jus read it n give feedback no hatin
 

ayt first of all if u catz really think i cant rhyme
than u muthafucka honestly lost yo mind
this aint da verse jus da intro
but seriously ya'll gotta b totally mental
when i drop sumtin give honest feedback not dickridaz on life support ok
oh let me put caps at da end of da words i have rhymin so u morons can actually see i can rhyme perfectly dumbasses ty :laugh:

i c these cats is SLEEPIN,dats y i b CREEPIN,lay low n only drop writins on da WEEKEND,plz wut these text artist THINKIN,only flow they got is piss when they LEAKIN,u textcees jus HATIN,cuz im WRITINnrhymes like a rap TITAN//
niggaz cryin cuz i say nigga when i WRITE,say i cant rhyme when i RECITE,niggaz jus mad cuz my rhymes b TIGHT,instagatin beef on da net tryin 2 get in virtual FIGHT,cryin like babies cuz drop it LIKE,fire when i scorch da MIC,got shortie shakin they asses LIKE,sean pauls give me da LIGHT,walk by fish n think of manipulation n say hey shortie how u doin 2NITE//
then i got EYEDENTDY,who mistaken me 4 sum1 elses IDENTITY,let my compition study my 16 cuz i show'em PITY,put they time is cuz i run dis CITY(RB),niggaz comin wit ass cuz they rhymes is SHITTY,shootin out blanks cuz they nuts is EMPTY,n im SIMPLY 1 dat dont give a fuck TEMPT ME//
u act TOUGH,n ROUGH on da net but its ur only actin,n its obvious chips
n a sandwich is da only things u PACKIN,hatin me cuz i got wut they LACKIN,
SLACKIN hard when it comes 2 RAPPIN,bitch slapped? baby bottoms da only thing u SLAPPIN,calm da fuck down b4 ur peeps as wtf jus HAPPENED,niggaz
instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN,YAPPIN like faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN//
b CAUTIOUS,cuz my rhymes r sick makin u NAUTIOUS,so explizit ur parents refuse 2 WATCH THIS,im comin takin ya records n plaques n all ya shiny WATCHES,HOMOPHOBICS,turn into HETEROPHOBICS while ridin each others CROTCHES,punches so hard niggaz swear i wrote ROCKETS,i plug rhythm n flow into these lyrical SOCKETS,got yo fav MC'S,FEMCEE'S wantin 2 ROCK THIS,i keep comin wit truth n bearin facts while u continue2b MONOTANOUS//
these NIGGAZ,aint pullin TRIGGAZ,n countin FIGURES,n so wut if im jus anotha 1 of da WIGGAZ,at least act myself n all i c is a bunch of wanna b JIGGAZ,comin wit WEAPON'S,but my smith n WESSON'S BIGGA,BITCH NIGGAZ,NIGGAZ dat BITCH,SWITCH stories once this things off my HIP,wit desert eagles fully EUIPPED,wit infra-red beams n SHIT,wit HOLLOW TIPS,fillin my CLIPS,NIGGAZ get PISSED,when they peep da canaries on my WRIST//
so i cant RHYME,yet poetry seem 2 flow constant through these LINES,hatin cuz u neva seen a style like MINE,da TIME has come 4 me 2 SHINE,commitin a lyrical CRIME,MIND stuck in da race of TIME,da 1 puttin life in ya RHYMES//
i BLESS,my gun when eva it COUGH,n blow ya face OFF god BLESS,niggaz when i send them 2 REST,dis lyrical warfare n im da REFF,n each writin's a TEST,n give u niggaz an a for EFFORT,claimin thug but couldnt clear a pop CONCERT but non the LESS,u rappers buggin me like foreign PEST//
ur rhymes lackin like bread w/o da BUTTER,im grimmy n straight out da GUTTER,dis pistol loves poppin so i guess u can say it STUTTERS,smoke muffles all those words u MUTTER,dreams of drivin a HUMMER,u'll see im hot like da weather in da SUMMER,ya'll my prey n im ya HUNTER,dont hate cuz im raps next STUNNER,u didnt make dawg jeez dats a BUMMER,i got more loafs(stacks) of bread than WONDER,wit punchlines dat strick like THUNDER//
metophors dat cause rapper meno-PAUSE,put da track on PAUSE,when dis mic smacks ur JAWS,my words cut paper like hack SAWS,givin mic's a gift like i was santa CLAUS,im hot like tabasco SAUCE,leave ur death w/o a CAUSE//
im goin INSANE,these smileys 2 my right r laughin at me wuts wrong wit my BRAIN,is my mind playin tricks on me is dis GAME,n these voices i try 2 make'em out but they sound all da SAME,i guess i got my pops 2 BLAME,nigga so pussy he attacks handicap DAMES,dis rap was writin 2 prove i RHYME,FINE
when i rap 2 u LAMES,if i say nigga dont get mad its meanin friend in SLANG,pissed off bullets hit yo mug wit dead AIM,leavin holes i ya BRAIN like SPONGES,wit bass on my tracks dat bring doors off they HINDGES//
attackin da mic wit disorderly FITS,when it helled tight in my FIST,been here 2 weeks n already got a hit LIST,clowns cryin n throwin MISFITS,got PUNCHES,dat leave SCRATCHES on yo LIPS,yo rhymes r ill but not cuz they sick but cuz they growin CIST,i continue 2 rain on tracks cuz my words r MIST,all these fake thug speakin out they ass cuz all i hear is SHIT,all dis dick ridin n hatin is makin me PISSEDbut ima continue droppin these HITS//
fuck it if ya'll aint feelin ME,im a wigga so wut i say it WILLINGLY,n im continue 2 ACT,they way i do in life n when i RAP until my life lines go from
WIGGLY 2 STRAIGHT,until than i got 1 eye open til my dyin WAKE,cuz lotta rappers STRAY,like they thugs but really FAKES,i can see through da lines but all i see is SNAKES,get real u niggaz aint cookin coke ur bakin CAKES

