schema vs. RV
 

check in...both verses due before 4:45

16 lines
no crews haters or dickriders

since you havent checked in yet make it 5 but im not staying up all night waiting

i dont know what youre doing but heres mine


youre too small to bring it spit some flame and get trampled
i'm still trying to figure out why you're named for a camper
but i dont complain i give advice...for example
all you need to shine is a good sample

so here's how i think you should go
take a line out of my shit and make it sound like its somethin you wrote
build your verse around it and you're bound to sound dope
i won't say nothin and im sure that you won't...wait don't

cause i dont wanna be the reason that you got sad
people left reviews on your shit and youre all mad
"the first 15 bars were garbage but that other one's not bad"
so i guess youre better off thinking of something hot fast

rv...park yourself for this one and don't let it get too scary
cause i wrote this without a thesaurus or a rhyming dictionary
or a beat or a notebook or even a second glance
and even so you dont stand a chance

bet

...
 

u cud disquilfy him ya know if he not postin i think u cud

nah i dont wanna win like that. tell you what, im gonna go to sleep and ill be up like 1 or 2 tommorrow... if you havent posted by then you are no-show

i guess this battle, i gotta take a lil lighthearted
cuz you challenging me proves to all that you're retarded
this is me against you, hood taking a hillbilly
i feel like im going one on one with a fake ass TIMMAY!
say u wanted one more battle before your ass went to sleep
but we kno you're just waiting for your porno MP3
to finish up, so then you can get your self to sleep
cleaning up after busting to ur homosexual fantasies
and don't try to comeback with anythin similar 2 mine
i'll shoot you more times than 50 got, leave your punk ass dying
leave your mama crying for ya, then ill fuck her up too
do like you do to gay men and leave her sweating and screwed
but when it all comes to an end, and i'm done battlin you
fact will be fact and ima still rhyme shit better than you
now i was about to smack you up again but it seems your already dead
so i leave you alone now and hit up your mama's bed

sorry....someone shot out our electricity (damn firecrackers) and we lost power for awhile

and finally he arrives...ok people its voting time let me know what you thought

opener - rv
closer - tie
structure - rv
wordplay - rv
creativity - rv
vocab - rv
punches - rv
personals - ?

v - rv

drop 1 on this shit http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

opener - rv
closer - tie
structure - rv
wordplay - rv
creativity - rv
vocab - rv
punches - rv
personals - ?

v - rv

drop 1 on this shit

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

^^uppin^^ is too short so i guess ^^uppity-uppin^^^

^uppin^

everyones sleepin...ive been voting whats up

^uppin^

yo this battle is getting slept on like crazy...2 votes in 6 days what the fuck is that all about ^uppin^

vote on da prodigy vs slugga and da prodigy vs mixedtoxinz and i'll return the favor on ur battles

Return Da Favors 2 Slugga Vs Marx
And Slugga Vs Prodigy
But Schema Won
Because In My Opinion
He Had Alot More Accurate
Punches

Vote On Da Prodigy Vs Slugga And I'll Return The Favor

It Wuz Close But I Think Rv Won This Cuz His Flow Wuz Uh Lil Better And Had More Personals

^uppin^ need to get this battle out of here

schema:
youre too small to bring it spit some flame and get trampled
i'm still trying to figure out why you're named for a camper
but i dont complain i give advice...for example
all you need to shine is a good sample
^nah...not feelin' it at all...

so here's how i think you should go
take a line out of my shit and make it sound like its somethin you wrote
build your verse around it and you're bound to sound dope
i won't say nothin and im sure that you won't...wait don't
^nope...

cause i dont wanna be the reason that you got sad
people left reviews on your shit and youre all mad
"the first 15 bars were garbage but that other one's not bad"
so i guess youre better off thinking of something hot fast
^2nd line is meh...the rest is nah...

rv...park yourself for this one and don't let it get too scary
cause i wrote this without a thesaurus or a rhyming dictionary
^you had the right idea in the start....2nd line was a no...

or a beat or a notebook or even a second glance
and even so you dont stand a chance
^nope...



