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..::Sinister::.. vs INFALLIBLE

Battle Rules:

20 minutes
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

topic: suicide

30 min to spit

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-18-04 at 07:44 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

..::Sinister::.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-04 07:15 PM.

INFALLIBLE has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-04 07:21 PM.

I hate mah life cuz everyday i always suffer...
I lost mah whole fam, today i jst lost my brother..
I have no other, no body i bet will care for me...
Damn, even wen I die nobody will ever charish me..
I aparently in the pass did something very wrong...
Well i was lazy, dats why i was in High skewl 4 very long...
7 years in there, damn, no wonder i can't get a job...
Shyt! No wonder i still live wit mah uncle bob...
Im poor, wait? i got no uncle who the fuck is he??
Why for 1 year he's the one been luvin me??
Fuck it, i give up, im just too tired of my fucken life..
shyt i think im crazy cuz i just stabbed my fucken wife...
Oh no! I see my dog, imma bout to do the same to her...
After a minute of stabbing comin out all of her blood jst burst...
Damn it, dis shyt sucks, imma just go somewhere for fun...
Oh i know, go to the beach, cuz all i want is fun in the sun...
Wait, why should i go? my life can't get anymore worst...(Fuck)
I ran a red light, now bein chased by cops wit out a shirt...
damn forget dis shyt, imma just go to the top of dat tree..
Atleast after 1 minutes you'll see a dead guy hanging free...

ight dis was wack..only a couple minutes but w/e... im jst to lazy

u tell me this
how u tell ya kids that u addicted ta drugs
and that ya love ain't enuff ta light a spliff of some bud
and even tho its just weed, its got me spendin up G'z,buyin up keys, and smokin my green amongst theives
I'd rather jack of than fuck bitchesI make it crack off I hit switches, used 2 get crack off run through da snitches
I used 2 bang up da block, da homey cooked up da rock, while i used ta look up da block
4 da popos, I kno my do knos and my don't knos
moved out the duece 4 ta do rap shows
and lost a couple homeys, Mayhem he still wit me, hes an O.G.
29th street Crip, that nigga kno me, and u kno beef it goes deep Rickey J. restin in peace
I spent years tryin ta fight tha tears and I got new problems restin in me
Still cryin overjoysfull tears, still wish Frost and E. was out wit me
so here my suicide note...take care of my kids cause I ain't comin back for years, its my suicide note because my life is a joke so baby please read this letter I wrote
its my suicide note...hold back the tears I'll b back in a couple a years heres my suicide note because my life is a joke so homey please read this letter I wrote
fuck all this bullshit stress & strains on my life
I need a down ass chick so I can make her my wife
but until that day arrives I guess Ib all alone
I'm out here on the grind, tryin ta get mine up in tha zone
and to tell u tha truth dogg it really hurts me inside
to kno I ain't got a chick thats really down 2 ride
2 b by my side until the end of time, til I'm piss ass drunk and can't even see well enough ta tell which drink is mine
but I guess I'll survive... out here hustlin just tryin ta stay alive
don't ever let scandalus bitches come around, cause u know what they'll bring
niggaz from da block up here wit the Glock, tryin ta steal my bling from me
1 things 4 sure I don't ever fuck wit no whores, cause if u fuck 1 freak ho, bound ta fuck wit some more
and thats not cool wit me, I'm still the same old G. that folks knew since back in 19 93
but just 2 let ya kno tho ain't shit really changed, servin em' up on tha block and steady gamin on some strange
cause don't no true bitch wanna keep me 4 real
got my head fucked up, ready 2 clap myself wit the steel
and in these days of time... seems like all I'm doin is straight up losin my mind and there ain't nothin I can do 2 ever get it back
on the block wit the gat, servin up fiends and shootin craps
my sanitys on the line... I've lost my mind and it sends chills up my spine 2 think that the world could've been mine, but instead my life will end at the drop of a dime
but by now all that bullshits in the past, my life ended fast, one squeeze of a trigger and a flash of light, and dogg I passed 2nite, but who r u 2 say its wrong if I'm sayin its right
life don't mean shit 2 me, tho I'm a true O.G., 2 tell u da truth I wasn't who I really wanted 2 b
and it hurts me inside 2 kno deep down that I was just another jeckle & hyde
so here my suicide...note hold back the tears, I'll b back in a couple of years, heres my suicide note because my life is a joke so homey please read this letter I wrote

now yall see my TRUE style and potential!!!!!! -1-

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

i vote on your for no reasons...............................

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

that vote will b dq'd no reason? wtf is that shit?

This was feedback posted for ..::Sinister::..

nice job. never say yours was whack. peepin polls.

