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5MICMEDALLION 08-03-04 03:21 AM

moderators hating an shit
 
fuck you mask for life bitch!!!!,
You will never amount to shit,,bitch made nigga!!! :gfy:
you get a little moderator job,,and think you can tell me what the fuck to do,,,I think some one is on a power trip :nono:
I want all my shit of of this site,,now!!!!!! :cussing:

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Wrote by:5micmedallion

5MICMEDALLION 08-03-04 03:58 AM

I guess I want get any feed back,,,,daum people wheres the love....1

Introspect. 08-03-04 04:10 AM

it was aight

5MICMEDALLION 08-03-04 04:22 AM

Thanks but I feel it was more then aight,,how about creative,,
and even the structure was well done,,Making it easy to read,
Not to mention the whole story made since while rhyming at the same time,
Not to mention,,I created the whole story from nothing to something,,
That has to count for something,,but I cant knock the way you feel,
but you could have atleast pointed out what you felt wasnt all that good,
After that is done,, Then I will understand what you meant.
Your thoughts are always welcome,,but I believe its more then what you said
no disrespect intended,just the way I feel...God bless all...1

Introspect. 08-03-04 04:34 AM

^^^lol w/e u say

raw killa 08-06-04 02:40 AM

virtue u wigga u put a bad name on white people like me nigga u a bitch u keep try 2 call me out yet u dont do nuttin quit hatin every1 we tired of seein ur periods...period
fuck dis hata nice drop peace

Introspect. 08-06-04 02:47 AM

fuck you and if your white stop sayin tha n word ...................nuff said bitch

raw killa 08-06-04 03:49 AM

nigga i can say w/e da fuck i want u dont kno me wigga i kno u wite so u aint got room 2 tell me wut 2 say u pussy u keep callin me out but when i answer lets go u back down like a goddamn coward n oh by da way virtue....xxxtayve is my g/f so if u wanna challenge her 2 a battle n her crew u gotta get through me first holla @ perdue u fuckin chicken peace

Introspect. 08-06-04 03:51 AM

rofl omfg your girl rofl your gay so i know thats a lie and me duckin you rofl u just a herb man i aint got tha time to battle u maybe one day when u become atleast wack cause rite now your below wack nuff said

raw killa 08-06-04 04:03 AM

wigga quit hatin bitch u wish u was betta than me dats y u always poppin shit cuz u smell compition n i smell pussy like g-unit u fuckin punk get a life n grow up

Introspect. 08-06-04 04:12 AM

rofl u betta than me u one of tha worst thats come along this site seriously man your gased up cocky fa real but your WACK best belive

EmerginMc07 08-06-04 04:34 AM

man virtue dawg jus quit da shit man, u act like ppl actually listen to wat da fuck u say man u aint shit on dis website but a wana b fukin thug, dawg grow up get a lil brava den mayb u can make it on dis site, but ne way. uh 5mic i like yo shit man keep postin n ill keep replyin hit my shit up iite dawg 1 love

Introspect. 08-06-04 04:36 AM

lol herb they should bann yall for droppin wack fuckin open mics best belive

Mc DeaTh. 08-06-04 04:56 AM

yo man Virtue n Raw w/e take yo shit outta here this is 5mic's thread

yea it was good nice story to easy to read
goof stuff keep it up

Introspect. 08-06-04 05:08 AM

they do it in every1' elses thread so i can to plus i' told him what i thought of it so mc death quit tha big talk

DV8 08-06-04 08:55 PM

virtue...wtf....^^...go battle or something ya last 150 posts consist of..you suck...this is wack.....structure was off...you never explain shit..i aint hatin on you but seriously some constructive critisism would go a long way....go get laid dawg...

(INTRODUCTION)
Some times in life,,,we all have a problem's we dont start.
but if you have faith,,God will see you through it.
Follow me on this one...and lets spread the love...

(VERSE)

Im cruising down the high way,,Looking out the window.
Just getting off work,,Life sure went fast when I was little.
^^ nice intro...good rhymin..
Stopping at the light
A man walks by holding some pipes..
And then the other guy screams...
Move your ass aight!
I could see the pain in his face,,He really wanted to quit,
but he got a family to support,,So he couldn't do shit.
^^good point dawg.......
Education puts us all in a place where we cant follow.
It's like Jesus in the sky,,we got to wait till tomorrow,
In order to earn our keep to sit on the thrown
^^could've rhymed better ta keep the flow....
Nothing comes easy,,Thats why we got to work
and sweat hard for the pieces.
Life is Jesus.
The light turn's green,,,I pull off and greet him.
Going down the road,,,
I see some body having problem's breathing.
It wasn't asthma attack
he just robbed some body,,and put a knife in there back
and now he wondering why his life like that.
The cop's catches up,,and slams him on the ice like pack's
Im speeding up on the gas,,just to get away from this trash!
^^^nie imagery..cool story so far..
Making a dash down the high way!,,Two miles later.
Remembering what my momma taught
and that respect is the greatest.
^^haha...2 true..
Some times I have to think back
To keep my heart beat tapping,,To get away from the madness.
Just so i can be happy,,IM over whelmed by the sadness.
And crying tears of joy, Is no longer.
all I need is strength,,So I can be stronger.
^^losing the story line a bit...
Im feeling like my chest has gone flat.
It's kind of like,, hell on earth
Because all i've seen is my people getting hurt.

