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verse 1
theres something inside in me thats gon pull beneath the surface
i'm resuming confusing
i'm afraid it might go to far to a point where i got no fuckin choice
its creepy and i'm sleepy
its like self consious that i can not fuckin control and might lose
reacting is distracting
theres comfort in you but even in 1000 chances in me never
i'm insecure and and no cure
yo i'm so dark hearted and lookin through the mutha fuckin window imaginin your there
but why the fuck should i care you dont even notice me and totally ignore me
the darkness is holdin me to tightly and cant get loose
i may get loose but really im never fuckin loose
you the light and i'm the mutha fuckin switch
cant you see that i luv you and dont think your a bitch
i cant see it right through you why cant you do the same
you can see right through me but cant you not do the same
i'm so sick and tired of asking myself the same question
its gon get to a fuckin point to where you gon get obstruction
your the one whos haunting me and your not goin away
all day you stay in me and dont go away
but theres a part i do like that i'm a mutha fuckin memory
i dont wanna be mutha fuckin enemy and afraid of me
you can trust me and not fear me to where i stalk you
mutha fuckas that call me a stalker i'm gonna sock you
i cant find myself and i'm losen more and i know you have it
you have all the pieces of me and i'm a puzzle that needs fixin
i look in the mirror and see and hate my own reflection
its ditraction cuz i went in the fuckin wrong direction
so i have you in me and dont want you to leave

chorus x2
do you luv me like i luv you
do you need me like i need you
do you want me like i want you
i dont hate you do you hate me
girl your bueaty is makin me shAKY

this song is yet again about idyllic queen i'm no fuckin stalker

damn alot of emotions involved in on this song..i thought u meant audio song when u told me to peep but chorus could be better and longer and i cant knock the verse as a whole since your emotions were stirred tightly into this piece..but a little bit of advice..

any broad online shouldnt make this much of a difference to you ..trust me..not worth it..find a girl from school or in your neighborhood to write a song about ..write a song bout ya moms u know?? BUT one again it was decent.. rhyme fell off some parts but the content of it is what is most important and u displayed a character of sensitivity..

Your flows cool

i'm sensittive.
i tell you all now cuz i went through a lot of drama when i was small.
i never even knew my real mom

thanx for the feed back and advice idh

thanx done

Yo flow was tight...Just to much personality about your life so just write about someone you know!!! Not someone on here this website.Aight!

thanx crazed shy

yo ppl leave some feed back

this was wack nuff said

nigga virtue mad cuz we aint wit him i see dat y u bitchin especially 2 me ive seen da thread u bitch n e ways good frop nigga i feel ya holla back homie B.A.M 4 life fuck these hatin niggaz peace out n 1 luv

thanx raw killa fuck you virtue

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nice drop, u had a lotta emotion in it. good luck wit her.
peace

A great emcee speaks from the heart and translate their emotion through rhyme. I agree w/ these other cats - you veered off a little but the emotion was there and the content was clear. Keep writing from the heart!

One

thanx ya'll appriteate all the helpful feed back

yo Ruff that shit was tite son, man i felt u on dat 1, it was good, u put yo self out there n u described wat u was feelin, but Fuck Virtue he jus tryin to make himslef look hard dawg, but nice drop

thanx emergin you are not that bad peace much luv for ya'll

yo peep my new collabo wit Raw Killa on open mic, yea keep postin

i did and it was crap naw jus playin it was fya and it gaVE me some inspiration to write wit idyllic queen
peace much luv

If stuff comes from ya heart, its always nice, great drop...(and good luck boi ;) )

thanx gal good luck to you too

c'mon ppl view this song

view this shit damn

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When i read the first bar...i thought Linkin Park- Crawling!..any one agree..there defiently some lyrics in here that are rather "similar" not saying its been bitting coz he hasnt...but damn when u actually sing these words to crawling u can straight away notice it, anyway...I assume your pretty much in your "learning process" of writing songs..the rhyme scheme is ok but wasnt impressive..opens mics are supposed to be emotional pieces keeping me glued to the screen..unfortunatly this did not!..its always nice to see rappers express these emotion though you have the basic idea.just need to be alot more dercriptive and emotional...seeing as you like idyllic queen so much i suggest you read her pieces..you learn quite alot from her alone..expand your vocab..use some wordplay..i often wright about personal experiences because you have felt that emotion within which fuels the fire and give you inspiration..kinda like what eminem does!...anywayz keep wrighting..peep other pplz drops aswell see how you can improve! i hope you will find my comments useful

YO fuck this Coward, man... I thought it was tight, anything that comes from the Heart, its real man, Dont let this Fake ass Bitches, try and break yah down... I liked it man, Should get that on audio, did you write it to a beat??


Hey Virtue, wanna battle you Punk bitch, Come up in peeps threads, and try and break em down, !!!!lol... hahahah, I ant never seen any of your shit up in here, What bitch.. !!

i kinda got the idea of that linkin park part but i didnt steal nuthin shit but i guess i shoulda used a different idea.

yeah virtue you little bitch battle him you little pussy.