Empire vs Tachyonic Vokals
 

Battle Rules:

6 -12 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No Feeding
No Links

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 09-01-04 at 04:05 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-29-04 04:06 AM.

Ok I accept but you spit first, how 'bout that, but if "no" then i'll go...

Also, so i won't have to waste time, Both of us should have our verses in by 12AM midnight...

Tachyonic VoKals has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-29-04 06:02 PM.

Sorry, man, my bad for not accepting it...
Agree on this by PM or post "let's have both our verses due today by 12 midnight since tomorow will be school"

fine ill write later :thumbup: no feeding is in the rules so who drops first dont matter

Iight then lets keep it this way...
Umm i don't feed and I won't...
Midnight 12 midnight and we have the same timezone so, if your late the extension is 30 mins...
May the best Person win!!!!

ok i agree especially since we all know that will be me :laugh:

My 'verbs' 'X'out 'herbs' like 'Belly' fan of 'Nelly' look at his 'handle'
Either dont know rap or you 'gay' either 'way'they should 'ban you'(1)

No 'way' this like 'N.B.A' and you no more then a 'munchkin'
You get 'left sun' think ya 'percept shun' is in need of 'adjustment'(2)

'Grammer' say you clap 'hammers' rock 'bandanaas' and 'bag whores'
But you never held a 'mag' yous a 'fag' and thats why ya pants 'sag for'(3)

Never 'scuffled' most 'trouble' you seen was 'shop lifting'
Still 'waiting' ya 'elevation' like trash weed its 'not lifting'

FINISHER-
13 cant 'drive' cant 'survive' without ya mommy to 'run you'
So 'fuck words' im gonna 'fuck her' be ya daddy then 'son you'(4)

EXLANATIONS-
1)'X' stared in 'Belly' little metaphore and his last name is 'VOKAL' thats a 'Nelly' clothing line and he either he dont know rap or hes gay cuz thats the only ways he can like 'Nelly'
2)his old name is precept shun and i overshadow him like a munchinkin in the n.b.a
3)he talks madd gansta shit but hes only 13 and he only sags his pants cuz hes gay and wants people to see his ass
4)hes only 13 he cant do shit withour his mommy she runs him so im gonna fuck her and be his daddy

I could tell this guy’s pussy and weak, gave up on his OWN crew.
It’s like forgetting to return books, cause his rhymes are overdue.
This kid must be a big joke, he'll die when he's smoked like coke.
Guy’s probably just breaking his bread, except he’s “bar broke.”
This is like a game, but I bet he still couldn't get a play on words.
He needs to balance all his fucking “lines”... like telemarketers.
Thought this kid was hard, but only cause he’s lines are stone aged.
Old as fuck, thought he was made a vet, but bitch was never made.
Bet this kids gonna be rushing out of the battle, like classes dismissing.
Kid’s like failing planes, brings the fact his punches are always “missing.”

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

syck multies man

OK... Good we both did 10 lines...
Good battle...
except your making Fake Personals saying that: he talks madd gansta shit but hes only 13 and he only sags his pants cuz hes gay and wants people to see his ass
O well but they won't see this... so it doesn't matter...

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Voted For: Tachyonic VoKals

empire- weak punches. iight flow and structure, wordplay was there but it wasnt very good. sorry. youre definatlt getting better but youre just not at a top level yet. elevate on ya punches son.lol........6/10

T.K.- nice personals and punches which would win you the battle alone but you also had great structure and flow also. elevate a lil bit on the wordplay and metas.hot shit tho....8.5/10

v//tachyonic vokals

^he only voted for you cuz i voted aganist him homo shit but who cares thats what homos do---BLACKLISTED

Blah, Good Info on votes, Upping...

Voted For: Empire

Sry vokals but empire took it his punches were hot flaming urs was decent his flow metas shit hot all over

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This was feedback posted for Tachyonic VoKals
 

wait wut w/e i aint votin im just checkin the score on this battle

This was feedback posted for Tachyonic VoKals
 

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Voted For: Tachyonic VoKals

since both ya'll's verses sucked, and neither of ya'll had a single punch that hit at all im votin for this cat who didn't have explinations almost as long as his verse.

return the vote with a better explanation than me on my emergingmc battle. please......... one

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tach, u said alot of shit that weren't punches like........

cause his rhymes are overdue.

having over due w/e aint a punch, but ya dont battle people in BAM, they're all a bunch of dickriding fagets.... as u can see from my battle if u checkit out.