sry yea i kno may sound a bit off but at least u fuckin morons who on here sayin i dont rhyme when i post my flows can see i rhyme perfectly fine peace out B.A.M. 4 life holla back rb honest feed back :laugh: :thumbup: :hump:

ayt people i knos dis shit long as fuck but if u got time 2 read it u got time 2 drop um feedback give me wut u think honest opinion c'mon dont get typer's cramp now uppin
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^
thank you

ayt rb quit actin like da 50% of u dats stay on her for long periods of time durin da evenin n read people shit dat u aint got time 2 drop feedback y u people so fuckin lazy shit not on jus mine but otha pees verses n drops u fuckers act like u aint got da time of day 2 fuckin leavin ur opinion quit bein lazy n leave feed back peace out
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^uppin uppin uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Yo dat shit was real cuz. So I ain't gonna knoc none of dat shit. Keep doin yo thing cuz

ayt 17 peeps have viewed dis n only 1 besides myself uppin it has replied means dat bout 15 of u othas must b so fuckin busy in ur lives u cant drop a 3 sentence feedback jesus christ u people r damn lazy i swear drop suim fuckin feedback no hatin FEEDBACK shit act like it hurt u 2 leave a reply quit bein wimp n write i wanna kno wut u people honestly think n as i said no hatin or dick ridin pece uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^

yo this shit is tight man too long but i still like it

lmmao hince y i said long ass free write..i wrote since so many muthafuckas on here say i dont rhyme when i write so i wrote it wit all da rhyme words in caps...lol

aight who said that

buncha peeps...check out my battles (eyedentdy n my manipulation battle plus sum of my post on here in open mic people r blind or sumtin...lol

it took me days to finish reading it...........but boo u know what i honestly think?....thats it was............................................... .................................................. .................................................. ........................................TIGHT!!!.. .lol...........yeah u ve ry good nothingelse to say..love ya

thanx for da love from all luv ya 2 ma holla back mo feedback uppin c'mon people tell me wut u think damn

Damn...re-structure.
 

i c these cats is SLEEPIN,
dats y i b CREEPIN,
lay low n only drop writins on da WEEKEND,plz wut these text artist THINKIN
,only flow they got is piss when they LEAKIN
,u textcees jus HATIN
,cuz im WRITIN
niggaz cryin cuz i say nigga when i WRITE
,say i cant rhyme when i RECITE
,niggaz jus mad cuz my rhymes b TIGHT
,instagatin beef on da net tryin 2 get in virtual FIGHT
,cryin like babies cuz drop it LIKE
,fire when i scorch da MIC
C,got shortie shakin they asses LIKE
,sean pauls give me da LIGHT,walk by fish n think of manipulation n say hey shortie how u doin 2NITE


I AIGHT GONNA BOTHER WIT THE REST......^^^^^^^
u gotta make ur lines ryme at the end.not in the middle,
its called structure...fix it...
no hate..advice

if u look i do rhyme words in da end its my style dont hate it i mis punches,rhyme,multi's,metaphors,see i kno how 2 link my rhymes u kno i flow fast when i spit cant u undastand dat manipulation?

wen peeps read ur shit,they read it line by line.
so the way u structure it..makes it not rhyme
wen i read ur verse..it jus looks like multis...

if it was audio then it dnt matter..it wud rhyme
but this is txt...and it looks like it dnt rhyme.
fix ya structure,n u will get beta.

r u peeps dat blind or jus dat lazy 2 read a whole rhyme?...i aint tryin 2 tlk shit but yo re-read my post but read da whole damn thing i kno u can do it it cant take dat much time outta ya busy scedule i rhyme every time wit words in da beginin,middle,n end
pm^from raw killa...


dawg..im not tryna beef,im tryna help.u aint listening,
rhymin words at the begining n middle r multies....
RHYME AT THE END OF UR LINES.....
IM NOT GONNA READ UR WHOLE VERSE COZ ITS THE SAME...
ITS NOT VERY ENTERTAINING TO READ 100 LINES OF WACK STRUCTURE...
FUKIN FIX IT...HOW HARD IS IT TO UNDERSTAND THAT?

