RymheReaper vs $~Big~Bonks~$
 

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Check in by: 08-20-04 at 01:14 AM

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$~Big~Bonks~$ has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-04 12:35 AM.

RymheReaper has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-04 12:41 AM.

aight im goin to post my verse son good luck yo pc

yo I can tell dat ya new to dis business rymhereaper/
but ya bout to have stars in ya eyes like converse sneakers/
you betta write ya shit down first pick up paper and a bic/
cause you bout to find out my rhymes is sick/
wats wrong wit you dawg did ya dad beat you wit a paddle/
cause you stupid for accepting this battle/
it aint nuttin you could spit 10 lines and i could spit 2/
but it doesn't matter i would still murda you/
i'm sorry i had to murder you and let you down/
but i'ma have to let it go wit a peace out/

Ill sever ya mandable my jaws spit fire like roman candles/
yur chances of winning are so remote they turn tv channles/
Yo burnt your finger by touching my steaming hot verse/
If you wanna beat me you best go back twice and re-hearse/
Yo all i have to do to win is push the reply lever/
Dont you understand you stupid and im clever/
The time you out spit ma verse is approxitemly never/
Yo your wakness is starting to servirly spread around town/
Sounds like your lryics were made for a retarded clown/
Yur talent is sub-par your wack prose belongs in coffe bars/

Uppin yo

Voted For: RymheReaper

WAY TIGHTER, BETTER PUNCHES THAT ACTUALLY HIT, BETTER FLOW, BETTER CLOSE 4 SURE OVERALL U WERE BETTER CUZ

aight thks for the vote

yo infallable
 

yo you no my shit was better dont try to make him feel good

Big BONKS SHUT THA FUCK UP A VOTE ISA VOTE AIGHT MAN

yo rymhereaper i would murder you any day that was my little bro that battled youand i wrote that on their to make him feel good so you shut the fuck up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: RymheReaper

opener - Reaper, bonks was a weak attempt of a punch
closer - Reaper, bonks was wack times 100
punches - Reaper, all of bonks were weak and wack
personals - Neither had any
vocab - Reaper, Bonks most tech word was his opponents name!
structure - Tie, both were aiight
multies - Reaper by default because he bairly had one in his opener...
metas - Neither had any

Weak battle for bonks, elevate on everything man, only thing I thought was ok on yours was structure...
Reaper, well done, you came out strong than you had to, to beat this cat. You won because of hard punches, good structure, and an alright vocab, well done...

thks for dat vote keep'em uppin yall

Please return the favor with an honest vote/feed as i have done for yours... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...t=141141&page=3

Voted For: RymheReaper

yoyoyoyoyo, battle was straight, Mr. Bonks ova there was wak fo real, keep writin man.... He was talkin like he had won already, caue he wasn't sayin nuttin.... I was feelin reaper. The first bar
"Ill sever ya mandable my jaws spit fire like roman candles/
yur chances of winning are so remote they turn tv channles/"
fiya..... near the end u kinda fell off, but keep it up

Voted For: RymheReaper

your good ur great..........................9.4/10

uppin yo

Voted For: RymheReaper

Sorry dude but Im gon have to give this one to
RymheReaper

his punchlines were just knockin him out even though both were good
His flow was heavenly and
his wordplay just killed him
Very good battle

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

uppin yo

This was feedback posted for RymheReaper
 

All Rhymereaper I Cant Raise Da Bar// But Rhymereaper U Won Dis Fo Sho Mayne Punches Killing It Mayne

~peace~

Yo Rhymereaper Can U Raise Da Bar On My Battle Against Upfront

uppin yo

uppin yo

Voted For: RymheReaper

rhyme reaper took this battle bcuz his structure was on point and he had the best punch in the whole battle>(Ill sever ya mandable my jaws spit fire like roman candles/
yur chances of winning are so remote they turn tv channles)
im not gonna say to take off the lil slashes at the end cuz i think those help but erebody else on here says its "newbish" so i guess those have to go but u had better vocab n and ight attempt at multies Big bonks verse was pretty wack it was real basic n the structure was reall lackin just work on that n elevate ur vocab
holla at me
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