Voted For: Empire

I could tell this guy’s pussy and weak, gave up on his OWN crew.
It’s like forgetting to return books, cause his rhymes are overdue.
^^ok setup..week punch n ok personal...5/10
This kid must be a big joke, he'll die when he's smoked like coke.
Guy’s probably just breaking his bread, except he’s “bar broke.”
ok....6.5/10
This is like a game, but I bet he still couldn't get a play on words.
He needs to balance all his fucking “lines”... like telemarketers.
good...7/10
Thought this kid was hard, but only cause he’s lines are stone aged.
Old as fuck, thought he was made a vet, but bitch was never made.
^^6/10
Bet this kids gonna be rushing out of the battle, like classes dismissing.
Kid’s like failing planes, brings the fact his punches are always “missing.”
^^ok...but was a weak finisher...6/10
overall 30.5/50



My 'verbs' 'X'out 'herbs' like 'Belly' fan of 'Nelly' look at his 'handle'
Either dont know rap or you 'gay' either 'way'they should 'ban you'(1)
^^bad rhyme..good personal..6/10
No 'way' this like 'N.B.A' and you no more then a 'munchkin'
You get 'left sun' think ya 'percept shun' is in need of 'adjustment'(2)
^^was'nt feelin it...5/10
'Grammer' say you clap 'hammers' rock 'bandanaas' and 'bag whores'
But you never held a 'mag' yous a 'fag' and thats why ya pants 'sag for'(3)
^^ok 6/10
Never 'scuffled' most 'trouble' you seen was 'shop lifting'
Still 'waiting' ya 'elevation' like trash weed its 'not lifting'
^^good..7/10
FINISHER-
13 cant 'drive' cant 'survive' without ya mommy to 'run you'
So 'fuck words' im gonna 'fuck her' be ya daddy then 'son you'(4)
^^ok personal....6.5/10

overall 30.5/50

aight this was a weak battle in my opinion both tied on punches n shit but with flow n structure left there the deciding factors...which are simular,im gonna go with empire he had better thought out punches....

Voted For: Tachyonic VoKals

Ight...

Tach i was feelin the flo..you didnt have to take it to a different level of structure, you hit punches n a scheme which flowed tight it was dope..

Metas,Flo,Punches: Tach
Structure, personals: Empire

Vote: Tach

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Voted For: Tachyonic VoKals

Vokals:
i like the flow it was nice and easy.
nice personnals and punches
nice opener clor was ok
complexity was good not to much and not to little

Empire:
didn't like the space after the bars of the #'s
didn't get the punches
no opener closer was ok

Vokals won

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Voted For: Empire

hmmmm pretty decent battle

T.V.:
nice opener-flow was good and sturc. too
but alotta your punches een used over and over
............and over and over.....again
so it gave me alotta flashbacks and it ruined your verse :(

Empire:

ok good flow this time-punches were original
except for the last line- it wsa bout his momma
and his age so it been played-
but you only had one and he had alot
so you win with punches

vote/Empire

Voted For: Empire

opener-empire
structure-empire
punches-vokals
metas-vokals
overal flow- empire
closer-empire

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Voted For: Empire

My 'verbs' 'X'out 'herbs' like 'Belly' fan of 'Nelly' look at his 'handle'
Either dont know rap or you 'gay' either 'way'they should 'ban you'(1)
^all good

No 'way' this like 'N.B.A' and you no more then a 'munchkin'
You get 'left sun' think ya 'percept shun' is in need of 'adjustment'(2)
^hotness
'Grammer' say you clap 'hammers' rock 'bandanaas' and 'bag whores'
But you never held a 'mag' yous a 'fag' and thats why ya pants 'sag for'(3)
^no punch here man

Never 'scuffled' most 'trouble' you seen was 'shop lifting'
Still 'waiting' ya 'elevation' like trash weed its 'not lifting'
^alright.
FINISHER-
13 cant 'drive' cant 'survive' without ya mommy to 'run you'
So 'fuck words' im gonna 'fuck her' be ya daddy then 'son you'(4)
^for real tight closer.

Tachyonic Vokals

I could tell this guy’s pussy and weak, gave up on his OWN crew.
It’s like forgetting to return books, cause his rhymes are overdue.
^boo no punch man. Where's the insult in the punch?
This kid must be a big joke, he'll die when he's smoked like coke.
Guy’s probably just breaking his bread, except he’s “bar broke.”
^decent
This is like a game, but I bet he still couldn't get a play on words.
He needs to balance all his fucking “lines”... like telemarketers.
^damn this soft.
Thought this kid was hard, but only cause he’s lines are stone aged.
Old as fuck, thought he was made a vet, but bitch was never made.

Bet this kids gonna be rushing out of the battle, like classes dismissing.
Kid’s like failing planes, brings the fact his punches are always “missing.”

Really don't wanna finish critiquing Vokal line by line cause his verse was making me mad it was boring me do deaf. no punches. Seem like you put effort into it but just not measuring up to empire. Similes were weak and kind of childs play, which makes sense cause you only 13, right?

Anyway, Empire showed more overall skill with nice structure, flow and style. He got this one easily.

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Voted For: Tachyonic VoKals

real close battle give it 2 Tac dough
his flow was a lil batter his wordplay was koo
n his punches hit in sum areas

Empire good flow but sum of ur punches didn't hit 2 well
n da wordplay was ok not good enuff diss time
i liked da closer dough
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