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Apotheosis Vs. L.I. Vs. MetaSkriptz
::..Rules..:: 30 Linez Max 5 Votez Winz No Crew No Hate No D/R CheckS Due By 7-15-04 Spits Due By 7-17-04 Votes Due By 7-20-04 Topic - Loss For Wordz Good Luck! ~R~ |
Just Post Up Votes... If Voting For L.I. or Apotheosis....Then Vote In The Option That Says "L.I." If Voting For MetaSkriptz Then Vote For Him In HIs Option.. ~R~ |
Cool....dope topic....im feeling it....check in....goodluck Apo and Meta....
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aight checking In....Good Luck to Both
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word...dope topic...dope opponents good luck palaroonies :)
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Couple of things.....this IS 30 lines its just a different structure & if its confusing its because I had to condense it alot...but yeh.....good luck guys. Stuart was a street mime. . . . . .providing joy to the kids, & every week at the same time. . . . . .he saw a beautiful girl cross the bridge. He never knew her name. . . . . .but he wanted to so much, he saw she liked to draw. . . . . .so he learnt about art & such. Just to have that moment. . . . . .to speak on a mutual interest, so he could take her hand & hold it. . . . . .& let his heart confess. . . that she captured his gaze. . . . . .by the ways that she’d move, & he just wanted to say. . . . . . “that I love you.” Corny as it seemed. . . . . .those words he wanted to utter, but what really held him back. . . . . .was the fact he had a stutter. Worried that would make him it seem. . . . . .he was a retard, made him a bag of nerves. . . . . .& his lungs start breathe hard. As the sweat poured. . . . . .he approached her by the bench, Gulping hardly. . . . . .with his fists tightly clenched. “h-h-hello my n-name is Stu. . . . . .I’ve seen you for a while, & all I’ve wanted to do, is be close to your smile. . . I-i-i-‘m sure this is w-w-weird. . . . . .it m-m-may appear like it, b-b-ut I c-cant get out m-my words. . . . . .b-because I’m so ex-excited!” she looked at him nervously. . . . . .to her this was a complete shock, not a word escaped her mouth. . . . . .& her stomach tied in nots. 10 seconds went by. . . . . .stu had tears by his eyelids, with nothing but his heart. . . . . .to break the silence. He ran away embarrassed. . . . . .not wanting now to live, so he ran by the river. . . . . .& climbed on Witsmore bridge. She saw what he was doing. . . . . .she ran but it was too late, the girls loss of words. . . . . .decided Stuarts fate. She was not to blame. . . . . .but the dealer of the hand she was dealt, for Stuart words were hard. . . . . .& this trouble she also felt. I mean what can you do. . . . . .if the words wont release from your tongue, how can you answer I love you. . . . . .if your def & dumb. by the way "dumb" is a word used to people who are mute. |
im dropping today or tonight....:)
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Loss For Words
Words deceased, as i plead for sound to succeed...
Nothing released, not an ounce of perfection free'd... Lips quiver with thought, but nothin inspiring is taught... As my mind fought, it arises with a feelin of distraught... Anger keeps elevating to new heights, putting up a fight... Functions are tight, as i struggle to even write tonight... As hard as i try, i struggle to stir things, yet i know ideas are lurking... Brains jerking, cant think right cause only the left sides working... Tip of the tongue feeling, anger level is to the ceiling... On the edge to stealing, but biting doesnt do healing... Trying for that real shit, but my mind is completely oblivious... I feel it, have the concepts aroused but just keep missing it... Need to sustain my reign, and put all the doubters to shame... Have the brain be drained, and a clean slate contained... Deadline is approaching, do i need coaching?... Upset feeling as each tic leaves thoughts poaching... I sit and clear my mind, inside myself i search for a line... As my teeth grind, my intellect is locked up and confined... Vision of the win's acute, becoming desperate in pursuit... All senses get the boot, all i feel is deaf, blind, and mute... Only thing inevitable is failure, hopes crashed as the trails blurred... Success deterred, Everything is off accuracy as if the scales stirred... The results leave me in shock, my confidence was knocked... Loss has been been locked, as an outcome of writers block... L.I. |
can at least 1 person vote.........................
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^........................................for me :)
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imma come back n voet later too long to explain..but apothesis took this...imma come back later n explain
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okay so apo took this hands down. i mean he had great imagery from the get go, building up to the very ending, which was dope. definitely not where i thought it was going. topicals are supposed to make you see, feel, and touch you. apo, did all of this with this drop.
