I'm The King Of Punch lines #2
 

I'm The King Of Punch lines #2

Even as a carpenter you couldn’t hammer the grammar
Or nail the flavor with stale behavior just a sad mamma jamma
Your use of words is abuse to herds of readers can’t speak or write
Too weak to fight saw you on the street last night living in fright
You not thug just a slop scrub say what wanna a girl in the hot tub?
Not aware of details never share females you be bent in events in clubs
Look kid you need chrome hummers to get phone numbers
And love letters from ladies and some Mercedes just a cucumber
Won’t root her garden

You rhyme dreary even with Einstein theory wouldn’t be atomic
With Ebonics so ironic how your formula not supersonic
Like Walter Payton you falter creating lyrics sipping gin and tonic
Putting legit restrictions on your bits of fictions rhymes sound chronic

You try hustles with bad eye muscles you don’t see straight
And never be great so why debate like a whack candidate?
Don’t accept bribes but you need help with scribes don’t hate

?? where da punchlines at dogg...lmaooo i aint see nun

^^lol where are the punches man lol you suck bad haha thinks hes the best at punches you cant say that triple N is and then im Mr. PunchLines ill hurt you man yu got nun on me and youve been in this site for longer then me aha and im 14 haha

HA! HA! HA! yall cats listen up and read this is a punchline

You rhyme dreary even with Einstein theory wouldn’t be atomic
With Ebonics so ironic how your formula not supersonic
Like Walter Payton you falter creating lyrics sipping gin and tonic
Putting legit restrictions on your bits of fictions your rhymes sound chronic

um not realy a punchline is when yer dissingf someone buddy like this:

madraper is crap he says he spits punchlines/
but aint got time to even shine and spit his lines/.

and plus that just sucked so bad what i wrote but its better then yer song lol

BrOTheRP.A.R.A. you contradicting yourself hell I'm dissing the fuck out of somebody but my vocab is years ahead of that simple diss you wrote

om buddy you might be older then me but trust me i can out battle you dont start shit i could merk you plus i dont want no beef i was just making a state ment

BrOTheRP.A.R.A. well make sense don't look fake and dense trying make yourself look big man get some vocab please

honestly neither one of yous can drop punchlines for one i didnt see any in this lil "flow" and HOEtheRPA or what ever he fucking is you cant even rap so dont even lidten to him madd rapper.....yall wanna read a punchline......here

im gonna drop something and ill show you punchlines iight make sure you read it you can thate all you want but im gonna show the real punchlines iight fellas

fuck punch lines, im too drunk to drop lines, so when i rap im heard, drunk on stage perved, and fuck structure, im dumb enough to jus cut cha,

Punchlines? Thats All I Got To Say Peeps Fresh Ya Boy

stuff be hitting on four corners thanks for the props and critique

work on ya punches.....
come more creative and witty with them N make ya following bar more hard hitting....
some basic lines some more decent then others.....

but keep praticesing....

give me feed back on my drop... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=144597

thanks fo rthe props and critique

Your punches were wack.

You should die now.

word

i aint see no real punchlines on the real i just seen an attempt at creativitie an wordplay no goood punchs in this piece to me so kind of a bad title for this piece

overall 4/10 elevate or try a different type of piece :thumbup:

aw hell those punchlines were hitting cats everywhere but under the bottom of the feet yall give it up thanks for responding and critiqueing doe

Yo maddrapper nice punches hommie,,,
Heres something I just thought I would put in ,,being that you're my hommie an all.
Here's some punch lines I would use in a battle ,,,not really though,,
because there to simple,,but you get the point when you read them though.

I spit better verses,,, when I had snuff in my mouth!!
An I really dont give a fuck about who's putting me down!
Im the bank bitch,,,,,So that means im taking your house!
Putting a lean on you're shit,,so you can get the fuck out!!

Its not all that good,,,but there are 2 punches in it though.

alrite crap

i am the king!!! jp

1. 5MICMEDALLION thanks for the props on this not bad punchlines

2. for rhyme reaper and rhyme4ever you have to show something talk is cheap so taqke this nickel and buy chewing gum HA! HA! HA!

Nice catches, nice flow. My only advice is the advice I offered in your other thread about combining the lines and perhaps separating it (to stress the rhyme) with slashes ("/") ..

Wow...you steal my title then drop those lines, there wasn't 1 punch present....if you gon try to bite off my alias you gotta come correct, they were somewhat creative but not punches, try writing poetry cuz you got ok wordplay

1. Ms.Skillz4daze thanks for the advice gonna try that

2. come on man you didn't title yours that way that just come off the top of my head if really so I apologize for real

Herres a few lines incase you think im still crap biitch!!


1}I can out rap haters in two ways.....now an christmas

2}You couldn't out spit a fish,,,If you had water in you're veins

3}I drop better flows,,So who the fuck waisting!
I got more punch lines then you got in you're whole life saving!

4}You couldn't come back with a better punch line,,if you're name was reverse

5} better yet,,,,heres a line I wrote in one of my flows
I drop harder bars then laxatives do bitches on ass holes!!!

~warnning~!!

Things not to say to me before you know me!!!


alrite crap
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~VERDICT~
Always remember you're not ready,,,So get your weight before trying to gain on me
bitch!!!!

5MICMEDALLION not very good punchlines well ask somebody else hell i could be wrong doe

none
 

none,,,look down

eraced
 

look down :evilgrin:

yea you're right,
You are wronge there nice punch lines,,I think yall got the wrong idea of what punch lines are,,,its like telling a joke,,but being witty at it,,,,
But you're using it in a flow,,,,its like saying,,, some thing like this

~would you like me to get you a laxative,,,because none of yall doing shit~




Now if you understand that,,,we're getting some where,,,
Some times a punch line dont have to ryhme,,,,some thing like this


Im like a piece of pie in a prize fight,,
Every bite is a winner

~Class dismissed~
You're all lucky,,,,I guess you were saved by the bell,,,,lol

Need I repeat my self,,,lol,,,,naw,,,forreal though,,,
you have to look an understand it, before you judge it,,
If you dont understand it,,,doesn't mean its not a good punch line
ask first i'll always explain....
God bless all...1

no need for questions its just too simple it don't rhyme clearly nothing on the higher level study and improve your vocab

So what are you saying?
You're better then me hommie,,,lol,,,,
Im going to pretend you didn't say nothing at all....
LMFAO

wow mad, u bus be part of the bam crew... u fuckin dope.
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completely joking

pictureperfect2 thanks for the props for real on this

This sucks.

Go home.

If any one feeling froggy then jump...LMFAO!!!!!!

I eat your brain.

Like I said,,jump!

Questions
 

Look hommie,,,I got a question for you,,,
why is all you're post on this intire site all talk an no post?,,,
Meaning spitting on the boards period! :cussing:
I'll tell you why,,,because you live by you're name,,But cant write one word!
So how the fuck you gone eat some ones brains,,,when you cant eat a flow?
:laugh2:
Tell me that Rookie of the month,,,or should I say year,,,,,
One more thing,,,why are you asking people to join you're forums
I hope that dont mean another site,,because thats advertising over some one elses boards,,,an you could be banned for that,, :evilgrin:

So lets hope thats not what that is,,,,Mr.i'll eat you're brain.....
But if it is true,,,,,,It will no longer be my concern,, :nono:
so who studdered?,,,,,you're not Reuben,,or Usher,,,
but there is a lesson to be learned,,,so let it burn :thumbup: