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Timeless Vs J_trooper
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naw we goin 10/15
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I kill kids like you for a living, i slightly gone mad r-kelly
Let's face it... MY on-net career's lookin up... ....and yours is lookin up to me I smash you like mirrors with J's face cast your like a window in my rectum... coz you a Payne(pain) in my ass But I'm dropping you boy, like childs game of hot potato Cuz the dopest thing you ever formed... ...came outta a can of Play-Doh. your not religious? but you should now pray to jehova coz this panzie didnt have a chance tho... ...like sunday mornings with the mower!!! Didnt wanna check for 12 lines? even more lines for his diss J your like armless kids at birthdays... ...you will never carry a gift!! Another mcee flattened as i quickly fly-by this battle is like rugby matchs won by kicks... ...because i didnt even try!!! |
They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist
Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin |
They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist
Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin ______________ |
yo j that was hot b.. and timeless came atchu... this one's close u both on that same pedestal of hotness... but ima give it to j.. that's ma dawg.. i liked his punches a lil betta but props to both of ya.. stay up
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breakdown
flow- timeless punches- j structure- j personal enjoyment- j hardness- j personals- nobody really ties thats tha breakdown of ma vote Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
ok:
timeless, you had the overall better verse here, you had good flow and structure, ya punches hit hard and you had some creative vocabulary in ya verse,good job.... trooper:your structure was good,but ya lines is stretched a bit, but you had a decent verse, i just dont think vocab wise you were better than your opponent, you need to come harder, and maybe use some personals in there as well... VOTE:timeless |
Timeless: opener, was good, u had some alright punches, nuttin amazin...u had good flow throughout ur verse, and good structure..no personals...ok verse
6/10.... J: Ugly ass structure, do sumthin about that...u also had weak punches, ur lines were stretched, not good doggy....... 4/10... v/timeless for an all around better verse.. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
this battle sucked
but i was feelin j's more timeless u didn't rap as much as u should wen i read urs i wanted to stop j u didn't do as well as u could of but urs was more interesting than his punches i give- j structure and flow i give- timeless vocab-j personal enjoyment goest to- j no hatin v= J_trooper Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Timeless im not feelin your Structure It Kindof Threw Me Off ...
Punches: J Flow: Time Personals: J Metaphors: n/a Enjoyment: J Overall: J took this one... Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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J: ya lines were stretched but you had betta vocab so fix ya structure..
T: betta structure nice verse overall... This was close but even though J's structure was kinda off, J had sum punches and was just swingin' like a mug... I didn't catch metaphors from either.. This was REALLY close but the opener of one person's caught my eyes.. my vote/ J Trooper.. not bad y'all keep workin' at this.. and check the link in my sig... LK diss aight, ~WUN~ |
Times structure and flow were a lot better than J's and J's lines were way over stretched. Times punches came harder and were far more personal than J's. J's verse did lack personals so some lines could of been pre-written.
Overall: Timeless for a generally better verse with better punches Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Pretty clear who won..
Time- good strong verse, had hard hittin punches, a nice rhyme scheme... i see you used some personals which hit hard and you worded them all very well...flow was on point throughout aswell and structure was good J - verse wasnt bad, some good wordplay used in the verse, but the punches just lacked they werent really hard hitting likes times were flow was ok, some lines were strecthed vote time |
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I kill kids like you for a living, i slightly gone mad r-kelly
Let's face it... MY on-net career's lookin up... ....and yours is lookin up to me Decent Punch..good to open up the verse 6/10 I smash you like mirrors with J's face cast your like a window in my rectum... coz you a Payne(pain) in my ass Wordplay was nice..pity some ov the herbs on dis site dont understand it..punch was ok 7/10 But I'm dropping you boy, like childs game of hot potato Cuz the dopest thing you ever formed... ...came outta a can of Play-Doh. mmm..wasnt feeling this so much..still ok though 6/10 your not religious? but you should now pray to jehova coz this panzie didnt have a chance tho... ...like sunday mornings with the mower!!! Decent Worplay again..punch connected well 7/10 Didnt wanna check for 12 lines? even more lines for his diss J your like armless kids at birthdays... ...you will never carry a gift!! Lol..decent punch..still could ov been put across better 6/10 Another mcee flattened as i quickly fly-by this battle is like rugby matchs won by kicks... ...because i didnt even try!!! Ok wordplay..not as dope as the others though was a pretty decent verse..worplay was decent.so was a flow and structure..a few punches could ov connected better sumtimes though IP: D135 D6AF They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic Flow was well of here..spoilt the punch big time 4/10 Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination Not really attacking time less..almost taking the piss outta ur self 4/10 Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted Wtf..really tempted to stop even reading this..weak punch 3/10 Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees flow off a bit again...ok punch though nout special..5/10 Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon naaa..not really attacking again no good 3/10 Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin nope..not really a punch at all again..weak..u need to attack timeless..i dont see that at all u went wrong in many ways..flow was off quite a bit..punches werent even attacking time..u seemed to be using the online dictionary too much..key to a battle is the throw punches and personals not rhyme about urself..did any who voted 4 j actually understand times word play..guess not..herbs! v.timeless |
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Timeless- you verse was nice....i enjoyed it n shit....but yo punches didnt seem to hit hard enough .....ya gotta work on yo punches....you had a good structure....and you had a decent flow...but not tha greastest....but you had no personals but you need some personals yo...umm but i didnt like the R.Kelly line ...that shit is just played out yo...but overall you did well.....
J Trooper- your verse was nice also ....but yo punches i thought were better then his...and they hit much harder too....you had a good flow i thought....you didnt really have much personals...but your structure sucked ......but overall you get my vote for better punches cuz they were better than Timeless's and they hit much harder... v/J Trooper.... |
I kill kids like you for a living, i slightly gone mad r-kelly
Let's face it... MY on-net career's lookin up... 2/10 ....and yours is lookin up to me I smash you like mirrors with J's face cast 3/10 coz you a Payne(pain) in my ass But I'm dropping you boy, like childs game of hot potato 5/10 Cuz the dopest thing you ever formed... ...came outta a can of Play-Doh. 4/10 your not religious? but you should now pray to jehova coz this panzie didnt have a chance tho... 7/10 Didnt wanna check for 12 lines? even more lines for his diss J your like armless kids at birthdays... ...you will never carry a gift!! Another mcee flattened as i quickly fly-by this battle is like rugby matchs won by kicks... ...because i didnt even try!!! these are all 3/10 |----------------------------| |..because i didnt even try!!! | |----------------------------| oh ok i just thought u sucked :D overall 3/10 J_trooper: They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic 8/10 Call me Arragent but my Perception is that neva have i witnessed any Competition Deadly Lyrical Ambushes touched Front lines.. Newbie of the year.. my Nomination 9/10 Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted 6/10 Please ya Verses you spittin to me come back.... with more holes than Swisscheese Witness how carefully "Silence Timeless" not Tanya Hardin but i will take off ya Knees 8/10 Logically u will "C'. thats its Impossible for Me 2 lose Squables especially since im Tellin Pussy Aroma from every bar Time has sent me ive been through more bars than a Felon 10/10 Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiverin 7/10 overall: 9/10 Vote: J_trooper Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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upppin 4 votes
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fuck this i already beat this herb....i cant belive ppl are actually voting for him...his verse sucked NO WERDPLAY...NO PUNCHES TO ME...NO PERSONALS...AND HIS STRUCTURE WAS SHIT!! fuck this!!!!!
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hmm this was a close battle it was got to both of yall
J- ur verse was ok ur lines were a lil stretched and ya punches were aiight and wordplay was good T- i liked ur verse the most because of the wordplay and the punches came harder the troopers's good battle to both of yall but Timeless got this Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
return the favour like u sed J and time can ya return it? me vs str8 hood
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wow where to begin timeless you were complety outmatched you need some serious elevation
I kill kids like you for a living, i slightly gone mad r-kelly Let's face it... MY on-net career's lookin up... ....and yours is lookin up to me what kind of opener is that?? he made no sense your not religious? but you should now pray to jehova coz this panzie didnt have a chance tho... who is jehova ?? you strecthed this out to make it rhyme thats pathetic Another mcee flattened as i quickly fly-by this battle is like rugby matchs won by kicks... ...because i didnt even try!!! yeah that last line sums it up you didnt try this was fucking pathetic timeless 1/10 only cause you took time to type They all ready pre-warned you that im deadly like one of a Twisted Televangalist Ya Heart.. is gettin Dissolved from Bars.. that resemble... ones from a Mechanic not bad could use work but much better than your opponets Look Timeless my rhyme is "This" that your Bitchless Murder Graphical Scriptures Vividly Paint my Pictures.10-0 "no mo"mr Time u will never Experience the Gifted thats a hot line nice shit Neva get the Second Chance to Take the Upper Hand from the rhymes im Deliverin Strictly Pride Tested Notice the Signature Basically like a seizure i will leave u Shiver nice closer could have been better but better than your opponets once again j_trooper 6/10 timeless you could have done better j_trooper just outmatched you this time vote j_trooper "Don't get it twisted when i rip sh*t , i kill sh*t no need to run that's just b*tch sh*t" |
Ok... Decent battle ya'll, kinda weak but a decent battle... I think J takes it tho with harder hittin punches...
Time- Nice verse, i wasn't really feelin ya struc, kinda threw me off... Some of ya punches was played tho, like the " pain in the ass " line, way wack... Some punches connected tho, and u had some decent personals, but you coulda came harder i think, wordplay was kinda missin... J- Decent verse from u too, i've seen u drop betta tho, but u had some nice punches in ya verse, and although ya lines was stretched, ya punches connected more than his, and you had an easier to follow flow so you get my vote... |
aight the vote goes to ma boy j trooper cuz i liked his punches and in my eyes punches win battles
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uppin lets get this last vote get this shit ova wit this bitch keep tellin the mod's like they gone save his soft ass sissy ass bitch
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Hot fuckin battle dawgs... Timeless... Way to go... Pretty nice punches... Good structure... Good Verse... Troop... Good punches... Structure could be better... But when it comes down to it, it comes down to punches...
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