"Wannabe's In RB" post feedback
 

k heres my song about them:

in deed there wannabe gangstas like empire/1
he thinks he can bring the rain of fire/.2
but all as he dos is say nigga but hes not black/3
stop frontin and start workin you fuckin copycat/.4
i could take you to the hood/5
and you would be scared cuz you are the wannabe/.6
so as i take you there open your eyes up and see/7
cuz you think yer a ballin pimp but maybe/.8
i will just fuck you up and if you follow me yer the flee/9
stop tryin now to be in the crazy cree/.10
so leave now or i will be forced to count to three/11
if you want you can get down on your knees and bow to me/.12
so stop goin out and buyin it all cuz you got the spree's/13
fuck you ill take you out n three and fuckin stop tryin to be/.14
like a hardcore black man you fuckin scam/15
so stop frontin me for that extra gram/.16
or i willl get my fat backup and get them to take you out with a body slam/17
so here is my song so stop listening to the slow jams/.18

U P P I N

^^why you rapping obut yourself????

ur gay, they're way better then us, we cant even compare u faggot, and u suck

who me what the fuck you im not talking about all of you wannabes its just some noobs that do shit thats gay

im not a wanksta ok im white i dont walk around nigga nigga ths nigga that i dont say that i say whats up thats it ok so fuck you goof 50 cent person yer no 50cent change yer name goof

and ja rule is a faggot :gfy:

cough cough smae with you id merk you but your not worth the time....

o ya who do you kno thats name is brother para? and how am i a wannabe a wannabe say shit that gangstas say and i dont say any

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exacly fuck off

no more feed back thank you these fags keep talking

yo dawg i feel ya man im wite dawg i feel ya, man fuck dese hataz mutha fuckas is stupid as fuck, b i felt yo shit dawg fuck them, iite 1 love

yea that shit was kinda gay dawg but come harder or dont come at all.....1

emirgin ya i knoe im right these bitch wannabes that call them self niggas and there white thats wack shit like fuck they cant get it in there mind or what like realy but theres the few noobs that come out good but most just register on this site and dick around that makes me mad fuck but you knoe you can still call me a newb but you kno im white who cares i rap better every fuckin day i freestyle like no one 14 on this site ight. and im good for just starting to rap 2 and a half weeks ago

U P P I N if yer a newb dont look at this unlees you like me dissing you if yer black then you dont need to worry about this if yer anything else besidez black and do what im sayin stop yer a faggot then. W-A-N-K-S-T-E-R

alright....this piece was weak as fuck...not much of anything...no metaphors...hardly any punchlines...no wordplay...you had structure..and even that was too simple...by the way....I'm also white...why announce that....stop actin like black people care if your white or not...if you can spit..you can...if you can't...you can't...don't use your color as an excuse..

^WorD tO yA mOfer





































^that was corny

....blah...not even witty at all....no fun....

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Oh shit... that put me to sleep...


WACK

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=142471

That was a diss i did to Empire today wrote up, so since you seem to share the same thoughts of the frontin cat, thought id drop the link homie, peep it, peace

i know this song sucked but still dont acted back if yer not word but im done with my disses im up for makin my songs about my life now ight props to all peace