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Lil-trip vs ATMOSPHERE
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UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0 Topic: Wuts On Your Mind After Catching Your Girl Cheating On You I put it 6 hours cuz i might have to do somethin soon jst check in asap Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-04-04 at 07:51 PM Must drop verse in 360 minutes after check in. |
ATMOSPHERE has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-04 07:22 PM.
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Lil-trip has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-04 07:27 PM.
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"Ayo Trip, come over here quick nigga n hollah at yo boi"
"yo homie, you kno i always got time for my crew" "yea, but how come your bitch has time for most of the crew to" "nigga, watch your mouth, aint no demeanin my girl to your pussy standards" "Trip, you mus' always be trippin, look at that bitch over there" "Dats mah girl, what she doin wit my homeboi that close" "She aint yo girl, shes the whole hoods girl" "She aint my girl, i see two bitches" "Yea trip, a straight up bitch" "Hes a bitch to tho, aint girls jus the bitches..theres man bitches" "What you gon' do bout it" Where i end is where i begin..ima start a new beginnin' As I kept spittin n winnin', this bitch was jus "Loose" n' jus givin Dis bitch has the pussy not me, frontin n doin my homie Ima take it like this world..both can knee down n blow me Spittin venomous hate, n she always said i spat coldly laughin at punk kids, thinkin they might dethrone me In the end whos actions spat coldy, turnin to my homie when she got lonley whos gonna be there for your cold feet, everytime the yays cause her to OD's she don' undstand or comprehend, the life of n old school' G I turn Zig Zags to Body Bags, n ill fold this brother like i roll weed English bitches love "Bummin Fags", don be mad i aint hatin on your choice This relationship was a runnin gag, "Girls" belong with little boys haha where i end is where i begin...ima start a new beginnin' even with life twistin, it jus keeps trip spittin where i end is where i begin...ima start a new beginnin rims still spinnin n my ice still glistens, sun shadin my beginnin Me feelin woes, Thats the same as sayin dividin by "0" is Probbable You aint like me wit wins, your jus like the bedroom its easily toppable How did you feel, when you grabbed this ruxpin n felt huggable the same old fashioned nigga, reppin his wife like Mrs.Huxtable I already spat my hate, no one can ever trust tbe mind of a cheat You cheat to win, this relationship is like my spits you face defeat I was comin around, the only one who was able to re-align your frown made you feel purer than gold, n more virgin white than a gown it is all ova, it you aint got to thank what you where sippin it was you who caused the slippin, at this end is my new beginnin.. where i end is where i begin...ima start a new beginnin' even with life twistin, it jus keeps trip spittin where i end is where i begin...ima start a new beginnin rims still spinnin n my ice still glistens, sun shadin my beginnin Hollah...~Lil-Trip |
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uppin, lets get yours on here homie, hollah back peace
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Man you put the time limit at like 6 hours for somethin that should take no longer than a hour..
whatever either way if its gon' be worth it, your actually gettin close to the deadline so id recommended hurryin, peace |
topic: Wuts On Your Mind After Catching Your Girl Cheating On You
I just came to suprise her but then i see her wit another guy?... All those days she sed she was sick, i guess they were all lies... I scratch mah eyes, tighten mah fist, dis shyt i ain't believen... I guess she met dis guy wen i left town, is dat really the reason?... Shyt, still thinkin, dis its hard ta believe wut i've just seen... Damn, she was my future! The perfect gurl of my dreams... And you know, todays 3 years, suppost to be our anniversary... But instead of her makin me happy, she's really jst hurtin me... I dropped the dozen roses, shyt, jst need to take mah breathe... But as in right now, imma make dat nigga suffer to death... Make him get down on his knees, beggin for his own life... Cuz he just stoled mah one to be future great wife... Imma cut him in the throat, stab him atleast 3 times... Damn i don't know wut to do, shyt im loosin mah mind... Dats it, we through, never gonna see dis bitch ever agen... Our 3 years now goin down the drain, bitch dis is the end... [Take out mah gun n shoot em both, then kill mah self] |
I just came to suprise her but then i see her wit another guy?...
