Raptor vs ProVerse
 

Battle Rules:

10 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 10

Check in by: 08-24-04 at 12:45 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Raptor has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-04 12:46 PM.

Hello I'm ProVerse, I like tuh fuck-just ask Merc
But we aint gay guys, Cuz bo'fus is bitches in skirts/

And if you buh'zerk, Beware pump heels can hurt
Plus I'll cut that ass, Wit muh glas compac in muh purse/

I'm puttin in work, Wit guns?-Nah wit johns who work
See Om nuh kinna jerk, Who jaksoff- wit other mens worms/

I'm highly disturbed, It started back when I first learned
Wile wearin mommys furs, My dad was gay & donated sperm/

Thats why I wear perms, An makeup when I rap online
My tuff exteriuh, Is nut'n more than cheap dis'guise'/

And speakin uh 'guys', Remember eddie murphy ya'll
Got caught witta Transvestite,-Well I'm that broad!/

My money is gone, I could'nt afford tuh sever muh cord
So I started 'rappin 4 fudd', wit paper signs & uh board/

I thought I was War, Until I got murduh'd by Tor
He waited in my car, Shot me when I opened the door/

I fell tuh duh groun', Would U believe he shot me su'more?!!
Cleat'd up my crown, Leff me lyin stiff on the floor!!/

Like six sense-I'm dead now, But did'nt know it before
Because Tor made, Mr. ProVerse no more/

ProVerse has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-20-04 06:16 PM.

sparring a "leaf eater", "beef" with you measured in "minis"
"prehistoric lyrics", your words get free meals at dennys
intrest in your words loss after your 1st line,waste of ya time
like unfound "fossils" nobody wit shovels couldn't dig ya rhymes
even the valcano tragity, didn't influese you to spit fire
swollowed motlen "rock",but you still a "pebble" no one desires
a minmised version of Rex, hopeng for a growth spert
still small time, your species limit growth,skills buried in "dirt"
this boy here faces extinction, wins you will never return him
losses engraved on you, like your internal met your external


whew lol lets see some votes iight? will return favor

~1~

yo wassup wit da votes?

uppin again

Voted For: ProVerse

ok raptor no personals just weak ass punches that aint hit and madd corny gay jokes structure was good flow was a little off very weak verse2/10
proverse alot of personals they aint hit as ahrd as they should but they hit good here and nice punches just work on vocab a little good flow and nice structure5/10

Voted For: ProVerse

ok raptor no personals just weak ass punches that aint hit and madd corny gay jokes structure was good flow was a little off very weak verse2/10
proverse alot of personals they aint hit as ahrd as they should but they hit good here and nice punches just work on vocab a little good flow and nice structure5/10

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Voted For: ProVerse

ok raptor no personals just weak ass punches that aint hit and madd corny gay jokes structure was good flow was a little off very weak verse2/10
proverse alot of personals they aint hit as ahrd as they should but they hit good here and nice punches just work on vocab a little good flow and nice structure5/10

Voted For: Raptor

WOW. That was a ill verse Raptor. Sounded like suin Eminem would say. That was tite cuz you went into the position like he was talkin. Good shit mayn. Punches and disses towards him were tite. Pros was alright. Some of the punches were played, but the pebble one was sick. Good structures and flows on both. Pretty even in that catagory. Raptor just took it with harder punches and disses. Raptor gets it.

Vote-Raptor

^^ is u serious lol

it was kool
but eminem nah

good vote tho

uppin for votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: Raptor

raptor u a sick mutha fucka but u win dis battle lol
lines was iight and ya flo was nice

proverse i wasnt feelin it////jus betta ya flow a lil and use bigger wrds and ull b tight

vote=raptor



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^^ are you sure that was my verse?


i used bigger words then HIM

make sure dat its my verse u readin man

Voted For: ProVerse

Proverse got this easy

Raptor wack as fuck, didnt like the way you spelled out certain werds and shit, basic lines with boring and pointless attempts at punches. And your personals you tried to use sucked as well. What the fuck was you talkin about in this battle