Voted For: INFALLIBLE

yo this shit got amazin flow wen u put it on tha real gangstaz by mobb deep beat this shit iz krazii wit all tha punchez an multiz damn but anyway peep my battle against NewKid vote honestly big up`z ta both y'all

Voted For: INFALLIBLE

My vote goes to infallible his multis and wordplay were sick is structure was right on point and verse was juss overall sick. I.mind's drop was super tight in the begining but dropped off at the "high skewl" line structure was way off after that and super strhced for words to rhyme.

Vote - INFALLIBLE

word up thnx for the honest v's here, still uppin tho need some mo ta close this shit out aight -1-

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This was feedback posted for ..::Sinister::..

uppin this battle
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Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

Okay....both were good...man this is the first time i gotta use the break down meth...lol...
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structure:.Dab
Story:.Dab
humor:IN.
Vocab:.Dab
opener:IN
closer:.Dab
overall:Dabatos
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reason:better story all together..and a nice short but good verse...IN...your verse was streched and too long...good job Dabatos ....~1~]

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

dabatos took this in my opinion. I think he hit the topic harder, and made it way more intersting. infallible, i didnt vote for you, cause i felt your verse was rather simplete, and too poorly structure, and I fell alseep 3/4ths of the way. Never type over 30 lines homie. but dabatos got my vote. RTF plz...Links in sig. hit up at least one of em.

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

dabatos-

emotion- could of been stronger but still there.
lyrical content- personnaly I wasn tfeelign the way you spelt certain words wrong.Shyt..dis..comin...cuz...dat...wen...jst.
Its a topical so correct grammar usually helps.
story line-was there but not really strong, but still had one there.
imagery-was good.especially the last line.
originallity-not much to it. you dropped pretty straight forward.
structure- good could of been slightly better but still good.

other guy-
emotion- wasnt really feeling it seen as you wrote more of a mixed up song rather than a deep topical drop.
lyrical content- Isnt strong at all. Nothing that stood out.again words spelt qwrong/slang.to me they dont fit in a topical peice.
story line- not there at all. culdnt even understand if you were still on topic at some points
imagery-couple a lines had some good imagery, but needs to be worked on like a ma'fuckah.
Originality- nothing. There isnt nothing original about your drop.
strusture-a mess,stetched lines,.mixed syllable counts.

vote-dabatos

Voted For: INFALLIBLE

dab-this wasnt your best effort i could tell, ive been readin your topicals for ever..you couldve done way better then this...(we both know that)you had started off good but just got side tracked n it didnt flow as well as i thought it shouldve..srry....but if ya dont put the effort in ya aint gonna get the win(feel me)...srry fam
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fallll.....this was started off real wack but i kept readin cuz your flow was on n stayed pretty consistent(which was weird conbsidering your poor structure)some of your lines are identical to 2pacs shit...but idk....your protrayed this topic well after the opening first couple bars...seemed like it was a real close topic to you............my advice is fix ya structure 4 next tyme...watch your quotable lines and dont repeat bars like a chorus..its a topical...not a song ..but overall i think you wrote the topic better..........
infallible....RTF IN MY SIG..........

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

aight realli i dont like votin on topicalz but imma make a exception

dabatos put more effort into this piece he had some linez dat i could actually picture n mah head i felt as if dabatos had this happen 2 him or sum 1 b4 cuz he had alot of imagery n it his shit was balanced each line followed da otha so dabatos get mah vote 4 havin more imagery n hiz piece

v-dabatos RTF

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

damn this battle was weak.............i see wat u was sayin dabatos about bein wack all that time ago.............ure flow was good, structure on point and shit..........u stayed on topic which is gud cuz sum ppl tend to fall off a little......the vocab was pretty basic, i was feelin most of the verse, times when it was a little boring and lacked feeling, the wordplay was basic, even tho its a topical u can still get a little creative, overall i give it 6/10

infallible.....playa wat the fuck, ure structure was way off, shit was fucked, ure flow was gud in places but a lot of the time it was really choppy..........same as dabatos (sinister) ure vocab was basic, u cud try gettin a bit more complex with that shit. u stayed on topic almost to the fullest, but in parts of ure lines there was bits that didnt really fit....like u'd rather jack of than fuck bitches....dont wanna know that shit, its about suicide...........u need to get more creative with the wordplay to, make the topical sum sick shit........ure shit also was way too long, had me bored outta my head, just wasn't feelin it. overall i give u 4/10

V/ - Sinister (aka Dabatos)

- if you could please return the favour on one of my battles, the links are in the siggy!!! thnx!!!