All those days she sed she was sick, i guess they were all lies... I scratch mah eyes, tighten mah fist, dis shyt i ain't believen... I guess she met dis guy wen i left town, is dat really the reason?... Shyt, still thinkin, dis its hard ta believe wut i've just seen... Damn, she was my future! The perfect gurl of my dreams... And you know, todays 3 years, suppost to be our anniversary... But instead of her makin me happy, she's really jst hurtin me... I dropped the dozen roses, shyt, jst need to take mah breathe... But as in right now, imma make dat nigga suffer to death... Make him get down on his knees, beggin for his own life... Cuz he just stoled mah one to be future great wife... Imma cut him in the throat, stab him atleast 3 times... Damn i don't know wut to do, shyt im loosin mah mind... Dats it, we through, never gonna see dis bitch ever agen... Our 3 years now goin down the drain, bitch dis is the end... |
damn nigga...i only started spittin 20 minutes ago..w/e... jst take the win..but i want a rematch!!!!
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Voted For: ATMOSPHERE
yo this was good trip u had some okay imagery,ur structure was good,u had no complexity nor metaphors tho,and ur emotion was ehhhh atmo u had great complexity as for ur metafors,ur structure was okay,u did have nice imagery which is good,and the emotion was definitly there good read man v/atmosphere |
Voted For: ATMOSPHERE
Atmosphere, u brought it like usual........ i was feelin u more, it was short but sweet or w.e, and the flow and everythin was better....... u overall brought it better, and i was feelin ur story more........ nuthin but love tho....... yo and spread the love to my battle, its so close to gettin closed: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ht=FuxJustAWord |
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This was feedback posted for Lil-trip
aa pimp the battles was striaght and i voted for lil trip cause he start trippin aaa....
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uppin for votes, lets here some honest feedback n votes, peace
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Voted For: Lil-trip
Ima have 2 go wit lil trip on this one for better wordplay and overall harder punches Atmosphere had a nice drop but his punches were not hittin nearly as hard as trips it was a good battle but it came down 2 wordplay structure and vocab and i felt that went 2 Trip |
wtF??there arn't even ne punches in dis battle cuz its a topical stupid ass
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Voted For: Lil-trip
lil trip got this one , uhh i didnt get wut atmosphere was doing , nice rhyme style but i'd go with lil trip mainly because he had the best word play structure was a little off but for the most visual effect lil flip takes it |
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Voted For: ATMOSPHERE
Not the greatest topicals........ Lil trip....your story's imagery wasn't good and the biggest thing in a topical is imagery the way you worded it made it difficult to picture, you flow was alil off and I don't know what that was before the verse just don't do it again INgenis........Somewhat better than his in imagery but was still kinda lagging, flow was tight throughout, well structured as well and it had decent emotion so you pretty much took this Vote: Ingenius |
Voted For: ATMOSPHERE
both of you were iight Atno: damn you was nice in ya topic and you stayed on it very well props girl Lil: um you was iiight but you neeed to elevate i dont think topics are for you lil trip VOte atmo |
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Voted For: Lil-trip
ok: lil~trip: this was a damn good verse man, you set the secen up and everything, i liked ya flow and structure,nice rhyme scheme, and the whole verse was on point from beginning till the end, overall nice job both but i think ingenius' verse wasnt that strong here, at least not as strong as lil's verse..... vote:lil |
This was feedback posted for ATMOSPHERE
vote on da prodigy vs dustyblunted an i'll return tha fav
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up up and awaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay
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gota give this 2 atnospere..he just had a better overall flow
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Voted For: ATMOSPHERE
ok lil trip trash that was corny and weak no good lines at all the story sucked in you did better but not much still a decent story got you this |
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