Biggie_XL vs Smoke
 

no d/r
no crew votes
no explaining lines
10 lines min
15 line max
verse due 20 min's after check in......

ok we gona finsh this in 30 my brotha wants tha computer

ok well check in no 20 min alrite lets do this shit aiight

aight........checkin in...i'mma drop right after u

well y'all ready to hear a spit starit form the B-I-G to tha G-I-E
cuz i mic and som beat and my fanatci is all a fella needs
cuz now it time to match witts with tha Smoke sreen
and after this shit this fool will turn envey green
cuz wit ma 2 fist ill kill this lame excuse fo an emcee
cuz this fagget hear can't spit a rhyme what will evan some close to bend me
cuz ill have tha motha fucka areal line then i Cock
and next think ya now what left of him is lined in chalk
cua ill spit thid like bad boy cuz i ma special delivery
and fo this fagget i wont pull ouy ma cavelrie
cuz ill i nee ma 2 fist and a mic in hand
and thin emcee dead like Da Band
cuz see this is that shit were i prevail
kill a bitch wit baseball bat and nail
im unthouch able cuz shit gon phase me
i spit like this and it make people Swazy


first battle aiight it may not be great

fuck im pissed i didn't look at ma spellin i type so fast i make so much fucking mistakes

I just seen lights flast before my eyes it was a unforgettable time
Cuz I almost died from laughin' too hard after I read your first line
I'mma give u some tips since this ya first, and I'm keepin it real
Invest in a nice rag, some turtle wax and go polish ya skills
Stay in class don't drop out Biggie please u need to stay in school
Take a look at the rules 10 - 15 lines for your verse you illiterate fool
We just started and I passed ya I’m bout to set the nitro- off
Biggie you wouldn’t “XL” if u was the programmer of Micro~soft (get it)
How does it feel to live a life and know u a coward
But can’t do nothin’ bout it cuz your dumb ass allow-it

shit!!! in the first line "flast" is suppose to be flash

i would correct my mistakes but i would just half to re rite ma hole verse man im stupid

uppin for some votes..................................

im uppin some votes............................. :thumbup:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=135192

opener:smoke
punches:Smoke
flow:smoke
structure:smoke
vocab:smoke
personals:smoke
closer:smoke
overall:smokeskreen

one sided battle, Biggie u didnt come to well.

yoyoyo, my nigga smokescreen jus demolished this nigga Biggie.... he had me laughin the whole way thru.... Biggie need sum work and only had one good line, while smoke spit hard bars and kept the whole thing interesting

winner..... $MOKESKREEN

for sure you got this one cuz i didn't check my spelling i re read it and was confused

yo, i;m sorry biggie; next time kill ya bro for rushin ya:
biggie:you did have some decent punches, ya flow was good too, work on ya spellin like ya said and i think you''ll be good
smokescreen:ya shit was funny as hell, your flow was good, punches were dope, personals hit hard.......ima have to give this to you
VOTE:smokeskreen

Biggie_XL

well y'all ready to hear a spit starit form the B-I-G to tha G-I-E
cuz i mic and som beat and my fanatci is all a fella needs
->>spelling is bad and first line is way stretched 3/10

cuz now it time to match witts with tha Smoke sreen
and after this shit this fool will turn envey green
->>its decent 5/10

cuz wit ma 2 fist ill kill this lame excuse fo an emcee
cuz this fagget hear can't spit a rhyme what will evan some close to bend me
->>second line stretched ok punch 4/10

cuz ill have tha motha fucka areal line then i Cock
and next think ya now what left of him is lined in chalk
->>good second line i was feelin this 6/10

cua ill spit thid like bad boy cuz i ma special delivery
and fo this fagget i wont pull ouy ma cavelrie
->>doesnt rhyme at all 3/10

cuz ill i nee ma 2 fist and a mic in hand
and thin emcee dead like Da Band
->>ok punch 4/10

cuz see this is that shit were i prevail
kill a bitch wit baseball bat and nail
->>baseball bat and a nail? cmon dogg 3/10

im unthouch able cuz shit gon phase me
i spit like this and it make people Swazy
->>thats why i bust back it dont phase me
->>when he drop take his glock and im swayze
->>2pac & Biggie-Runnin'
->>bitin' 0/10

->>total:28/80 35%


$MOKESKREEN

I just seen lights flast before my eyes it was a unforgettable time
Cuz I almost died from laughin' too hard after I read your first line
->>pretty good opener 5/10

I'mma give u some tips since this ya first, and I'm keepin it real
Invest in a nice rag, some turtle wax and go polish ya skills
->>good punch 6/10

Stay in class don't drop out Biggie please u need to stay in school
Take a look at the rules 10 - 15 lines for your verse you illiterate fool
->>addin words to make the first line fit but ok punch 5/10

We just started and I passed ya I’m bout to set the nitro- off
Biggie you wouldn’t “XL” if u was the programmer of Micro~soft (get it)
->>no not really 3/10

How does it feel to live a life and know u a coward
But can’t do nothin’ bout it cuz your dumb ass allow-it
->>doesnt make sense 3/10

->>total 22/50 44%

Biggie it was an alright first verse just keep elevatin and dont ever bite it just makes you look like a herb

Smokescreen i was really feelin the first 3 bars but kinda fell off at the end you still took it easy though

->>v/Smokescreen

I'm not hatin with low percents...100% is the best textcee on the site so low isnt bad while youre elevating

\/hit these up honestly\/

thanks for the feedback...uppin

^^^ and its a program that's used on microsoft call Excel for those of u that don't know

opener=smoke
puches=smoke
flow=smoke
personals=both
vocab=smoke
closer=smoke

biggie you really didnt come hard on this battle at all you stuck wit the basic ryhme scheme i know you got better stuff

ovrall vote smoke wins

go vote on my battle wit tragedee and then ill poll

smoke screen got this he came harder had better puches and flow