Tha Q vs Triple_N
 

Topic: Someone breaks into your house. Talk about what happens.
Battle Rules:

20 line MX
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 08-04-04 at 11:47 AM

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Tha Q has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-01-04 11:47 AM.

Triple_N has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-01-04 11:50 AM.

It was 11:48..I was in bed with this chick..
I was watching a flick..while she was slobbin' my dick..
Then, I heard a window burst..sounded close to the kitchen..
"Oh my God, what was that!?!".."Hol up broad, stop trippin"..
Quickly I leaped from the bed..grabbed my gat but I was shook..
"You wait here for one minute while I go downstairs to look"..
I tried to tip-toe real slick..but the steps started squeakin'..
Then, half-way down the stairs..I heard noise where the kitchen sink is..
I couldn't believe it..I cocked my .38 and pointed straight..
When I got to the bottom..I saw a shadow across the drapes..
My heart raced like fast-forward tape..my breath had its own rhythm..
As I edge around the corner..I wondered if I could even hit him..
"Who's there? Come out now."..I tried to give this dude a warning..
But, I heard not a peep..like this creep was tryin' to ignore me..
Slowly, I inched closer to the door..I heard a pot hit the floor..
"Oh my Lord", the chic screamed out the door..but I pressed on..
I stood an inch away from the room..ready to burst in an shoot..
Then I thought, maybe I should just fire a warning shot into the roof..
I decided against it..then built up courage to face this Jack..
When I finally turned the corner..I saw that it was a stray cat..

I burst out laughing...


THE END

Suddenly awakened by sound of breaking glass
Shakin', adrenaline starts pumpin' real fast
"What was dat" I asked, brother looked deshoveled
Stepped into hall to my mother lookin' equally puzzled
Askin' same question as me, Shit!! I gotta think
I know either we are being robbed or all need shrinks
"SHHH!!! ma' quiet down" I said and grabbed my bat
Didn't know what broke window, but its head I was gon crack
Tipped toed down steps, got my head on the swivel
Glass on the floor still no answer to riddle
Then I notice something movin' with my peripheral
My biggest fear went from suspicion to literal
Out popped a masked man, I instintively swung
Saw a flash, then fell and felt a pain in my belly that stung
Looked down, my T shirt's red, I thought I was dead
But he didn't finish me, jus ran out as I bleed
Mother ran down steps, " OMG!!!!" she screamed
Death for me was inevitable it seemed
Blacked out, woke up to bright lights, I was thru
Nope jus celing lights in hospital, next time I'd be packin too

This was feedback posted for Triple_N
 

I gotta say he won this battle ebcause i think his just was more like reality...i just like it nice overall

hmmm
 

^^why drop feedback if it isn't adequate or elaborate?


And, no, you can not have my money. Damn Vultures!


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Voted For: Tha Q

Q- Was Feelin Yours, Made Me Laugh At The End When It Was A Cat, Good Discriptions, Flowed Good, And Was Easy To Vision....

Triple N- Was Also Feelin Yours, The Endin Made Me Laugh Aswell, I Liked Q's Better, He Was More Discriptive And Made It Easier To Vision, Your Flow Was Good Too, But Overal I Liked The Q's Better...

Final Vote - The Q....

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Voted For: Tha Q

Tha Q wins this battle in my opinion.The topic is average and both emcees made good spits.Why Tha Q wins is cause of this:He had pretty elementary rhyming pattern but the way he phrased everything and I liked the ending about it just being a stray cat.He also had quite a bit of dialogue in his conpared to about 2 lines of speaking in Triple N's.Triple had pretty good flow but his structure wasnt the greatest.Triple had better punches but there was only 2 or 3 in the whole verse.So thats why I think Tha Q wins.

^^ word...preciate the honesty bro


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yo ima give this one to triple n by a mila meter,
q shit was hot wit the ending props son...but n had me at the ending too..
wordplay and everyhthing was fire for both yall..structure good..metas all on point...storyies was both tight..but i give it to triple n

This was feedback posted for Triple_N
 

damn this was a good battle both good flow both epually good storys both ill drops q gets it cuz he won in the only area they didnt evenly match in vocab and q took that

ive already posted my vote i forgot to poll it though

^^ well...two votes that didn't register


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Voted For: Triple_N

damn this was hard both were nice...

both had good story lines
imagery has a tie too
it was pretty much close the only thing it comes down
to is which one i like more

Q- nice story, vocab could of been better , but you
still had nice imagery, had me reading the whole way

Triple- agian another nice story and yours also had me
reading all the way nice imagery better vocab

this is close by triple n edged this

v/triple n

Voted For: Tha Q

i liked this verse way better... vote q.....the imagry the characters thought process and the end was all good...the end show mass creativity...big up to both yall but unfourtunatly somebody gotta lose vote/ tha q

Voted For: Triple_N

ok triple urs was more realistic lol
q work on vocab triple had better vocab but im givin it to triple for a more realistic verse ya feel me no hate thouhg both had gret flow triple wprk on the structure dawg besides that it was a great verse

Voted For: Triple_N

i think ya verse was betta becuz ya had betta creatitivy..dont get me wrong both verse was creative but i think yours was more realistic to me........triple n had betta wordplay too.......dats why triple n gets my vote

if i could vote i would.......... but both yall did ur things.......... hey and spread the love man to my battle.....

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Voted For: Triple_N

damn nice shit,but this is one sided

the-q ur verse was ok,i mean there was ok imagery ,no emotion at all in my opinion it was wasnt a good read without emotion sorry elevate

triple-n ur vers was pretty nice man u had nice complexity and metaphors,the imagery seemed okay,and u had quite good emotion in this,good job u get my vote

v/triple n

^^^ LMAO @ these "votes"...no emotion? hahaaa

ok kiddo...


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Voted For: Triple_N

dayum

triple N: that was a short structure but your verse was ILL...dayum..your very creative with that shit...your vocab was ill..your imaginary..i culd picture every last word.....your flow was great too..this was a great verse from you...keep it up..

tha q your shit was sick too.......but u lakced great vocab and wordplay..and sum things i culdnt picture..and the beginning i was like..wtf lol..and if u saw the shadow of the kat..how the hell did it look like a person to u....see a giant cat's shadow...dont look like no human too me lol

vote triple N

rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=138871