^^^good return..
Im roling up my window's now,,because the rain begain to fall.
The winds is blowing hard,,Now every body trying to get home.
My wife called on the cell phone.
baby where you at!,,Screaming in panic!
I told her it's gone be a good minute.
^^^rhyme scheme was a bit off....
The signal is lost and it wasn't safe,,to talk on the phone.
The rain begain to fall harder
And I couldn't see to move on.

I slowed down on the gas,,and pressed lighty on the brakes,
but any harder,, would've made me slide like ice skates!
^^nice
The car behind me blowing his horn,,Trying to get pass me!
Sticking his fingers out the wind,,Only trying to be nasty!
^^lol
Throwing a bottle at the car behind him.
He doesn't give a fuck about nobody els!
but then,,,thats when trouble finds him!

The man gets up out of his ride,,and he said...
Look at the dent you put in my car!
Then walks up and blows a hole in his head!
^^structures fallin apart cause of the middle line...
I sat back in my ride,,,Like i didn't see shit!
He walked up and peeped me,,and said..
Yo hommie,,,This is now our secret,, I frowned in agreement
Praying that he wouldn't shoot me
The rain was so thick,,,I really couldn't see his face trully!
^^^this was really good...
He opens his door and get's back in his ride
Then hits hit's reverse!
If it wasn't for the rain,,,I know I would've got hurt!
^^koo
but since he new I didn't see his face
he put the pump away,,Sweat running down my sleeves.
And I had my gun on my seat,,The rain was to thick to see!
But since he didn't shoot me,,
The threat alone was enough for me to pull out my golden oozie,,!
God had to choose me,,because the devil didn't win
I could have been a dead man, with my gun in my hands!
I was born a thug,,but God redirected my plans,,an showed me how to love
An thats how im learning to stand

^^ a bit mixed but it was ok
I got out my car,,an fell down on my knee's,,Started to pray.
The power of faith,,God came in an saved me today,If I was to say,
That It wasnt so,,,Then im a lier,,God came an took me from the streets,,
an saved me from the fire

^^structure again dawg......
The sun begain to come out
I called my wife on the phone
She cried,,after I told her what hapened,,,And said to come home.
My son is in the back ground screaming
Momma wheres dad at,,and droped his soda
She held him and said..The storm is over

^^^nice story....good plot...keep it up dawg jus try n fix what i mentioned...pc

5MICMEDALLION 08-07-04 12:05 AM

Thanks thats all I ever asked 4,,,is honesty,,,
BUT I GOT SOMETHING FOR THOSE HATERS,,I'LL BE RIGHT BACK,
ITS CALLED THE TRUTH ABOUT HATERS,,,ALONE WITH OTHER THINGS I ADDED TO IT MAKING IT A PRETTY GOOD POINT,,,,THE TRUTH IS ALL I KNOW...GOD BLESS THOSE WHO SUPPORT TRUTH AND HONESTY,,,,1 LUV

DV8 08-07-04 01:02 AM

1~uppin This Shit.........4 Honest Feedback

5MICMEDALLION 08-15-04 09:49 PM

Hey mask I noticed you really like my work,,,because its still on the site bitch,!!,,
An if you can see I dont give a fuck,!!,,I want my flows OFF OF THIS GOT DAUM SITE,,,AND I WANT IT DONE NOW ,,,,SINCE YOUR GOD AN ALL
YOUR A little ass kid still at home in your room with picture of scooby doo on your wall...
AN yet your trying to be a man,,,,please dont make me laugh bitch,,,LMAO
Go find a sand box to play in boy

The Militant 08-16-04 03:56 AM

aight

YuNg_GuN 08-16-04 09:12 AM

i was feelin it cuz he is a ha ha

5MICMEDALLION 08-16-04 06:59 PM

An what the fuck do you mean ha ha!!!!!!,
Im on the Got daum war path!!!,
And im not in the mood for bitches talking shit,
out the side of there muthafuckin lips!!

5MICMEDALLION 08-17-04 12:47 PM

Yo my bad,,,,I just got somany muthafuckas hating on me,,,then a moderator acting as if he's a God,,
Im talking bout that fucking mask in open mic.

Yo again im sorry for getting out of line my brother,,,Im just trying to get at the right ones,,
god bless all,,,,1 :thumbup:


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