MagiC vs Mad Dog
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
Topic-Hold up @ a bank
We did agree this 2 days ago

Minimum posts to vote: 150

Check in by: 08-14-04 at 04:45 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Mad Dog has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-04 04:46 AM.

(Verse)
One day standing in que waiting to cash my cheque,
Suspicious goings on...i could feel heavy breaths,

Three guys at the front, 2 beside & 1 behind me,
Pull out A.K's and shout...GIMMIE ALL THE MONEY,

3 shots 2 guards drop 1 baby in his pushchair crying,
1 said SHUT THAT BABY UP OR EVERY1 IS DYING,

All the comotion and then finally a silence...
...u could hear a pin drop,
An old guy next to me so scared...
...his pacemaker nearly stopped,

Next the men were going round wit a bag...
...like a charity collection,
They came up to me and said...
...C'MON GIVE US UR POSSESIONS,

I gave him the cheque i was meant to deposit,
He laughed...go the cashier bank it...and withdraw it,

2 took 2 women in the back...these were sum sick fucks,
Fortunately for me...i always keep shit tucked,

As i got to the cashier...i looked in his eye,
He saw my piece...and shouted THE PIGS IN THE SKY,

2 looked round distracted but jus for a sec,
Enough time for me to unload and seal their deaths,

Took 1 more out and ran behind a pillar,
The last man in the room grabbed a girl and said...
...U DON'T COME OUT I'LL KILL HER,

Spun round shot 1 and hit her shoulder,
Lucky 4 me it pierced him i could tell he was gone...
...his face was gettin colder,

Went to the next room to settle the other 2,
I could hear the womens screams...
...these sick fucks had to die soon,

Burst in the room, and shot...they deserved 2 be dead
The women thanked me and i said...
......it's cool but get urselves checked,

Stepped out and all i got was loadsa thanks,
Po burst in saw the gun in my hand and shot ME down...
...they thought I was trying to rob the bank,

Damn...

MagiC has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-04 07:20 AM.

.:Topical:.

The Bank Job


<Splash>
Heats racing needed to wash my face, trying to wash my sins away
I feel cold yet my body is clammy, Can’t believe what I done today

Had a glance in the mirror, making sure the water droplets hide my tears
Before all this happened I was heartless, robbing liquor stores for dears

~Turning the clock back 3 hours~
(Dress in Black, Hooded, Part of my face showing)

Paranoid of the surroundings,, someone’s behind me, false alarm its my own eco
Arrived at the derelict warehouse, I feel eyes watching me blended in by the deco

<Drip Drip Drip>

~Waters leaking a broken gutter on the roof, rains trickling down form the ceilings~
~Disused equipment left here decaying coved in rust, the wallpaper arounds peeling~

approached a hole about 10 feet wide, <Whispers><Where’s your boy>
I’m here <Bout time man> get the car loaded, you not staying at the savoir

~The Hold up~

~Waiting~

<Safe opens in 3minutes> got to get in & out, take anything out that moves
<prove your worth kid> then you can take you wife on a Caribbean cruse

<Go Go Go!!!> armed with a Shot gun… balaclava covering my face
entered the bank with intent, I will drive if we end up getting a chased

vvV<Everybody get the fuck down>Vvv

<Bang>gun shot to a security guards head, left he’s brains spread
He reached for his gun, I had to prove I’m harder then lead

I froze, couldn’t move, couldn’t believe I fired a shot with intent
Before contemplating what I done all the money was colleted every cent

Time to get away but they said the police had the place surrounded
Rounded up all the staff can’t believe the police had us grounded

I need to use the toilet

~This is where the story began~

Prayed to go to forgive me for my sin’s, I will make this
right
I will go out there and solve our plight, but it might start a fight

Left the toilet, into the lobby, the boys had disappeared
Fuck they left me this was planed, this is what I feared

Look out the window the place was really surrounded
<Bang> Shot between my eyes,now I’m left blooded

Can feel my self moving, But I dont have any feelings
Time for me to go, followin a light in that was beaming

Sorry had to drop it again,,...

.:Topical:.

The Bank Job


<Splash>
Heats racing needed to wash my face, trying to wash my sins away
I feel cold yet my body is clammy, Can’t believe what I done today

Had a glance in the mirror, making sure the water droplets hide my tears
Before all this happened I was heartless, robbing liquor stores for dears

~Turning the clock back 3 hours~
(Dress in Black, Hooded, Part of my face showing)

Paranoid of the surroundings,, someone’s behind me, false alarm its my own eco
Arrived at the derelict warehouse, I feel eyes watching me blended in by the deco

<Drip Drip Drip>

~Waters leaking a broken gutter on the roof, rains trickling down form the ceilings~
~Disused equipment left here decaying coved in rust, the wallpaper arounds peeling~

approached a hole about 10 feet wide, <Whispers><Where’s your boy>
I’m here <Bout time man> get the car loaded, you not staying at the savoir