UNTILL U DO ITS WACK.SIMPLE AS.

u act TOUGH,n ROUGH on da net but its ur only ACTIN,n its obvious chips n
a sandwich is da only things u PACKIN,hatin me cuz i got wut they LACKIN,SLACKIN hard when it
comes 2 RAPPIN,bitch slapped? baby bottoms da only thing u SLAPPIN,calm da fuck down b4 ur peeps
as wtf jus HAPPENED,niggaz instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN,YAPPIN like
faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN

ayt here's a run down...
see dis line?

i started rhymin wit tough n rough ok u wit me?
than i used it n wit da line i started rhymin wit actin n packin still wit me?
this is called a multi yes i use a lot of them but aint shit wrong wit it.
y u cant admit yea i got skillz r u that gased up bou tur own u gotta hate?
i dont want beef i jus wanna do my thing n move on so dead dis shit admit im rite n move on 2 ayt?

fuks sake.4th time.....rough/tough.........multi....yes
same goes wit all ur lines.u got multies yes....
NO THERES NOTHIN WRONG WIT MULTIES.THERE GUD.YES

see this........doesnt rhymeas wtf jus HAPPENED,niggaz instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN,YAPPIN like
faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN

see this does.
,niggaz instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN/
faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN

if u dnt get it go away.......ur annoyin me wit ur wackness now.

show ur style up quicker than an ethiopian chasing a BREAD VAN
only time you seen DELIVERY....is walking past your MILK MAN
already k.o`d ya ass 5-0..,if ur rhymes is aids they still WUDNT-KILL
i capture ya,keep u n kill,hit harder than an x-pill,on CYPRESS-HILL
^^^diss me back.faggot.u cnt n that was weak.lmfao

how blind r u? u wear contacts or glasses? which is it u aint helpin no 1 makin fun of how they use da english launguage in writin read da shit wit both eyes open i rhyme through da whole fuckin verse i kno how 2 write music been dojn da shit 4 fuckin 5 yrs goin on 6 i write rhyme words in da beginin,middle,n end r u dat blonde? cmon obviously u jeolous of skill or sumtin cuz ive got hataz who hate in me jus cuz im white n say nigga n niggaz in my rhymes then u there plenty peeps i kno who say im dope,tight,nice,etc.. so on n so on y cant u jus admit it i dont suck period n when im ready ima prove it 2 u in our next battle where you'll wish u neva crossed me on a bad day or a good 1 peace othas on thanx 4 da love holla

000000000.0 out of ten these dickriders sayin its sweet but its not bitch if you dont like what i wrote fuck ya bicth call me out and get merked bitch sq hoe

wot can i say................u dnt take advice........so continue being wack......
its a shame dawg

bitch i take advice when it real n not hatin da line u jus wrote structure is jus how mine is in all my shit bitch u da 1 need 2 grow up dont b mad cuz u a fake ass femcee whho neva made it u comin on here desperate seriously battlin every1 n tlkn like u da bitch of da litter hoe u dont kno me so quit fuckin judgin n hatin i listen 2 ur advice i kno i gotta work on structure a bit oth than dat u kno im nice fuckin a

I'ma have to go ahead n' agree with Manipulation.. Beside it being longer than the fuckin' bible, it wasn't bad.. You've got nice potential, but your structure is horrible.. You may disagree, but the fact is, people find that type of structure extremely boring to read.. I really do reccomend fixin' that up..Also try gettin' a little more complex.. 90% of that flow was incredibly basic.. Toss a few more less played metas in there.. Work on some wordplay.. you'll be droppin flames in no time.. stay up dawg, keep doin' ya thing..

one~

thank u strype now see manipulation dat is tru advie n feedback not da hatin u keep postin 1 luv nigga peace ill work wit it

OMG.this was the best i think you have ever did it had so much power, that when ya say it to yourslef you can feel that good ass flow, it rhymes the perfect way and has so much bulit force in it.it inpak me so much.its a little long but its good,and manipulation,you just a sour loser .why say ya ain't hatin when u know deep down inside you want say good job ,keep it up.good stuff raw.

thanx 4 da respect n love angela see manip admit it like i said n been sayin y u hatin i mean its like u like me or sumtin lmmao only few hataz on here at me
u cuz u so full of ur self manip n those cuz i say nigga n niggaz in my lyrics otha than all i been hearin is good shit bout my flow's like when i was postin at www.rapcheck.com sum u peeps straight sleepin on a whitie quick 2 judge cuz my skin color when ya'll dont kno me 4 shit now dat keepin it gangsta :laugh: :thefinger :thumbup: :banghead: