Paramik vs The Black Plague
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No D/R Votes
No Biting

Please check into this one, i waited for like 4 days, so you should be able to do it this time...



Minimum posts to vote: 150

Check in by: 08-25-04 at 10:05 PM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

IIIGht but lets both of us do 6 lines and if you exeed it your automaticly DQ'ed

and no personals only punches that connect with the whole verse cos i hat ersonals

Naw naw man, regular battles, i dont want a gay little 6 line punch battle... that shit aint a true battle...

We gon diss our opponent, 10-15 lines... that little punchline shit is wack

ok fine......

The Black Plague has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-24-04 09:23 PM.

The Black Plague has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-24-04 09:25 PM.

I seen ya other verses, ya "structure" is off like that of the leanin tower of Piza
You not on my level..I'm "Everywhere You Want To Be" like ya credit card Visa
"Like A Pimp" wit Lil' Flip i'll drop a verse, and leave this "Ho on tha floor"*
You dont get respect...You get hit up more than the local dealers door
Para you from Florida? Battle'd me and i knocked you out like Hurrican Charlie
You try to shatter my ego, but Im like B.Willis from unbreakable..U can't scar me**
Ya last battles have been 2 liners... cuz you can only come up wit 1 line at a time
You read my verse and it leveled you, like you sniffin pain't...It's fryin ya mind
I can see by your avvy that you hittin keys in a desperate attempt to contest
But you winnin this battle would be unlikely, like homeless men bein put udner house arest
Kid thinks he gansta, but he's only "Strapped" when he puts on his velcro Sped shoes***
I KO'd this fool, leavin his ass passed out, gassed, harassed like holocostal dead jews

*A while back Banner and Flip did a song "Like A Pimp" wit lyrics like "Lets get these ho's on tha flo"

**Bruce Willis was in a movie called unbreakable, where he never got hurt...he survived a train wrek without a scratch

***Retards where special Strap On velcro shoes..Lol its mean but its a punch

ok i'll TRY to get a time to post my verse im crammed with shit

God damn, i hate this new battle thing... u never know when ya struc will be off, cuz you cant judge the length of ya lines... Oh well

i ki ki know same wuith me i'll check in later cos im merking another bitch in another site
i promise ill get back to u and ill spit then this will be a good battles

Paramik has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-25-04 08:22 PM.

This wack textcee thinks he can beat me, I'll bring out my rifle.
Cause Black Plague thought he could steal verses by owning a bible.
Bitch claims he is the earthquake, but I already got his ass shook.
He couldn't drop hot rhymes, if he fell in love with a poetry book.
Must be lying, says he 18 but spit wack, I know this kids in youth.
Speaks the truth?, but said more lies than in the Movie “Phone Booth.”
Fags like a dull pencil, I’ll sharpen him so he can better “get the point.”
My lines could get this guy “moving out”, even if he’s an immovable joint.
Like losing AOL connections, “BPs” punches can’t ever “connect.”
Thought he could make his lines stronger, by putting special effects.
I bet he wouldn’t want to kill me if he joined the Ku Klux Klan. *
And Black Plague can’t even throw a killing punch, if he was Rayman. *



Im black and if you don’t knoe rayman is a game in which he attacks by punching
BP connect is a gas station and his intials is B.P.

Nice drop man... Let's get some votes people

Voted For: The Black Plague

nice battle fellas,
plague~your opener was strong, i liked the credit card line, it was funny, so was the structure line, you had harder punches in this battle, although you should work on ya structure,but overall you used good multies as well,ima give this to you because of punches..
paramik~nice verse, good structure, but i dont think you had as hard punches here as BP,good flow tho, you both did well
vote:black

Voted For: Paramik

V/ Paramik

He didnt come stretched...so it read better...punches connected and were delivered well....funny meta's that hit hard....more complex verse...Black was okay but he came way too stretched... both of yah need to not "use" "quotes"....lol

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Voted For: Paramik

yo dis goes to paramik n heres how

Paramik- had good strcuture but u need to stop wi tthe paragragh thing dawwg, umwordplay 7/10, vocab 7/10
struc 6/10, flo 8/10, punches 6/10

the black plague- u had good metas n u had those punches but it broke down like this wordplay 6/10, vocab 8/10, struc 7/10 flo 4/10 n den punches 5/10

v/paramik

yalll return da votes

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upping please vote honestly

Voted For: Paramik

i gotta give this ta para he had more original punches n his structure was more consistent some decent lines from both
bp your opener was kinda played but the rest of your verse was pretty decent jus was'nt feeling it as much as para's personal plays off your name.....close battle but my vote goes ta para

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Voted For: Paramik

lol, this was a funny battle:

Para: Your shyt was funny as hell, better struc, not strectched, and just had alot bettere punches...

Black: basicly, u need to do better on everything..punches, structure, and u shoould try doing prsonoals next time....

vote: paramik

plz return honest vote:
Crew Battle: Class Sic Vs. L.R.I.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=144972

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please vote upping 3 or 4

Voted For: Paramik

paramik had itcuz his punchlines were harder and he had good personals... structure is ok....
BP yo had weak punches dude and yo structure was off...

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Upping 4 please vote

Voted For: The Black Plague

Paramik
structure is good.. flow is on target.. u had a few multis.. wordplay was decent,at best.. some of it was played, some of it just sucked.. a few of ur punches connected.. decent personals..

The Black Plague
structure isnt very good.. most of ur lines were stretched.. flow fell off due to the stretchness.. good multis.. wordplay was dope.. a few of ur punches connected.. personals were alright..

Overall
Paramik had the better structure.. and the more stable flow.. both had decent personals.. both had a few connecting punches.. The Black Plague had more multis.. and better wordplay.. so basing off of that.. The Black Plague gets my vote for a better overall verse..

VOTE - THE BLACK PLAGUE

you can't vote your in my crew IDIOT LOL JP but you cant vote

^^ He's in my crew too... We are all in the same crew, so it don't matter if he votes

a yo!!!!
 

I'ont kno y I don't have a post vote spot on the screen, but I don't. So the v goes 2 BP cause he had better flow, harder hittin punches, multis, metas, openr too. Par got him in the closer and in structure, but the struc. is cause u can't really tell with that small ass box ta drop ya verse in. n e how the v goes 2 BP aight -1-

Voted For: Paramik

The Black Plague-nice verse. your structure was off, flow was coo, punches coulda been better but they were still good.you put some personals in their that were ok. some lines were kinda self glorification tho. metas were ehh. work on the structure a lil more and the punches a lil more.....7/10

Paramik-structure was real nice, punches were tight, overall nice. but the personal about bp connect was weak as fuck, i know it had potential but just didnt connect at all. metas were coo, wordplay was coo, basically only won because of slightly better punches....7.5/10

yall both know you can do better. RTF..links in the sig.

v//paramik

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Nice battle both of ya .

Voted For: Paramik

Paramik wins...killed it with some ight personals and better punches....BP had some played ish and wasn't as dope

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Blah?? this is still on?? haah
o well upping if it is still on

upping please vote

Voted For: Paramik

vote:Paramik

reasons why i voted for you:

1.tight asss punches
really liked hoe complex they were

2. nice wordplay:
that BP line was good and so was the bible one

3.structure:
very easy to read
(BP's was choppy)

4.overall loved the verse

good job mayn

check my battles when they finnaly SPIT!!!!

lol
~1~

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Voted For: Paramik

Im Votin For Paramik, Cuz His Punches Were Harder, Flow Was Aight, Structure Pretty Decent, Both Of There Rhymes Were Okay But Para Came A Lil Harder With It Tho

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gatdamn peeps postin bad feedbacks

Voted For: The Black Plague



Good battle....Para your flow was good, and your structure was good but punches and personals were weak, the BP line was the most creative but still just eh, didn't really see any multies and a few metas but nothing great.

Plague....your flow wasn't great and the structure was bad but you made up for it with creative punches, personals were kinda weak but punches were nice, metas were good, didn't really have multies, but decent drop

Flow: para
Structure: Para
PUnches: Plague
Opener: Plague
Closer: Plague
Metas: Plague
Creativity: Plague

Vote: Plague

Voted For: Paramik

aiiiiiiiiiight

paramik got this...

more complex wordplay n better personals, not as good punches as i've seen ya drop paramik, but on the whole a decent drop......the only thing u lack is maybe the humur in ya rhymes, but if that aint ya style, it aint ya style (nobodys gonna fault ya for it)
decent drop on the whole...u got my vote..

aiiiight, the opener was nice n hit real hard, but uhmmm....paramik had the better structure lol, but yea, real nice opener, wasnt really feelin the lil flip line, kinda played ot man....that cost u big in my opinnon, but still, some decent metas n punches, lacked personals in my opinnon, it was an aight drop tho, keep em comin...

p e a c e

Voted For: The Black Plague

ima have to give this one to u dawg....cant be a d/r or hate vote cuz both are in Mindz Kollide...i just think BP punches were a LIL betta...just becuz they were some funny punches too..ya opener was good...betta then P's...closer goes to Black..seein as thought it was a lil funny...not really hard to get on challenged peeps...but still it was betta...both had some personals so ima have to give this to black on punches...o yea...yall stay active in the forum now

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Voted For: Paramik

aight you got this battle on lock....

paramix: aight you need to work a lil harder next itm ebecuz that was kinda wack.......lbut good battle thought you need to work a lil harder i no you came come better than this......but just actaully try next time..i no he was wack but still you need to try hard eveerytime.....

BLACK: you was all over the place with those strechted lines...just work on oyur structure and you will be 50 percent better...and also work on your neta4s and personals...everyone loves a good personal.......but next time aplly yourself more.....

vote=paramix

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WTF this was explained and shit...^^^