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Decree Wun vs ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
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topic: in math class...wuts on ur mind 20 lines max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting spit due in 1 hour Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-12-04 at 03:22 AM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
..::iNgEnIuS mInD::.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-12-04 02:53 AM.
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Decree Wun has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-12-04 03:11 AM.
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...Many thoughts float around in my Disgusting, yet Intelligent mind...
...Thoughts Of the math equation disturbed by visions of Ms.Johnson, oh so fine... ...Each Math problem i try and figure out, memories Pass through my mind... ...Tryin' To hold Together, Starin' at the clock, Fifteen minutes Till lunch time... ...Math, my worst subject, strugglin' knowin my average was forty five... ...Nine Bullets Subtracted by eight, i guarantee you pac would still be alive... ...Visions Blurry, mind faded,im beginnin to drift off, i easily fall asleep... ...awoken by "ingenius Mind" loud spoken answers, wtf's wrong with this geek... ...eyes red, my heads spinnin, ready to collapse, but forced to keep my eyes open... ...Dozing off, but awoken every time another answer is loudly spoken... ...In The Room Tappin Ms.Johnson...yeah, To bad its a wet dream... ...my Words were accidently spoken out, She would have my neck..so it seemed... ...but instead, she gave me some lead, a pad, and a quick note..it read... ...Decree Wun, Meet me infront of my desk at 3-to-one... ...we can watch the sunset rise, ive never seen one... ...better "fuck" next time, right now im teachin a class... ...*shook my head..read it again, hopin imma get up in dat ass*... ...Better "Luck" next time, right now im teachin a class... ...I sighed in disapointment, Woke Up miserably, lunch time at last... |
topic: in math class...wuts in ur mind Shyt, todays friday n another test for division.... If I only listend, 10 credits i wouldn't be missin... Speakin of listen'n, wit mah friends i shoulda ditched... Cuz all math does in mah life is make it more of a bitch... 12th grade already n still dont know multiplication... Yea im dumb, you should see the rank that im placed in... Out of 200, yea well im ranked number two hundred.... I use to be smart before, i guess mah brain is jst rusted... Damn, why did math exist? i never understood it... 6th grade took an addition test, passing it i jst couldn't... 10 out of 20? is dat passing, wuts the percentage?... Damn, i shoulda listend to da teach, now i regret it... Im confused, don't know wut to do, 20 divided by 2?... mah friend sed it's 10, i really don't think dat is true... I believe its fourty! WAIT? Fuck'n Dick? is dat dividin it?... Im now gettin horny cuz of dis chick, damn mah minds jst shyt... Its a miracle?Jessica Simpson is smart n a beautiful whore???.... but she's only needed to suck dick cuz dats wut she's only usefull for... I give up on dis shyt, cuz imma jst get wasted for mah whole life... Damn, I've been in high skewl for 8 years, no wonder i have no wife... |
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wth??there were no metaphors in his verse?? are u fucken d/r dawg
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Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
i ma give this one 2 inf but both were nice , it hink this one was more connected and shit so yea Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
For:Ingenious Mind Betta rhymin-ok structure-better flow Decree wun-structure betta-rhymin cud of bin betta Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
yo ppl..plz explain ur votes
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aahaha mad d/r and ur sayin mine was dr............
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This was feedback posted for ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
Nice drop really feelin it
I liked ur structure punchlines and overall verse TOO bad I cant vote yet but I will be sure to do it |
how the hell am i dick ridin?? i dont even know em??? plus they sed there are fuck'n metaphors in ur shyt wen there isn't ne at all?
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This was feedback posted for ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
nice battle ppls
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Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
whoa whoa whoa.. i liked your verse alot.. good multies example: Shyt, todays friday n another test for division.... If I only listend, 10 credits i wouldn't be missin... Speakin of listen'n, wit mah friends i shoulda ditched. nice job....with multies.. structure your whole first three-fourths of ur verse nice..last was falling off good flow good rhymes.. i also like how ur no forcing ur rhymes..proud of u dawg example: precentage ..regret it and threw in a funny ender 8.0 decree wun your verse was also hott nice drop..he had better strcuture and flow..u had stretched lines and i wasnt feelin ur ending at all..nicejob though 7.7/10 barely one that battle..but he did win..propz to all.. |
Voted For: Decree Wun
dcree ones because he had better vocab and his was more descpriptive and it was better in terms of story so return the favor nucca Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
uppin this battle............................................ ...........
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Voted For: Decree Wun
lol... ingenous mind... on this topic, i really wasent feeling the way u slanted it.. it was to serious for no reason.. a topic liek this you need to have fun with.. you did ok rhyming and everything, ut the way u went with it, for this topic was boring... decree... i felt like you went in the direction i would have.. good job.. it was more of a read and laff type thing.. i have had things liek that happen before -_-... was tellin my boy how my history teacher had a fat ass, and she was standing behind me in the lunch line lmao :( .. yea she pulled me aside and told me she was flattered, but thats not what i need to be thinking about in her class.. OMG...shes hot... ne way.. i was feeling your drop and imegery a lil better in this.. good job to both of you tho |
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=140130
rtf like a mufucka ;) :thumbup: |
Voted For: Decree Wun
Good topicals y'all Decree......Goood story, its was entertaining, imagery was tight and flow was on point throughout, you had nicely place multies not too many and none were forced, structure was on point, you never vered off topic and you took the topic outside the normal math struggles but still stayed with the original subject very nicely written piece Grade: B Ingenious.........also a decent story your flow was good, structure was good but your story was weak it was blan and didn't surprise you did the basic math struggles story, you gotta be more creative, but your multies was good, vocab coulda been alil stronger but overall you were pretty much even in all categories except for the storyline, but it was very close match decree jus edged it by a little Grade: B- |
wtf??? isn't triple N in ur crew???wtf???
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no dumbass hes not...im in hardwood class-sickz go to my crew and look at da damn roster..
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Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
yo, this was a nice battle. But I think mind got it. DW, you had nice imagery and stuff. But I think you could have put a little more into it. There wasn't enought, but what was there was good. Aiight job on that though. Yo flow was pretty good too. I liked it. It was good thoruhgout whole verse. Jus went off in a few parts.overall tight verse. Ingenious, you had a nice verse. I was feelin' it. YOu had some nice imagery there, wit some nice lines and stuff. Good job on that. Yo flow was also very nice on this. IT sytayed constant throughtout the whole verse. Tight job. V/Ingenious no hate |
Voted For: Decree Wun
yo i think u won this battle but barely i liked ur approach to tha topic it was different and caught me eye ingenous mind your drop was nice too but whered tha jessica simpson line come from it threw me off a lil bit Decree had a better opener and closer i felt ingenous's structure more tho but all in all this was a well fought battle but Decree Wun gets my vote vote-Decree Wun |
Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
engenious mind cuz you had betta stucture and rhymes and punches decree wun you had no punches and structure you need to elevate |
Voted For: Decree Wun
DAMN this was a hot battle. Both of you have mad skills on the topical shit, but I'ma give this one to Decree. His verse sounded more like it's what he's thinkin' at the moment, and Ingenius yours was about like events currently and in the past. And you kinda lost me near thened with that Jessica Simpson line. But no hate, good job on both your parts. Vote - Decree Wun Return the favor, honest votes only: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=141704 |
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