~The Hold up~

~Waiting~

<Safe opens in 3minutes> got to get in & out, take anything out that moves
<prove your worth kid> then you can take you wife on a Caribbean cruse

<Go Go Go!!!> armed with a Shot gun… balaclava covering my face
entered the bank with intent, I will drive if we end up getting a chased

vvV<Everybody get the fuck down>Vvv

<Bang>gun shot to a security guards head, left he’s brains spread
He reached for his gun, I had to prove I’m harder then lead

I froze, couldn’t move, couldn’t believe I fired a shot with intent
Before contemplating what I done all the money was colleted every cent

Time to get away but they said the police had the place surrounded
Rounded up all the staff can’t believe the police had us grounded



I need to use the toilet
~This is where the story began~

Prayed to go to forgive me for my sin’s, I will make this right
I will go out there and solve our plight, but it might start a fight

Left the toilet, into the lobby, the boys had disappeared
Fuck they left me this shit was planed,

Look out the window the place was really surrounded
<Bang> Shot between my eyes,now I’m left depleted

It keeps missing out buts of my verse WTF,,..

.:Topical:.

The Bank Job


<Splash>
Heats racing needed to wash my face, trying to wash my sins away
I feel cold yet my body is clammy, Can’t believe what I done today

Had a glance in the mirror, making sure the water droplets hide my tears
Before all this happened I was heartless, robbing liquor stores for dears

~Turning the clock back 3 hours~
(Dress in Black, Hooded, Part of my face showing)

Paranoid of the surroundings,, someone’s behind me, false alarm its my own eco
Arrived at the derelict warehouse, I feel eyes watching me blended in by the deco

<Drip Drip Drip>

~Waters leaking a broken gutter on the roof, rains trickling down form the ceilings~
~Disused equipment left here decaying coved in rust, the wallpaper arounds peeling~

approached a hole about 10 feet wide, <Whispers><Where’s your boy>
I’m here <Bout time man> get the car loaded, you not staying at the savoir

~The Hold up~

~Waiting~

<Safe opens in 3minutes> got to get in & out, take anything out that moves
<prove your worth kid> then you can take you wife on a Caribbean cruse

<Go Go Go!!!> armed with a Shot gun… balaclava covering my face
entered the bank with intent, I will drive if we end up getting a chased

vvV<Everybody get the fuck down>Vvv

<Bang>gun shot to a security guards head, left he’s brains spread
He reached for his gun, I had to prove I’m harder then lead

I froze, couldn’t move, couldn’t believe I fired a shot with intent
Before contemplating what I done all the money was colleted every cent

Time to get away but they said the police had the place surrounded
Rounded up all the staff can’t believe the police had us grounded



I need to use the toilet
~This is where the story began~

Prayed to go to forgive me for my sin’s, I will make this right
I will go out there and solve our plight, but it might start a fight

Left the toilet, into the lobby, the boys had disappeared
Fuck they left me this shit was planed,

Look out the window the place was really surrounded
<Bang> Shot between my eyes,now I’m left depleted

Uppin this ma fuckin thread 4 them ma fuckin votes

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Up~ing this please,,,

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Voted For: MagiC

yo i think mad dog took this cause i felt his imaginary more he really brought me in that verse his structure was ok it was betta then magic's flow was aight vocab was so so not really alot complexity none overall i liked this betta then magics versemagic your verse was good to but i felt that u didnt have tha imaginary mad dog had your structure was a lil off flow was soso vocab really nonetheir for my vote goes to mad dog

/\ LOL voted for me but posted in magics oh well i'll get it sorted lol

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Voted For: Mad Dog

DAMMMMMMMMMMMMN this was a good topical.....both of you came out good...but im gonna have to give this one to mad dog....damn man that was a dope verse, good flow, great ENDING, good ideas all the way through, nice rhymes and use of vocab and wordplay...over all nice verse...magic you came good yourself, with good flow and ideas but i just liked reading and i liked mad dogs idea better....wicked ending i must say

v/mad dog

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Voted For: Mad Dog

hmmm


magic: your story line was focused enuff.. your imegry was better, but the story line a creativity wasnt the best..flow was iiight.. vocab was iiight..

maddog:your storyline was quite good.. the flow was a lil choppy, but the story line and creativity made up for that.. to be maddog won this battle, due to his creativity..

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Voted For: Mad Dog

mad dog had beta emotion,more depth and feeling.
structure was also better,i felt magic u ruined ur flow with the lil interludes between verses.this makes the reader hve to stop and think.gud idea,but restructure it 4 beta flow.....


havin said that i dnt consider struc that important but mad had the better vocab,multies.n general rhymes....
overall u both came good,but i was feelin the depth from mads more....
both keep elevating........

Voted For: Mad Dog

yo this battle was ill mad dog took it cuz of punchlines and some personals hehe you magiC you need elevation badly if you wanna beat this cat...