neither one of you, but if I did pick then I would say GEE had the better structure. Both of the verses had a real good flow to it, I was able to keep up with that consistently on both. GEE came out the box throwin punches though, he had a metaphor in almost everyline, and I didnt think Jae could compete there. Personals GEE was all over it talking about him being called burnz, and using the simpsons reference. Not many multis from either one of you though.

Over all GEE came a lot harder, from start to finish

V/GEE

Ok Ok Ok............ok ok.....
Uppin#2...........

ok ok ok ok............
ok....uppin#3............

alright weak battle

jaeburns: you on that gangsta shit im feelin that..you won this by FLOW

your personals were aiight
your wordplay was sickness
your punches were hittin aiight
your flow was dope
your structure was pretty good

Gee: your wordplay was there but didnt hit hard
your punches were aiight pretty good
your flow wasnt that hood
your structure was ugly
and your personals werent hittin too good

vote: jaeburnz

i aint gon poll vote this until u drop an honest vote in this battle http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132721

iigh iigh good battle, there wu iight punches in dis battle, but da flow wuz a lil off but da best structure wuz burn, i read his verse real quick and easy.

respect 2 both of yaw 4 endin da battle respectfully and not talkin shit 2 each otha, people be 4gitin most of deez niggas here 2 get betta.

vote: jaeburn

yo shytown if you voted for me why u give gee the poll vote????

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Back from vacation...
Uppin for some more votes..

Still Uppin For Some Votes....
Just One More......

Still Uppin for Votes..Damn this shit takes long...

Uppin for ONE more vote ta get mah first win......

Up Up Up Uppin for votes...one more vote ta get a win..

this was like a junior high school battle and the 12 year old who i think won is jburns
gee shit was too simple, so was j shit but not as much

gee
Jae Burnz huh, you couldnt be "fire" if you tried/
after this battle..you'll be extinguished, theyll be askin who "died"? *(Another word for puttin out a fire)
dont explain. hate that. if this was a punch..they'd kno who died. 1/10
You must be jokin...you can neva get in the ranks kid/
this guy is the "ashes"...of the Lloyd Bank$ hit. *(On Fire)
no. 2/10
You said "bullets rain", well yea...that be true/
"Bulletproof ponchos" are needed, cuz I'm dousin out you.
Its OK. 4/10
Like a fire in rain, you don't last that long/
thats why it's time to "burn" you like Usher's song.
alright. enuff wit the obviouse personal. 3/10
You from Jersey?...then youre just a "kidd" huh?/
you can never hurt me, I'm like "Jason*"..I came ta kill ya. *(The hockey masked horror movie legend)
dont explain. we all kno who jason is. 3/10
I leave you all black, with a broken back/
and smoke you...like I'm tokin crack.
blah. 2/10
This doo is weak...he's already old, look he's limpin/
thats cuz he's Mr. " Burns' " twin brother from the Simpsons.
OoOO.....not. 3/10
Your verse was not that bad. Your problem was you were so infactuated wit his name bein associated wit fire that you never layed off the same obviouse personal. Mix it up a little next time. no hate. nice try.
18/70

Jae
How this nigga G wait he spelled it wrong.
You illterate nigga, what the hell is wrong/
wrong n wrong....its jus..well wrong 1/10
I'm that kidd who can catch five fish in my nets.
Rip em to the bones and that's as good as it gets/
u bit off his own wordplay in the same battle -2/10
Metaphorically I'm on fire like 2 million copies of usher's burn.
I'm hip hop's teacher, I done held you back twice, nigga when will you learn/
Feeding. no no no. and no. 1/10
You never made, the game fucked you, so you owe her nigga?
She played you for a dope like homer nigga(homer's favorite sayin is dope)/
nigga nigga....why? 1/10
You heard me say I'm finna bust slugs at ya.
You was lookin around like I was gonna throw bugs at ya/
RYHME! 1/10
You really wanna know how roses smell.
I'm leave you with them after I hit you with bird shells(Desert Eagle Bullets)/
wasn't bad. OK. 4/10
Ashey ass knuckles was you tryin to hit bricks.
Ya hair was black now it's brown.
What you been scratchin ya ass, then rubbin ya head with shit, Thinkin of what to spit/
not feelin this bar. 2/10
Not very creative. You fed 2 times and Bit off the person's verse your battling once. Doesn't make much sense to me. I dunno. The one metiphore I liked was the bird shells'. That was creative. Lets leave on a positive note.
8/70

Vote/GEE