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Verbal Abuse vs Cerulean
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Feeding B.X.P ----- Kroznuz Darklight ----- Schema izotope ------ Avansih Topicals tourn ------ Shadow cerulean ------ V.A Minimum posts to vote: 150 Check in by: 08-09-04 at 11:04 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
Verbal Abuse has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-09-04 12:43 AM.
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what is the topic?
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Topic: "deing to live" (pianist keys in) Bootleg Sales Are Up, Citizenships Just Been Cash Renewed. Bills Have Passed The Roof, My Home Symbolizes True Family Fued. Life Withstands My Fuse, Quick Tempers Got Me Stayin At The Local Inn. Unaproachable, Only Conversate When I Polish My Throat With My "Social Ginn". My Vocals Bent, My Nervers Bust Like Teens With Pimples. Highschool Said I Had Potential, My College Past Proved My Genes Are Simple. Whens The Last Time Kodak's Seen These Dimples? My Own Conscience Calls Me Out. Once It All Falls Down, Notify Kanye Hes The First But Hes Not Profound. (Quits Drug Use, GangBAngin, And Side Affairs) I Know Now, I Attend Life...I Dont Gravitate It. Sad To Say It, Ive Been Lost For Years. But Im Glad To'have Made It. Ive Been Living Life In Fast Foward, Rewind To Recap Memories. Refind The Years Past Enemies, Clearly Focus My Mind On Near Mass Remedies. Quit That Hastle Of Deing To Live, Or Else Your Time Is Spent Impatient. My Rhymes...You Cant Erase Em, Mistakes...I Gotta Face 'Em, Before I Reach My Final Destination. |
Cerulean has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-09-04 05:43 AM.
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Yeah, who choses the topics??
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oh hang on here it is: "Cerulean ------ V.A: Topic is "Living to Die, Dieing to Live". Good luck!!
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wheres your verse homeboy?
id hate to win by DQ. erm O well. |
I die for life and death is fast flown Atop history’s shelf ancient volumes and tome Hiding secrets and shames, of gold, grief and bone Of menace and clone wrecking spoil from high throne Killing millions with bold wreaked by obsession of own Grown with demons of greed, stone-wrought cold all alone Kingdoms crumbled, empires thrown with no mercies shown Spelling sentences of demise in born fancies short glown Another casualty honed with but a corpse's stone All morality blown, acts of a menial drone From the outside the mighty, but from the inside the crone For I live to serve and life is fast flown |
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well its semi legit, uppin for votes. rofl at cer's drop.
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i didn't see the due time until 10 minutes before submission!! (check the time) so i had to think of something to put at least! haha...
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aight well, laugh at yourself.
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yeah sit tight kid... you're drop ain't exactly hot!
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ya...and your cracker touch, gave a nice swing to 12 Lines. Uppin.
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uppin this for a vote.
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This was feedback posted for Verbal Abuse
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Voted For: Cerulean
Okay This Is A ''No Contest'' Wtf Was Your Rhymes Verbal? Complete Garbage My Nigguh... Some Of It Didnt Even Rhyme... U Gotta ELEVATE A WHOLE LOT..... Cerulean, Nice Drop, U Got This One In The Bag Keep Em Comin.. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Cerulean
this was a shity battle for these to but anyway the vocab was weak with cerealean but he won still: punches:C vocab VA opener:VB closener:C metas: VB multi's:C flow:C v/Cerulean return the favour in my battle verse shak=spear thanks peace the links in my sig |
Voted For: Cerulean
Vote: c Lyrics: c Topic coverage: tied Story telling: v Opening: c Ending:v...dat was nice blud Wordplay: neither multies: neither Flow: c Overall: i gave it to c, cos it sounded poetic and shit yo, i liked dat made me think bout it mo and take battle serious rather than jus voting for funds, it was deep whereas vebals i read and it was gd but his had all been dun b4 u get me. Peace out y'all return favor |
Voted For: Verbal Abuse
Interesting battle, both came with a very different style. VA: I had to read it twice to get it.. But I can now see exactly where you were going with your verse. Made some nice connections with life.. I especially liked the line.. Life Withstands My Fuse, Quick Tempers Got Me Stayin At The Local Inn. Unaproachable, Only Conversate When I Polish My Throat With My "Social Ginn". I took from that someone who only really comes out of their shell when their at weak points (being drunk).. It was a nice metaphor on introvert personalitys.. Rhyme wise, there were some lines that were stretched and the verse would have benefitted from better structuring.. But for the most it flowed correctly.. Cerulean: Rhyme wise, this verse killed VA's verse. However there were a lot of words and metaphors used I didnt know the reason for.. It seemed you were going off in a tangent.. Im not sure if this was because you knew what you were talking about and it was hard for me to decypher, or if there was no real meaning to your choice of words and connections. Anyway, Personally, Im gonna give the vote to VA. But keep elevating both of you. peace. |
This was feedback posted for Cerulean
Cerulean you wack
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wow don't strain yourself with the big words kid
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Voted For: Verbal Abuse
im voting for verbal abuse because i was able to relate to it more. it gave me more of an understanding of dying to live. ceruleans was good but it didnt seem to me like he was on topic. he had good vocab but i wasnt sure if he knew what he was supposed to be writing about. so my vote goes for erbal abuse |
This was feedback posted for Verbal Abuse
Just check'n the count, yall can take the Up'n !!
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Voted For: Verbal Abuse
OK i felt VERBAL came wit more feelin all tha lines flow rite in to each other (i polish my throat with my social ginn) when i wazz readin it i stoped and waz really feelin that cerulen came a lil poem like DICTIONARY flow (thats hood terms) but i would a like to hear it on audio but u got skillz to |
Voted For: Verbal Abuse
verbal abuse wins dis 1 his verse or story stuff was way better hes wins dis topical easy i liked his mor it was mor detailed n stuf he wins dis 1 hands down no dout bout it pz out |
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