LI and meta,both decent drops but i wasnt feeling the topic. topicals are about imagery, which was lacking in both verses. nice vocab meta, bad spelling in places, lol, both decent drops but apo just took it to another level. peace |
aight i thought meta won this shit cause he had good imaginary and vocab i was feelin it it was a nice topic and i felt that meta just picked this shit up and ranaway with it his structure was good and made it flow good thats what i was feeling was tha flow and that about wraps it up
LI and apo u guy's did good to i just wasnt feeling yours aswell as meta's u guy's both stayed on topic pretty well flow was aight vocab was aight i was just feeling meta |
I think meta took this one cuz he used betta vocab....even thought his verse and L.I's verse were very close........I still vote for Meta
Apo= ya verse was ok it was just a regualr verse wasnt really nuffin special.....if you would have used betta vocab then it would have been betta.....good imagenary though L.i ya verse was good right beside metas.........you had alot of multis but meta beat u on vocab Big up to all of yall |
who the fuck r eitherof you...u arent experienced voters....pfff....sniff sniff....i smell dickriding...faggots
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Nah they elevated Status....Thanks guys :D....
if they voted for you, you would have said Thank you and stuff and say Your elevated status But since me and apo is close and People is voting hnestly... Sniff Sniff... have some dignety..Nah J/p But its all coo :D |
well me & mets are 2-2 hopefully state will come bak and explain the vote....................can u keep this open so we can see who is a clear winner? im out now ne ways pz
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I have to Obide Rules...But if he votes..me and you will have a Regular Topical battle in the Tourny to see who will go to Finals
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Aiight It Was Like This...
Meta: I Was Feeling Your Verse Even Though It Didnt Really Seem Anthing Special To Me... You Know, It Didnt Have That Factor That Just Makes Something Stand Out, But The Lyrical Content Was Most Deffinately There... Decent Imagery And Flow Was Pretty Nice... Apo:Very Nice, Flow, Content... And What Really Showd Me You Won This Was Your Concept That You Built AROUND Your Given Topic... I Think It's Very Important To Make Everything Your Own... And You Did That Better Then Meta While L.I Stuck To Titley To The Given Topic... L.I:Flow And Content Was Hot, But What Lost It Was Your Lack Of Creativity... I Think If You Just Streched Your Mind Further Away From "Loss For Words" Then You And Apo Would Be Neck And Neck And This Would Be An Extremely Hard Battle Judge... Final Vote:Apotheosis... ~One~ |
A'ight...this was a hot topical...Meta...nice drop...feelin imagery...nice structure and flow...decent vocab...nice story. Apothesis....structure was a lil wierd...but imagery was nice. Vocab was interesting...overall nice shit. L.I...nice shit fo real. I think you came the best in this one...you are more experienced in topicals than the other two...you took it wit an overall better imagery and story, and structure and flow was nice.
Hot topical, no hate. Vote- L.I Hit this up plz. Thx. http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...724#post1421724 |
How is everyone voting Since L.I. had a fit....Hew must be telling people to vote....
Because First hes wondering who them people that voted for me and Why im getting votes and d/res and now Its Wiered how all these people are voting Now.....Tisk Tisk Tisk |
I voted honestly....so don't call me a fuckin' dickryder.
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im not...Im just saying is Wierd...But its coo...Calm Down
haha...if I lose I lose if anyone of them Lose they lose But Time Almost up |
l.i. you had actually a nice verse with good flow and average structure your lines could be shorter.. you stayed on topic well and this won you the battle..you just beat them by a tiny bit..not much dont brag.. lol 8.5/10 apo..i like what you got going on with your structure rhyme evryother line and it was honestly pretty great props on that..your verse was all around nice..proud of you man..but i felt li did better with this wack topic lol 8.2/10 meta..you structure was good and you had me..well that is untill the end a lil after half waay through u lost me..u kinda sunk off topic..they both only beat you by a hair apo's vesre was barely better than you.. overall 8.0/10 didnt come hard enought my vote L.I. |
metaskripts:
very good verse...you had decent imagery it could have been better...i think you also had some decent wordplay...your first half of the verse really struck me as amazing it was tight knit and well done...but your second half really fell off i think you lost the topic halfway through...the vocabulary was definately better than the other two verses and for the most part your verse was consistent... overall : 8.2/10 Apotheosis: i was really feeling your verse...i thought i wouldnt like your structure but it really made your verse a little bit hotter...you probably had the best imagery but L.I was close to you in that section...decent verse overall...i think your vocab definately could have been better this was the most basic topical verse i have seen from you... it seemed like you didnt put your all into this battle and you slacked a little but still you were consistent and it was a good read overall : 7.9/10 L.I...once again the wordplay stands out in a league of its own...you really tooko a hold of this topic and made it work for you...you didnt force anything and you pulled the whole verse together...so you definately took it in the wordplay and multies category...i also think you stayed on topic better than the other 2 verses....i dont think this was your best topical piece but it is up there with the other hott ones you have done...your structure was practically perfect and you used words to your advantage i think you had good vocab not as good as metaskripts but definately well wrote overall : 8.4/10 Flow: Apotheosis Multies: L.I Wordplay: L.I Imagery: Apotheosis Vocabulary: Metaskripts Consistency: Metaskripts Who stayed On Topic The Best: L.I Which I enjoyed The Most: L.I vote: L.I i think metaskripts had a solid verse and would have won this battle if the last 6 lines were wrote better...you fell off topic there...i liked your verse also apotheosis...but i dont think you put as much effort into this verse as you could have...L.I i think you edged this battle out and won ~!1!~ Very Nice Battle...Very Well-Written Topicals But L.I Really Wrote This One The Best |
Aight this was a good battle but I would have to say L.I took this. MetA and Apoth was dope but L.I.s was better
1 li 2 meta 3 apoth |
Fuck it....L.I Wont.....This Stays Closed and L.I. Moves On
Me and apo will have a lost on our record |
Aight the only way for this To Go on Apo's Record if his name is in their Too So his name is going to be on their Also
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