Proverse, better flow , wordplay , structre, better orginality.
your shit wanst that good, but i felt it was better than his and better to read

Thanx 4 all the critiques, both for and against me, they really help. Thanx"G" & Upfront, I'm glad ya'll got what I did-it went over sum of the others though, I guess. Thanx Empire & Ice Pick 4 your critiques as well, but I do want to point out the fact that 1 of u( Ice Pick) sed I had personals, albeit wack 1's, and the other sed there were none(Empire.) Which of u is right? I don't know but Ice Pick has more posts and wins (a better record) so I'm inclined to go with him (no hate E.) One more thing 'E', did u judge my by the Voting Rubric in the tutorial? NOW 2 ALL VOTERS PLEASE READ THE VOTING RULES POSTED AND THE VOTING RUBRIC POSTED BY THE REALIST IN THE 'TUTORIAL' SO YOU CAN ADDRESS EACH 1. I wrote a book, nufsed.

Voted For: ProVerse

lol

Opener: Proverse-i liked it Raptors sucked
Closer: Pro- Was better
Multi: None
Punches: Proverse- they hit harder
Structure: proverse- was good but need to fix it more


weak battle but proverse gots it

uppin yet again!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thanx 4 all da crits

Voted For: ProVerse

yo
punches=proverse
metas=proverse
multis=proverse
flow=raptor
begin=proverse
end=raptor
/v/=Proverse

uppin for votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

uppin 4 votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

YO FUKC ALL THAT RUBRIC SHIT I SED B 4, WHAT DOES IT MATTER? I DON'T KNOW ANYMORE AND DON'T CARE. WHAT I DO CARE ABOUT IS, THE FACT THAT A QUACKASS MUTHAFUKA(EMPIRE) WHO DUCKD ME IS TRYN TUH JUDGE ME, SO 4 ALL FUTURE VOTERS, ENJOY SEEING WUT THIS BITCH DODGE ME OVER:

Fuk empire! Eagle Merk Pussies In Rap Easy
'Specially fukin 'Imp's, On 'Pyres' my fires gleaming

Cuz I bring, Terror like 'Turbans' N air machine'ree
And horror to the face of NewYorkers, On TV grieving

I'm killer, a "NYNJA" New York New Jersey Assassin
Shoot 'Adam' in the 'Apple', Wit 'Brick's in the 'City' stash 'em

U fear me-Like Whites, when there's Arabs in air traffik
I penetrate the 'Empire State', Like 'twin Towers'

I'm Luke Sky-Returned as Jedi, Smashin 'Empires'
Or France, When they killed 'Ristocratic & Pompous Hi-ups

Better still, The Greeks at Marathon fightin 'Dare-I-Us'
No wait! How bout Visigoths, Set'n Roman streets afire

All instances, of people rebellin in uprisin's
What do we share in common?, We fuk'd up an 'Empire'

Now Fuk this!, Enuf this lame shit!-U fukin coward
I'M 'KING OF EMPIRES'!!, But Yours is fallin down now

So 'Empress'-no more talkin shit!, I got my gun out
!!POWWW!! Oh shit it went off!!, Don't fukin fall down!!

Whoa Shit!!-Ya'll SEE THAT!! His Spirit jus ran & leapt out!
His Big Mouth-I Squat down right over him, 'Scuse the shit soun

raptor dont get pissed jus cuz you losin

uppin for some votes....................................

Voted For: ProVerse

Proverse gave it 2 TOR his wordplay
was ill gotta give him da battle
TOR dont get me wrong yo shit was
good but not goood enuff diss time
vote on my battles in my sig i voted on
ya battle

Voted For: ProVerse

im gonna have to give htis to you...i was feelin that fossil line...no one can dig oyu..that was hot.......your verse was lot easier to read...your rhymes also just flowed better to...good meta4s and personals i like how you played offf his name...................raptor you lose from the begining you should of had a better opening