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mic-wrecker vs ILLegitimate
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UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Feeding Topic: A POW in iraq w/ schizophernia Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 09-04-04 at 09:27 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
mic-wrecker has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-01-04 09:28 PM.
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ILLegitimate has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-01-04 09:38 PM.
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Eyes always behind you
voices in your head just remind you You wanna try and escape but you know that you shouldnt but with all those voices in your head you knew that you couldn't Turn away from that awful day Ak upside the head now your vision is fadin grey Now they got you tied to a seat, you not knowing what they say Speaking a different language you over-hear Them whispering in the corner “lets tag him in the rear” Now you can barely sleep, cause of the nightmares Iraq is busy droppin bombs and all you can do is drop prayers Your scared, hoping maybe next time you’ll get spared They made you this way, drove you straight to despair Staring at the ceiling at night cause you think about the sexual affairs Bush is at home knowing that prison is being abused don’t let the Iraqi’s do what they want, you’ll end up bruised This prisons made you crazy, a lunatic, insane Your life’s completely different, nothing at all is the same Everyone is yelling at you in your head saying your schizophrenic |
i didnt accept these rules, i said 45 minutes, not three days, why didtn you keep wiht the same rules from before?
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keepin da rules mayne im gettin off now i'll do it n the mornin
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clearly i remember the special ops mission clutchin my state of the art rifle//
walkin the streets of baghdad full of fear prayin to god an his diciples// wonderin an lookin for my enemy vividly, finger stuck to the trigga thinkin im ready for anything they'll b senidin me// then all of a sudden out of the blue spring an ambush from the dark// six taliban, heavily armed iraqi soujaz pull out gunz an then they bark// some alien tongue n unison i dont no...but one of em speak english// yellin get the fuc on the ground drop yo weapon an this shit'll b painless// im blackin out....my feet an legs get bound,old potato bag hides my face to keep me from lookin round// once to they place da bag reveals my once camoflagued face//laced wit tears, reality creaps in negatin any plans to escape// im tossed n a cell with the only belongins b'n the clothes on my back//days pass on like minutes slowly my clean shavin face grows back// time has no relevance to me, days pass an at nights voices begin to talk to me// am i consoius i see visions of my wife an son only a shout away//with love that no jell cell or steel bars can separate// my wife speaks kind words soothing my mental pain an longin// but my heart hurts that my son is gonna hafta grow up without me// da voices come back this time a little more demanding// subtle then louder, "DEATH IS CERTIN" slowly my own suicide goes into plannin// I not the enemy control my fate, my hands catchin my face, wonderin y i joined the army in the first place// da voices scream daily instructin me to strangle myself wit my jacket sleeve// but some kind of resolve keeps a hold of me// but i begin to lash out at reason, and find comfort in my madness// an hate BUSH for sendin me over here god damn that racist faggot// my laughs turn into screams as the sun goes down// feel like the walls r closin in on me, or chokin thinkin that a nigga bout to drown// "KILL YOURSELF" my subconsious other yells from the walls of my mind// suddenly i find the courage to end the pain stop the progress of life's line// i tie a millitary knot from my 2 bunk-bed cot to stranggle me// i usher myself to the hole in the knot and catch memories strangly// a tears falls my inner madness is joyed that the pain will soon end//i drop from my cot ready to die but instead thrusted into the arms of family and friendz i got rescued |
Voted For: mic-wrecker
mic-wrecker took this...stronger punches...betta flow... Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
plz explain that......................................
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how is anyone giving him votes, he didnt even to teh topic, *schizophernia* meaning you hear voices inside your head, your real paranoid, all the time..... all he talked aobut was hearing himself, not anyone else
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Voted For: mic-wrecker
nice drops both of u guys i could really feel both verse i think MIC's was a lil better dough more destriptive n better vocab need 2 change da structure so it flow better but overall good drop Ill keep doin ya thing be more destriptive wit yo lines u'll win alot dawg vote honestly on da battles in my sig |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
THEY BOTH WAS TYTE..YALL BOTH GET MAD PROPS BUT THIS 1 WAS A LIL BETTA BUT MIC YOURS WAS HOT 2 MICWRECKWER GOOD SHT MAYN KEEP UP THA GOOD WORK Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
uppin this battle
its my 1st topical but dont get mad ill..... |
uppin this shit now!!!!!
lets get them votes in ppl |
can i get honest votes from u guys
on da battles in my sig |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
ILL...your verse was good..but it was well written, had good imagery and told a nice story. It flowed well and structure was on point....so even i thought it was off topic from beginning to end it was a good drop and I'll give you........7/10 Young......ok your drop was ok, had went into detail more, u would have won this but u didn't i think u didnt ended the story so good tho..good story tho...imagery was aight..jus stay at it cuz u def, gon be good, I'll give ya a........6/10 |
lol i meant mic-wrecker instead of young...my fault..
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Voted For: mic-wrecker
ILLegitimate: You did good with the topic, but u were bouncing all over the place. You did good on the schizophrenic part, cuz it sounds mad confusing. If u could have put more info in this, it would have been tight. mic-wrecker: I liked everything about yours. I followed every line with ease (even though it was lengthy). It had a lot of emotion in it, and it sounded like it was a true story. U got my vote. |
Voted For: mic-wrecker
This is one sided here. mic-wrecker had a much better verse. I loved how the story line led to a twist. It was a nice ending. Throughout I continued to lose track of the flow though. It seems it has structure, but I couldn't match the structure to the flow, know what im sayin? illegitamate, you just didn't have enough details. You came a little trite and predictable. Just too simple for the topic at hand. Even though the flow was nice. I liked that line about droppin lines and prayers though. It was a decent effort. you get some props but mic-wrecker gets my vote |
Voted For: mic-wrecker
yo i like this flow it was a lil to much of tha ordanary shit but it wass koo Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
Nice flow...on topic...and nice structure. Some lines mic-wrecker had were hot. But there was times in my mind you went off the subject. Your structure made me abit woozy. It was alot to read and bunched up. But...don't take this as me saying your verse was trash cause it wasn't. Hands down you had a nice verse. I think because ILL stuck on topic and had a sorta story going it was hot. |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
alright im gonna say ILL took this one... it was close.. but his story was just a little more detailed... flow could have been better for both... but im gonna have to go with ILL due to his story being a little better |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
good battle.. illegitimate got my vote though, i liked the story and the vocab in his verse, the rhyme scheme was nice as well.. mic-wrecker i liked ur verse but i didnt follow it as well as illegitimates..no hate v/ill |
jus read the flow an u will see who the clear winner izzz......ME!!!!
stop these bullshit votes an get the real onez in |
Voted For: mic-wrecker
Vote:mic-wrecker Lyrics: mic-wrecker Wordplay:mic-wrecker Multies:mic wrecka Punches:neither Topic coverage: mic wrecka--more detail and sick..mo to do with Iraq less skitso stuff but still gd Overall: mic-wrecker Illegitimate shit was to miscelleanous whereas mic wrekas was mo like a detailed story. Word. |
Voted For: ILLegitimate
wow this battle was pretty good but because ill just plainly had better flow and better verses i have to give it to him.the man knows how to spit about the subject. the other guy needs to step it up cuzc that stuff is weak. anyways my vote is illeginamate. |
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