bklynafc2004 .VS. For$akeN
 

rules are (don't break it)

5 BARS (10 LINES)
25 MINS TO SPIT AFTER CHECK IN
NO HATE/CREW VOTES (NO HWCS)
NO D/R VOTES.
NO BITING (OF COURSE!)
SPIT WITHIN TIME LIMIT I'LL BE DONE IN 15 MINUTES MAX!

*CHECK*

o.k doogie u want to battle ur better off to sue me
i been calling people out since i been on
so it's ur turn to move me i'll smoke u like a loosely
im join this battle dog but i know u can't spit
im a battle u while my girl sucking my d*%$#@
lol lol lol lol

my girl still giving me neck
while my fingures damaging the keyboard
never forget im the beast in the peace
still growing like yeast first u wanted the war
now u yelling out peace thats alittle extra for u lol

aight dog i got to admit u are tight
but it aint the sh*#@t u need to quit
im on ur site spitten that bright light
and the matck aint even lit
i send kites for the hit keeping the flows lock like a pit
but ur the dog and i'll tell u when to sit
im up on here no crew at all
urs judging the battle but ur still taking a fall
i black out when i brawl u computer thug
i'll shut ur whole hard drive wit my hardcore
and i can peep that ur soft come bring ur leader
cause turned out to be no match at all

come on how many do i have to spit for u to reply
and im going real light on u cause ur not the one i ask for
but im a have fun

I already spit man.......wait for the votes............

come on im straight street ur sugar down the battle thats no fun
dog i spit and thats that
u and i know who won so i don't care of the judging word lol U ARE SOFT LOL

I don't give a fuck I've only been rapping for 2 months if im
soft I'm soft fuck that shit man I have a long ass time to
elevate man.

uppin 4 votes and leave links if ya feel I'll get back to it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

it's all good no matter wat it's all in fun for only 2 month ur doing ur thing man
keep on doing ur thing homie good battle

only 11 mor

only 10 more

^^don't fuckin' freepost in my thread in you ain't gonna vote
or don't have enough posts damn whats wrong wit chu!!!!!!!!!!

uppin 4 some fuckin' votes sleepers!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!

votes come on people......................leave links I'll get back to it!!!!!!! :cussing:

Aight...here's how I see it

For$akeN
shit kid you acting like the shit but I ain't see nothing yet~
you couldn't smoke my ass not even if you lighted a cigarette~
(pretty played weak punch try to word it better)
I'm surprised you claimed a title on another stupid ass site~
it couldn't be a hot spot if it was completely in the light~
(didn't hit very hard)
you just recently joined and you going up against a damn pro~
hmm. boi your rhymes are still flat you remind of a plateau~
(Ok)
you say you killing emcee's and at the same time doing beats~
your tracks couldn't imitate me... if the shit was on repeat!~
(not bad...again try wordin' it different)
r so lucky i'm going easy on you because your unknown~
you rhymes still couldn't beat me if it was twice postponed~(post twice...)
(Ok closer) Average verse

bklynafc2004

I'm not goin' to break down your verse because it was...well it was weak. I don't know what site you come from...but here 99.9% of the time you only get 1 verse to shine and you pretty much stayed in the shadow. You need to elevate in everything. Keep trying.

Vote For$aken

Aight, I think you both probably could have came harder.. especially you, For.. ;) This battle was a waste of time in my opinion, where'd you pick this cat up from? Anyhow.. I know how ya feel.. here's my breakdown..

Flow - Forsaken: Easily.. read the verses and you'll understand.. For's flows nice for the most part, while bklyn's flow is choppy in quite a few places..

Punches - Forsaken: I'm not sure if bklyn even realizes the 'power of a punchline' .. For, you had a couple decent punches, but the rest were hittin' pretty soft.. nothin trashy, just couldv'e made em hit harder.. bk, I see a few attempts at punches, but I don't see any of em landing.. work on that..

Personals - Forsaken: You had a couple decent personals in there.. nothin' special, just letting us know you did your homework.. bky.. umm.. your only personal was admitting that For was tight.. what the hell was that?? Did you forget you were battling, not kissing ass?

Multis - Neither: wasn't impressed by this categy from either side.

Complexity - Forsaken: For's actually had some rhyme structure, and decent vocab.. bkl, I understand that you're new here, but you're gonna need to figure out what aspects people like to see here.. double verses and sloppy mechanics will get you nowhere.. good luck son..

v/Forsaken



please return an honest vote.. link in sig..

Thanks


one~

lmaoooo wow how da fukk did u get in hard wood class sickz spittin like dat

shit alright,
Foresaken:you took this shit heres why: your verse was a verse not a fucking neverending story, you had good punches, flow, and structure, u didnt come that hard, but in this case i dont know if u had too....overall good opener and closer, but not ur best...
bklyn:yo, not hatin or anything, but ur verse would have been better if u kept it together, literally,your verse was decent but not good enough to beat foresaken
VOTE:foresaken

uppin 4 votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yo, forsaken had better punchez, flow, structure, personelles, complex ish, so ima give my vote 2 forsaken. tha utha guy, u need 2 elevate, just keep practisin, werd

vote=forsaken

pleeze leeve a honest vote in this battle: http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135812
werd

^can't vote...........uppin~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

For$aken

shit kid you acting like the shit but I ain't see nothing yet~
you couldn't smoke my ass not even if you lighted a cigarette~
->>decent opener

I'm surprised you claimed a title on another stupid ass site~
it couldn't be a hot spot if it was completely in the light~
->>not feelin it

you just recently joined and you going up against a damn pro~
hmm. boi your rhymes are still flat you remind of a plateau~
->>its ok

you say you killing emcee's and at the same time doing beats~
your tracks couldn't imitate me... if the shit was on repeat!~
->>decent

your so lucky i'm going easy on you because your unknown~
you rhymes still couldn't beat me if it was twice postponed~(post twice...)
->>kinda funny because he did post twice

bklynafc2004

o.k doogie u want to battle ur better off to sue me
i been calling people out since i been on
so it's ur turn to move me i'll smoke u like a loosely
->>second line? get out of here you gotta elevate

im join this battle dog but i know u can't spit
im a battle u while my girl sucking my d*%$#@
->>weak

my girl still giving me neck
while my fingures damaging the keyboard
->>rhyme?

never forget im the beast in the peace
still growing like yeast first u wanted the war
now u yelling out peace thats alittle extra for u lol
->>wackk

\/not counting this its past 5 bars\/
aight dog i got to admit u are tight
but it aint the sh*#@t u need to quit
im on ur site spitten that bright light
and the matck aint even lit
i send kites for the hit keeping the flows lock like a pit
but ur the dog and i'll tell u when to sit
im up on here no crew at all
urs judging the battle but ur still taking a fall
i black out when i brawl u computer thug
i'll shut ur whole hard drive wit my hardcore
and i can peep that ur soft come bring ur leader
cause turned out to be no match at all



bklyn first of all i seriously doubt you won a title at another site...theres no shame in being new all you gotta do is elevate. 5 bars is 10 lines he even explained it and you didnt get it. you posted 3 times? you only get once.

Forsaken didnt come particularly hard but he really didnt have to easy vote

v/Forsaken

\/hit my shit up honestly\/