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DON 07-15-04 01:57 AM

DON(mos.) <VS> LEGACY(c.s.)
 
40-50 lines
due tomoro by 9 pm eastern time
no bull
topic:hope
legacy dont fight it jus this is a fine topic aight and were good friends so dont mess it up by arguing about the topic aight drop by the due time good luck pc

shadow 07-15-04 09:36 AM

yea this crew battle is rollin....ahhh uppin for legacy to check in..

DON 07-15-04 04:09 PM

~HOPE~

~hopes just a word but i dont have it~
~with the life i lead its like a could unable to grab it~
~a full house family no food to eat~
~stampin our feet the only way we obtain heat~
~but yet i attend church to recieve a blessin~
~only later that day to find my moneys lessended~
~come christmas my children neva heard of prancer~
~no money its all spent fightin my sons cancer~
~no tv jus silence through the third story~
~come home at nine wit no food left for me~
~and yet i pray my only vent of hope~
~second job stuck to sellin dope~
~all these troubles yet no solutions~
~my life is earth and im the pollution~
~jus when i thought it was all wrong it turned~
~we won a lottery all the things i yearned~
~theyre in reach now the moneys there~
~my wife warned me this would happen but i didnt care~
~i lost my faith the last thing i had~
~the one thing i last learned from dad~
~well look at him i said~
~he died wit no money poor and cold in bed~
~he left my mother with nothing~
~but now i got my chance were finally something~
~fuck hope i had it all life and whered it get me~
~i prayed enough now look wat he sent me~
~millions in cash now theres no need~
~she tried tellin me im speakin greed~
~yeah ok well fuck you then i neva need you~
~i work all day to come home and neva see you~
~where have you been and what you done~
~all you did was add to the struggle so it weighed a ton~
~id deal wit 2 bosses then to hear you yellin~
~how the fuck do i control how much drugs theyre sellin~
~i only get paid wat i earn and its not much~
~but now i got it all well neva be stuck~
~so i left i was done talkin~
~i had to cash in the ticket so i began walkin~
~over to the shop rite and walk up to the counter~
~handed the ticket this time hope hit me a grounder~
~im sorry sir not a winner but try again~
~hope is the last thing left for men~

DON 07-15-04 11:58 PM

uppin for him to drop hsi verse on here...........

Introspect. 07-16-04 12:52 PM

sorry i just got back from my friends house i'll drop later pc

Introspect. 07-17-04 12:02 AM

you really gotta have alot hope in my type of situation~
got no money baby on tha way from intercourse penatration~
thought it was all good till tha baby come early time he needs more~
they tellin me i might not ever be able to hold him cause he's premature~
and he might die a tear trickels down my eye they tell me to come back later
but i cant leave my kid while all that's given him life is this resperator~
but it's not just cause he's premature they told me bold an plain~
that they have just found a rapidly growing tumor in his lil brain~
and they couldnt do tha surgery cause i couldnt afford these medical bills~
i had to keep him alive but i'm calm as inside outrageous tention builds~
as i get to tha parkin lot and to my house i abruptly start to run~
only 1 way for this surgery to happen and a crushal key to that is my gun~
as i get tha clip's i think of my baby and my heart like tha titanic it sank~
but i had to do what i gotta do so i sucked it up and walked in tha local bank
a silent hush went around then i shot 2 in tha roof and said everybody down
not knowin tha clerk soundin the alarm i heard tha cops sirens comen in town
the clerk said WANT DO U WANT i said put the money in this sack~
it was in their the cop's were their so i ran out tha door into tha back~
of the alley with hope that he would survive then i feel a burning sensation~
enter my chest i was hit i shoot back in a panic no time for hesitation~
i get in my car and tell my wife i'm on my way then she says tha baby is fine
i tell her i love her and tha baby cause i'm gaspin for breath loosen time~
then my chest got real heavy like someone stabed me wit a big knife~
i guess it's tru what they say death brings anutha life..................

DON 07-17-04 01:00 AM

uppin for votes aight thanks pc...................

DON 07-17-04 03:36 PM

uppin for soem votes..............................

DON 07-17-04 07:48 PM

uppin.............................................

DON 07-18-04 03:05 AM

uppin.............................................

shadow 07-18-04 11:49 AM

lets go uppin this shit..c'mon..lets gte this poppin..

DON 07-18-04 05:38 PM

uppin.............................................

DON 07-18-04 11:15 PM

uppin.............................................

DON 07-19-04 03:51 PM

uppin.............................................

Metaskriptz 07-19-04 08:57 PM

woooo...Seriously and honestly pretty good Vocab but Not much Multies
but you had some Nice structure leaving good flow and Stuff and More
imageny

Don..you Was good To But Slipped in some parts of the Flow
and Vocabl..Yours was pretty Focused Legacy takes it because yours was
more orginial then his

v/Legacy

Legacy-Nice Drop you had some pretty good

DON 07-20-04 12:55 AM

^please meta i had u blaklisted before from all the hate u and physik give me plus legacy was 3 days late and 25 lines short obviously u need to pay attention to more than who u dont like

Introspect. 07-20-04 01:00 AM

uppin this shit i won i won i won i won haha jp vote bitches vote

DON 07-20-04 03:17 PM

uppin.............................................

DON 07-21-04 05:33 AM

uppin.............................................

DON 07-21-04 02:22 PM

uppin.............................................

shadow 07-21-04 02:57 PM

metaphysic had got meta scriptz on his dick obviously look at his name..and the fact that he got put into the dreamteam..

Introspect. 07-24-04 02:53 PM

uppin for votes leave a link i'll hit it up.........

Wicked One 07-24-04 11:18 PM

Don- ya topical verse was pretty good...but some lines seemed to not connect that much i mean i dont know how to explain it but yeah...your flow was decent i thought...you had some pretty good vocab ...and you stayed on topic...so overall you did good...
Legacy-ya topical verse was pretty i thought i was feelin it more...your lines were good too...and also you had some nice vocab.....and had a nice flow too...and also you stayed on topic so overall you get my vote for for better verse and i was just feelin it more ya know....

v/Legacy.....

J Gutta 07-24-04 11:57 PM

iight legacy..
u had good flow..nice complexity and good structure

Don..
nice flow..and good structure but u didnt come hard enuff to win tha battle

so legacy took this battle with better flow structure an complexity
nice battle so its close

v/legacy

holla at my battle in my sig iight holla wun...

Know-Gimix 07-25-04 12:02 AM

This was dope from both of you--- i thought they were both well thought out verses, you both followed topic in your own strange ways which i liked from both-- Only I like Legacies verse more at the end- he used some really good imagery and the ending was a little less cliche, and it was also kind of touching in a way- I thought Don you were good but when it ended it was kind of abrupt, and with all the references to prayer I thought the ending would have tied into that, just what I thought tho no hate... Vote Legacy.... Return the fav and get this isht closed--- http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132453

Introspect. 07-25-04 01:39 AM

uppin for votes leave a link i'll hit it up.........

FlowIntelligent. 07-25-04 01:57 AM

don...i was really feeling your verse at first but your flow fell off and so did your structure some lines were long some were short...and you fell off topic a couple times and added lines that didnt need to be there...your vocab was bad it was too basic...you had some good wordplay and a couple good multies but other than that i think you did a poor job at writing this topical

legacy: your verse wasnt much better than don's but your vocablary won this battle for you...everything else between your verses was pretty much even but the vocabulary defined the winner...decent imagery decent flow structure looked stretched/forced you could have came hotter and put more effort into this but i still think you won

vote: legacy

~!1!~

Introspect. 07-25-04 05:56 PM

uppin for 1 more vote please vote leave a link i'll hit it up

Know-Gimix 07-25-04 10:10 PM

Return the favor Bitchez........... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132453

Introspect. 07-25-04 11:04 PM

uppin for 1 more vote please vote leave a link i'll hit it up.

Ca'lam 07-26-04 02:32 AM

i agree with flow..


don:yours was strait at the beggining, but it fell off a lil bit at the end.. which kind of gave a bad last impression...

legacy:was strait throughout... i see your elevating at topicals :D..rematch time :thumbup:


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