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Best Night Of My Life
Ima tell yall about sum shit that went down last year prolly the best night of my life hear me out... (Verse) September 1st 2003/ Shit in reality jus another normal day for me/ Woke up and there was a text on my phone/ I remembered givin her my number... ...she asked if i wanted to go to her home/ She broke up wit her ex the night before last i was there to hear it/ I heard she liked me but that werent the reason... ...fact is he treated her like shit/ People could see we clicked...and there was a spark/ I couldnt believe i didnt notice her feelings... ...even when she showed me her birthmark/ It was in a particular area...but i wont say where/ Back to the story i replied back... ...sayin what time should i be there?/ She said come round about 7 my parents are going out/ I need sum company... ...and only u know what im about/ I tried callin her but she werent respondin/ She text dont call i get nervous... ...ur voice starts me gigglin/ So we text all day while the hours past/ I looked at the clock only an hour?... ...why aint the day goin fast?/ Finally 7 came i was at the door my mind constantly thinkin/ I knocked she answered come in watcha drinkin?/ I stood back amazed she dressed up for me... ...but then again we both we lookin smart/ She looked real beautiful... ...i could feel her taking my heart/ We sat in the living room and spoke as we watched sum T.V/ Then i felt her hand reach over startin to touch me/ I responded back the same my heart set on fast beats/ She pulled me over...her head on my lap in the same seats/ My hand was stroking her fine hair What Women Want was on/ I thought nows my chance please dont word it wrong/ I whispered in her ear I know what u want V/ She smiled and said what then... ...i told her u want me/ Then we kissed and our relationship was spawned/ 9 months later...our Baby Ethan was born... ...and we still going strong/ |
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shieet mayun that was nyce
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dont come at my hammi like that (z villian)
that was hard respect, my heart came to you on that one... ...producing a baby is the only fulfilling thing that you can ever do, you take this one with a 10/10.. great solid story, good lines, flow was very nice, worplay and the closure was "strong" rep D2R to the Fullest |
Thanks a lot dawg that means a lot im uppin this again yall
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wow man, that shit was hot dawg... great story line and fun to read.. flow was good, real nice man i like that shit..
I stood back amazed she dressed up for me... ...but then again we both we lookin smart/ She looked real beautiful... ...i could feel her taking my heart/ nice verse right there man, real nice... that was my favorite one in it. good spit |
It Was Aight..
Your Vocab and Multi/Flow Isnt All There...But You GOt The StoryLine Down...Just Need To Add The Emotion and Word Usuage To Your Advantage. Good Job Though...6.5/10 ~R~ |
I really feel the story to this, you can tell it really means somethin to you--- good piece here i like it.... Keep on climbin... 1
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dayumm that was nice yo
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awww..i like the way this shit was told..putting something as personal as that is alwayz interesting to read..could ov done with a bit more detail you know..shit like..getting dressed b4 going there..trying all diffrent outfits on and that..im sure u see where im cumin from..anyway it was a nice piece hope to see more from you in the future
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props...postin personal shit on here,takes guts...
in woz a nice drop..... sum raw emotion,nice depth to it....gud flow n nice use of multies keep it up |
could sumone drop a vote on dis 2 plz..........
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135238 thanx |
that was raw 8.5/10
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props to you for postin that, not bad either!!
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Dont like ya but an aight subject...7/10
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Deep shit...really beautiful,straight from the heart and soul...*sigh* guyz, look @ this: this is some sensitive stuff (gurls luv it!)
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AWWW, man this was so beautiful, damn, im teary, lmao, yo foreal, this was an all around great piece man, you really told the story well, your words were creative and they had imagery in them, this had a lot of feeling,,,,nice job mad dog.........
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