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D-ICED 08-04-04 05:05 PM

caliph vs For$aken
 
Battle Rules:

Topical-Topic is Hip-Hop
20- Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No recycling
No posting after peoples votes commenting on what they said

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-04-04 at 05:35 PM

Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in.

System 08-04-04 05:06 PM

For$akeN has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-04 05:06 PM.

System 08-04-04 05:07 PM

caliph has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-04 05:07 PM.

D-ICED 08-04-04 05:28 PM

Whore
This is a verse about Hip-Hop so try to follow along


I used to love you but things in time have happened
You flipped on me now you all about money and platinum
sex and money and really its funny/How you fell for dudes like Nelly and Puffy/Went to the west for a minute
They took ya hood culture and made it a bussiness
The south fell for they gimmics Nas said it was written
U used to love a man who came from the heart
but that was way back when we used to chill in the parks
You was a work of art/ beautiful creative and shit
You was a wonderful sista the money made you a bitch
gave them a way out with ya wealth/nowya acting way outta they self/and not for the better/ everybody popping they metal/Got a ice rocked bezzle and a drop for the hot weather
Nobody seems to have a day when they struggled
but everybody rich porter and gots a million ways to hustle
You was a good women used to be the voice of the people
But you chose money over truth ya choices was evil
Its me to save you cuz i know how it was when they made you
I hate you but i love you more
and its fucked up cuz im in love with a whore

D-ICED 08-04-04 05:30 PM

whats taking so long this is the easiest thing to write about drop already well i guess you aint in no rush to get merked

For$akeN 08-04-04 05:35 PM


whats your problem^ waiting for me to drop so you can
match it????????????


hip-hop! over the years it's been contaminated with false facts
practically telling us physical abuse is the way to stay on track
the form of music is blamed for domestic violence and allegations
istening to the genre get's you stereotyped with cruel expectations
hip-hop! lyrically infestation came when the legends passed away
money is for expensive things and bling? is that how its portrayed
less serious matter can no longer express ourselves through the form
through it's entire history it changes shape and slowly transforms
to something we would never in our lives believe it could be true
hip-hop! is out of our grasps not in our hold its not in subdue
the music is our right to have but it's been taken away from us
we hear people cussing and the matter is not worth discussing
We all promised to be true to it we even went under a great oath
it only went downhill and hasn't elevated there has been no growth
fake gangsters, italian mobsters also false statements and lies
in ten years I can see it basically in the state on it's demise
but in our hearts and souls it has never lost its really destiny
and thanks to Mr.Kweli and the other its been better multiply
true lyricists taught us to be true and to speak our minds
think of it long then the real essense of it won't be hard to find

For$akeN 08-04-04 05:36 PM

blah this gimp no time to even edit it I smelled words wrong.....

For$akeN 08-04-04 05:57 PM

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For$akeN 08-04-04 08:32 PM

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Ill-Grammatix 08-04-04 09:15 PM

Voted For: caliph

damn... this was some good shyt... both verses were good but i gotta go with caliph on this one... the imagery in his rhyme was on point... it kinda reminded me of the joint Common did (I Used To Love H.E.R.)... caliph's flow and structure was also a little better.

There were a few mis steps in forsaken's joint but the ideas were there and easy to catch on to... like when you rhymed multply and destiny... little things like that steals from your shine... there were a couple of lines that kinda confused me on first read but after re-reading it I got the point... good topical battle y'all but I gotta ride w/ Caliph

Keith Moon 08-04-04 09:18 PM

Voted For: For$akeN

im voting for for$ake

Claiph-topical...wasnt that good didnt show emotion or anything not even a decent story....your sstructure and flow was off....but practice and eventually youll elevate

For-nice piece, nice vocab/structure.........okish flow....nice storyline......tells the true heart of hip-hop not gnagsters and stuff but lyricism....I also coaught a Don diss lol....

v/For$aken

Maki 08-04-04 09:18 PM

Voted For: For$akeN

this ain't a hater on caliph vote, its jus that with the topic bein bout hip-hop an not how hip-hop changes a women, forsaken wins cause she kept on topic

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Keith Moon 08-04-04 09:20 PM

**alos on claiph's verse he tlaked about a woman not hip-hop....unless he was callin rap a whore which doesnt make sense.......along with rap loving p.diddy...If rap could love itd be Canibus's baby momma

Ill-Grammatix 08-04-04 09:21 PM

You guys are pretty simple-minded sometimes... he wasn't saying hip-hop changes a woman... he was veiwing hip-hop AS a woman... re-read it and maybe you'll understand... open ya minds a little... he was on topic the whole time.

