(topical)Da Jokah Vs lilchiofthachi
 

aight rules is
5 to 30 lines
topical battle
no bite/recycle
no crew/hate/d.r votes
explaine votes
u spit first
topic iz:::Robbin A Bank...
due 1:oo a.m

I walkin down i seen this bank it was callin,i thought 2 myself Chi u wannabe ballin/
all i needed was a mask and a gun,and some nikes cuz knew i was gonna have 2 run/
i walk up 2 tha tella and this a stick up,put tha money in tha bag and hold tha shit up/
i got tha money and i dip 2 my crib,but before i got tha i got shot in tha ribs/
tha popo said freeze before i shoot again,when i got 2 jail i beat up tha biggest nigga so now im tha man

tell me wat u think i missed a couple words

3rd line this is a stick up

4th line before i got there

jus 2 let yall kno

ayo chek chek

"ayo jokah we got da blueprints fo tha bank"
aight mayne lemme see//
"here day iz dawg"We Jumppin"
yeah nigga..were da semi-be?//
"rite here dawg u ready to role"
yeah nigga jus let me load up//
"i aight dawg theres tha bank"
yeah i see it..lets blow-it-up//
"but we need tha greens be"
ya i kno stupid..jus stay calm//
"aight dawg theres tha cashier"
ayo freeze bitch..i gotta bomb//
"nice dawg let dat bitch have it"
yo shorrty shut up this shit aint funny//
"sorry b ma fault"
no yo..bitch gimme da money//
"aight dawg lets blaze on out"
haha see dat shorrty i mobbed tha skank//
yaya dawg we got da billz"
haha see dat shorrty i just robben tha bank//
"no doubt nigga we killed"
no we rich niggas rollin on twenty-fo'z//
"Ye Ye I kno"
no how much niggas u kno got twenty ho'z//

e.z nigga wun...

aight tha bold writin is ma boi shorrty talkin tha normal is my drop..aight wun
uppin this..

i gotta say that was raw i liked how u set that up

thanx mayne..uppin this muh fuckah
dont sleep niggas holla wun

a if i elevate a little bit u think Hardwood Class Sikz would let me in

elevate a lot more get better flow and punces then ye..
but other than that UPPIN THIS SHIT..yo get some ppl to vote on this nigga..

o.k....
kinda different from most topicals ive seen....
more like an open mic piece
original anyway...props

ok....no hate but da jokah took this...beta structure and flow
his verse had the better vocab and imagery...

lil....ur verse rhymed..but jus 2 basic,wasnt all that bad but not good enough...


plz can both yall return a vote
links in ma sig

n if yall got anymore battles open id b happy to hit em up

peace

uppin this muh fuckah

uppin this muh fuckah

i think jokah won this b cuz it made sence the otha 1 didnt

iiight uppin this muh fuckah...

uppin this muh fuckah dont sleep niggas

aight yall, one sided battle... lil man like i said before brotha u gotta elevate before you come up against the big dawgs hommie.... no hate bro but yo' shit wasnt good man... it rhymed and shit some times but the flow and structure was way off man... da jokah ripped this topical apart big time with nice flow, nice structure and a nice lyrical base. i liked it a lot. lil u gotta elevate man, work on your rhyme scheme and your structure. like i said no hate lil just elevate... jokah won hands down...

VOTE- JOKAH

uppin this muh fuckah dont sleep

are u serious, wat the hel was lillongassname doing.... I don't think u tried at all... u gave Jokah no comp at all. Obviously the Jokah took it, his bars were straight, but he ain't really have to do much

winner..... Da Jokah

uppin this dont sleep niggas wun....

okay joker pretty much took this..........his made sense...............yo hwere ya get those dolls in ya avy form any wyas.....send me a pm wit tha link.......thnx.......but try to elevate chi.....

both were pretty horrible... but jokah kinda had a nice concept with the running commentary...

I don't like the idea that someone else's words played a factor in your ish though... that's not fair...

overall... jokah didn't leave my eye in hideous pain