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Maku JaiiLiin vs Soulless
Battle Rules:
6 - 20 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting no h8 votes Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-17-04 at 12:07 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Maku JaiiLiin has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-14-04 12:16 PM.
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Soulless has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-14-04 12:35 PM.
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** I didn’t think we were havin a 12 hour deadline…. But w/e
**PLEASE DON’T drop a novel just match mine…8 lines** --- Explanations-- *Hes got GOTHIC shit in his sig… they usually dress in all black ** the pictures in his sig have eye liner on… --- You ‘can’t fight‘… when ya ass has to ‘struggle for life,’ So Gothic.. I made u disappear when I ‘turned out the lights‘!!!!! * I could rip you on personals… but Mak truthfully… nobody-cares.. Thinking of sendin u to hell… but ya sig, looks like ya already-there!!!!* You say -stuff, your online so much… ya whole life is made-up, U might win… cuz I don’t ‘punch’ grls.. Or guys who wear make-up!!!!!** Gothic’s and rap don’t mix…. Com’on man lets just get-real… Cuz ya getting no where quick, like ‘runnin for ya life’ on a treadmill!!! Sonned!!! |
this is stop and go style format, so there is pauses in between sentences, not long ones, but you'll catch on.
Chance lines with enhanced minds? i wrote rap's rule booklet// and in a matter of a half a line you'll say Quote:
i'm taking this cat// with serated blades, placed to his navel and back// "Say my greatness is statement of fact."// the tek'll have thoughts escapin ya mind// battle, i'll treat you laced chemicals in coc, have you waitin in line// thanks for the props and your vote// but i'll still have you sweatin like frosty in a sauna while rockin a fur coat// ....yer verse is sounding played in a sentence// cuz I'm too tight to fuck with, ...like anal penetration of infants// I wrote an iller verse when i was slayin this lame// but i treated it like monica's dress, and saved it for fame// ya team need reality// so wit ease i'll have Soulles sleepin with fishes, .....like marine bestiality// Practice from virginia snipings, gave me my aim// but my spirit consumptional techniques, gave you ya name// i didn't spend time thinking of this verse, it was done in under an hour, if you are familiar with my battles, it would only take me an hour and stuff, i was just waiting to post it, cuz i had so much time to do so. the last line is one against his name, soulless anyway the line in quotes, is a 'use it against him' type diss, because he gave me the vote on one of my battles. |
this is stop and go style format, so there is pauses in between sentences, not long ones, but you'll catch on.
Chance lines with enhanced minds? i wrote rap's rule booklet// and in a matter of a half a line you'll say * i'm taking this cat// with serated blades, placed to his navel and back// "Say my greatness is statement of fact."// the tek'll have thoughts escapin ya mind// battle, i'll treat you laced chemicals in coc, have you waitin in line// thanks for the props and your vote// but i'll still have you sweatin like frosty in a sauna while rockin a fur coat// ....yer verse is sounding played in a sentence// cuz I'm too tight to fuck with, ...like anal penetration of infants// I wrote an iller verse when i was slayin this lame// but i treated it like monica's dress, and saved it for fame// ya team need reality// so wit ease i'll have Soulles sleepin with fishes, .....like marine bestiality// Practice from virginia snipings, gave me my aim// but my spirit consumptional techniques, gave you ya name// i didn't spend time thinking of this verse, it was done in under an hour, if you are familiar with my battles, it would only take me an hour and stuff, i was just waiting to post it, cuz i had so much time to do so. the last line is one against his name, soulless anyway the line in quotes, is a 'use it against him' type diss, because he gave me the vote on one of my battles. |
the treadmill no where quick line has been used...
i've heard it before, a couple times. |
This was feedback posted for Soulless
tight battle both of you
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why did u post twice.?...
and please dont say my lines are plyed just to sway votes... in actually nothin really rhymed in your whole verse... shti was mad wack... but i wasn't gunna say anything.... aihgt uppin for votes |
@soulless:bitch, how you gon say, i said that to sway votes and now you hatin? TO SWAY VOTES. Let the voters decide, until then...