One.

Maki 08-04-04 09:31 PM

well no the topics hip-hop, not a clever entwine on our personal love turned twisted relationship with it, the tops whats hip-hop as actual factual genre, not a fake fuck buddy

D-ICED 08-04-04 10:23 PM

anyways for others who are not drs or haters my topic is on hip-hop but i guess little kids cant understand it so im upping for honest intelligent voters

For$akeN 08-04-04 11:04 PM

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For$akeN 08-05-04 12:44 AM

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D-ICED 08-05-04 01:40 AM

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D-ICED 08-05-04 02:57 PM

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For$akeN 08-05-04 03:29 PM

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For$akeN 08-05-04 06:41 PM

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For$akeN 08-06-04 12:52 AM

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D-ICED 08-06-04 03:55 AM

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For$akeN 08-06-04 09:08 PM

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Ill-Grammatix 08-06-04 10:06 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Maki
well no the topics hip-hop, not a clever entwine on our personal love turned twisted relationship with it, the tops whats hip-hop as actual factual genre, not a fake fuck buddy


Again... he talked about hip-hop the entire time... think outside the box... it's called imagination... if ya use that maybe you can see a grownup veiw of how hip-hop is seen to people who live it and not just do it as a hobby.

D-ICED 08-06-04 11:48 PM

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M-Eazy 08-07-04 01:17 AM

This was feedback posted for caliph
 
lol...just wanted to see how my fellow crew member is doing in this battle...i aint voted for no one, or feedn bac, so dont bitch

FlowIntelligent. 08-07-04 03:58 AM

Voted For: For$akeN

i was really feeling your verse forsaken i was surprised i didnt think you was this good in topicals...the vocab was sick good wordplay and structure everything was intact...and flowed together well...wasnt much imagery but everything else made up for it you wrote about the topic and didnt write a story for the topic thats what i like.....

claiph your structure was choppy flow was a lil off track but besides that you had a decent drop also you stayed on topic most of the way through...you more of wrote a story instead of describing hip hop

both verses were good but i gotta go with forsaken..good battle....caliph work on your structure and your topicals will be better

vote/ forsaken

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For$akeN 08-07-04 04:37 PM

^I'm surprised you never seen my topicals before...^

For$akeN 08-07-04 08:38 PM

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KOOL COL-B 08-07-04 09:43 PM

Voted For: For$akeN

ima vote fo for$aken, cuz i liked hiz shit betta, he had betta structure. boff of yallz didnt really have no multies. and i liked how for$aken wood put "hip-hop!" at tha beginin of tha line sumtimes. so vote= For$aken, werd

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For$akeN 08-08-04 12:25 AM

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BrOTheRP.A.R.A. 08-08-04 04:22 AM

Voted For: For$akeN

straight took it to him homes you got the lyrics you should record that shit

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D-ICED 08-08-04 08:03 AM

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Paris Hilton666 08-08-04 10:47 AM

Voted For: For$akeN

I aint gonna votes still forsaken won this lol ya wack caliph

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MetaPhysik 08-08-04 11:24 AM

This was feedback posted for For$akeN
 
This was tight, nice imagery and flow. I know you can't really tell "flow" on text battles but it was there. The opener was tight, and you had a couple of quotables in there. Good structure also. Overall, this was dope. 8.5/10

Dustin Dubree 08-08-04 11:27 AM

Voted For: For$akeN

This was tight, nice imagery and flow. I know you can't really tell "flow" on text battles but it was there. The opener was tight, and you had a couple of quotables in there. Good structure also. Overall, this was dope. 8.5/10

caliph yours was very sloppy and had gay structure. Your lines were to stretched and was hard to follow along. You didnt have any good lines for my liking. Overall, I didnt like yours. 4/10

Peep mine in elevated.

D-ICED 08-09-04 09:42 AM

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For$akeN 08-09-04 02:36 PM

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