RV
i guess this battle, i gotta take a lil lighthearted
cuz you challenging me proves to all that you're retarded
^nope...

this is me against you, hood taking a hillbilly
i feel like im going one on one with a fake ass TIMMAY!
^I get the punch...but no...failed attempt

say u wanted one more battle before your ass went to sleep
but we kno you're just waiting for your porno MP3
^who would want a porno MP3? porno sounds without the video? hell no...u just couldn;t think of a punch that rhymed with sleep...

to finish up, so then you can get your self to sleep
cleaning up after busting to ur homosexual fantasies
^stop with the sex punches already...

and don't try to comeback with anythin similar 2 mine
i'll shoot you more times than 50 got, leave your punk ass dying
^...no...

leave your mama crying for ya, then ill fuck her up too
do like you do to gay men and leave her sweating and screwed
^this is gettin' worse by the line...

but when it all comes to an end, and i'm done battlin you
fact will be fact and ima still rhyme shit better than you
^no...

now i was about to smack you up again but it seems your already dead
so i leave you alone now and hit up your mama's bed
^holy fuck...another sex punch

Overall: Nothin' stood out in this battle...But I guess since I have to vote, i'd go with Schema. Atleast he didn't come with a gay sex punch every 2 seconds...like seriously man...even in a live battle...that stuff would be wack.

/v- Schema

Please return the favour and drop honest votes on my battles please. I took the time to vote on yours...you can do the same.

^clearing out my old battles uppin^

ok this is return of favor to schema for voting
 

breaking this shit down like a mofo

schema:

youre too small to bring it spit some flame and get trampled
i'm still trying to figure out why you're named for a camper
shit opening 2/10

but i dont complain i give advice...for example
all you need to shine is a good sample
wack cant even be bother to explain why 3/10

so here's how i think you should go
take a line out of my shit and make it sound like its somethin you wrote
is it a story 2/10

build your verse around it and you're bound to sound dope
i won't say nothin and im sure that you won't...wait don't
no punch 1/10

cause i dont wanna be the reason that you got sad
people left reviews on your shit and youre all mad
is this a conversation on a chat room?? 1/10

"the first 15 bars were garbage but that other one's not bad"
so i guess youre better off thinking of something hot fast
best so far 4/10

rv...park yourself for this one and don't let it get too scary
cause i wrote this without a thesaurus or a rhyming dictionary
questioning abilty 4/10

or a beat or a notebook or even a second glance
and even so you dont stand a chance
shit finish 2/10

19/80
2.4/10

ok flow was ok structure is bad no personals had about one decent line thats about it no punches more of a story teller as i said sounded like a conversation on a chat room

RV

i guess this battle, i gotta take a lil lighthearted
cuz you challenging me proves to all that you're retarded
bad opening 2/10

this is me against you, hood taking a hillbilly
i feel like im going one on one with a fake ass TIMMAY!
what is this shit about 1/10

say u wanted one more battle before your ass went to sleep
but we kno you're just waiting for your porno MP3
this got me laughing like fuck MP3 porn lol what kind of perverted mind you got lol i give you 3/10

to finish up, so then you can get your self to sleep
cleaning up after busting to ur homosexual fantasies
no rhyme no shit 0/10

and don't try to comeback with anythin similar 2 mine
i'll shoot you more times than 50 got, leave your punk ass dying
no shit again 1/10

leave your mama crying for ya, then ill fuck her up too
do like you do to gay men and leave her sweating and screwed
shit shit 1/10

but when it all comes to an end, and i'm done battlin you
fact will be fact and ima still rhyme shit better than you
your best line so far 3/10

now i was about to smack you up again but it seems your already dead
so i leave you alone now and hit up your mama's bed
3/10 for this ending congrajulation it rhymed

14/80
2.25/10

flow is shit no rhyme on more than one line no punches except for the sexual stuff and lol on the MP3 porn no offence with the comment you need a lot of work to elevate

ok close shit and it deserve to be called shit i give it to schema for having better flow thats about it
vote:schema

with respect for both of you

hit my battles with an honest vote and i will return the favor

peace

^^clearin out my old battles cmon yall one more vote^^

^^uppin to clear out this battle ^^

^^uppin to end this^^

yea not the greatest batle....vote schema cuz RV had a terrible rhyme scheme and it was just messy...neither stood out keep elevatin