son ya self. |
Voted For: Maku JaiiLiin
i'm taking this cat// with serated blades, placed to his navel and back// "Say my greatness is statement of fact."// the tek'll have thoughts escapin ya mind// battle, i'll treat you laced chemicals in coc, have you waitin in line// thanks for the props and your vote// but i'll still have you sweatin like frosty in a sauna while rockin a fur coat// ....yer verse is sounding played in a sentence// cuz I'm too tight to fuck with, ...like anal penetration of infants// I wrote an iller verse when i was slayin this lame// but i treated it like monica's dress, and saved it for fame// ya team need reality// so wit ease i'll have Soulles sleepin with fishes, .....like marine bestiality// Practice from virginia snipings, gave me my aim// but my spirit consumptional techniques, gave you ya name// Punches=8 Meta's=7 Personals=6 Complexity=7 Open/Close=7 You ‘can’t fight‘… when ya ass has to ‘struggle for life,’ So Gothic.. I made u disappear when I ‘turned out the lights‘!!!!! * I could rip you on personals… but Mak truthfully… nobody-cares.. Thinking of sendin u to hell… but ya sig, looks like ya already-there!!!!* You say -stuff, your online so much… ya whole life is made-up, U might win… cuz I don’t ‘punch’ grls.. Or guys who wear make-up!!!!!** Gothic’s and rap don’t mix…. Com’on man lets just get-real… Cuz ya getting no where quick, like ‘runnin for ya life’ on a treadmill!!! Punches=6 Meta's=6 Personals=6 Complexity=7 Open/Close=6 Came down 2 better punches and overall better wordplay this battle was ok but both could use a lil more harder punches |
uppin 4 votes on this one.........................
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Voted For: Maku JaiiLiin
Not Feeling The Structure of Maku but Your Style Is Pretty Hot... Nice Punches and Creativity Threwout Your Verse Kid... Maku Took This With Better Wordusuage, Creativity, and Punches. Vote - Maku ~R~ |
uppin
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uppin on this one.................................
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uppin for some votes...........
**question why does R-RAted hardly ever vote but when he does votes in your battles :-/......for you mkau Jaiiliin*** |
dog...quit tryna sway votes bitch! this battle could go either way, you ain't lost yet, so hang in there, and wait for the votes to come!
i'm gettin sick of your bitchin! it's just a simple battle, and i got two votes, just two, and you got one, it can go either way, so when it's done, it's done. You don't wanna risk losin, then don't battle. Simple as that, i've battled cats with like, 10-2 records, when i was newb, and didn't fukkin complain, knowin that these cats was gettin dick road, or that i just lost! So until one of us gets the W... son ya self. |
.. im not talken any more about it................
*** but i was just saying... its questionable***.... --- im not worrying about it..... |
Voted For: Soulless
souless won this he had decent punches that I liked the whole way through. He had nice flow and had way better word play den da other. Like the structure also so he had the best performance and was nice to read. The other verse was close but not close enough sorry |
Voted For: Soulless
aight votin on this battle to was to easy....anyway i think soulless took thid easily....maku i didnt likke ur stucture....ur flow was ok but to me it seemed half fast....u needed to up ur skills in this battle other than that u lost.....soulless u had better overall verse vocab flow everything was all there so u get my vote... since i voted hit my battle up with dragon heres the link http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=142722 |
Voted For: Soulless
umm easy vote. Maku-yes i understand the style but it really wasnt working for you. punches werent that hard, personals were pretty weak, and u coulda done better on wordplay. basically im not sayin u suck, just this particular verse of urs...5/10 Soulless-once again a nice drop from soulless. ill start by askin if u got that idea for the final line from what i said to u in our battle....so did you?(pm me) anywayz nice drop i like the personals and punches a lot, structure was on point and the wordplay was decent...8/10 v//soulless RTF..links in the sig |
Voted For: Maku JaiiLiin
DAmn Maku... ya got a lot better since I last saw you in our battle! ya killed it with the wordplay... i still couldn't get ya flow down but it looked consistent throughout... ya team need reality// so wit ease i'll have Soulles sleepin with fishes, .....like marine bestiality// Practice from virginia snipings, gave me my aim// but my spirit consumptional techniques, gave you ya name// ^^^ easily the best lines of the battle s: ya style was pretty regular... no ooomph to it at all...punches didn't hit hard enough.. you concentrated too much on his sig... that won't get you a win... one or two lines max on the sig woulda been cool if ya followed up with more potent material...no real wordplay or vocab... multi's woulda helped...maybe some metas... verse was too simple |
Voted For: Soulless
ok maku ok verse good vocab lines were streched as fuck so flow was off good punches no real disses or personals 4/10 soulless good disses that make up shit was a funny as hell personal fo real good shit good flow nice structure your personals and disses combined with the few punches made this a really strong verse for this battle 8/10 |
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